
kemthis satori's description (my fersona)
i finally cleaned this up and got it to how i like it. i'm hopping some kind soul will take a look at this and be willing to gift me with some art of him, but i know that's selfish and i have no earth monies for a commission. so i leave it up to you, the reader. all i ask in earnest is that you leave me some feedback and let me know if my writing is any good. i really need an unbiased opinion and to know what i need to improve on.
blua blua blua, i talk to much. anyway, hope you enjoy it.
A chimera, Kemthis’s scaled skin shines like a polished gem. They are small except for at the chest, his abdominal area, and following down the bottom length of his tail. His blood comes from that of a succubus, the Sartans, the Patryns, and ruby dragon of the labyrinth. Crimson red scales make up most of the coloration decorating his hide. Alternating large black and small green dragon stripes line his body similar to the stripes of a tiger. His wings are membranous. Shaded with black on there inner folds and seeming to be bleached along the bones. There exterior is the same fiery red as most of his other scales. Covering his body are blue runes that leave only his palms, head, and bottom of his feet unmarked. All of which are intricately linked, though none of them overlap.
Six horns adorn his head. They crest from the start of the hairline. They are black with chalky green coloration at there tip that make them look tarnished. The first two horns curve like a katana upward and slightly back. They extend nearly half a foot. The second pair curving back from just before the top of the head, laying back and arcing forty degrees above the horizon. The last of the horns come from just past the top of the head. These jut almost strait back like the sword of the samurai facing the sky. A slight upward tilt gives the suggestion downward slash just being released. Together they could almost be the tracers of the blades tip during the swing.
The spines along his back and tail are close set with no more then three inches between them. Holding to the shape of a raptor claw they continue in a single row. Starting at a height of only an inch at the base of the neck, they raise to three inches and pettier out to a height of one half at the tip of the tail. The aforementioned limb being almost five feet long and as thick as his wrist at its base and coming to a nub the size of his thumb at it tip.
Just below the wings are two pairs of segmented tentacles. A foot short of his tail, they are only half as thick. The bone like sections are about two inches in length, they protect them from damage as well as making them affective weapons. Such rigged defenses make them much less flexible then such appendages normally could be. There’re able to grab objects no smaller then a bottleneck or sword handle; but, only if wound about a few times. The grip still being a little loose and there fine manipulation is far inferior to his hands.
His hair is a deep midnight black frosted with emerald green. It is long and spikes out as it flows down the back of his neck and between his wings. Bangs with the horizon of a shark’s jaws hang down to just above his eyes. Scattered threw ought the main of his hair, silver clasped bands shine with what look like Celtic runes. These ties hold his hair in place through the use of a web work, keeping the long stands from obscuring his vision during fast movement. His eyes gleam gold in the sunlight. A single vertical slash of void is the pupil. They are those of a reptile; or perhaps, a demon. The iris’s peering into the soul with sight beyond that of any mortal man.
His hands are for the most part that of a human’s anatomy. The bone structure is a great deal more durable then a man’s, able to lock firmly into a solid weapon. Meant to slash into both flesh and bone with great power. The claws that extend from the fingers are curved talons. The inside of the crescent is as sharp as any blade used in combat. There overall composition is geared toward digging through the flesh and latching onto the bone beneath. His feet are those of a creature meant to run. The heel raised high and extended to the length of about a foot. The claws are much longer then those on the hands. At least a third of a foot in length, they hold to the same shape and design as those on his hands. He is able to dig into the ground before springing into the air for flight. There overall form is close a dragons, but with minor alterations to support a primarily upright posture.
He keeps himself in excellent physical condition. He has never been interested in muscle that would restrict his movement. Built more like a gymnast then a body builder, he prides agility and the ability to avoid physical damage rather then dealing it out. That in mind, part of every day is spent maintaining his ability to stay one step ahead of the enemy.
His face is that of a young man. No more then half way threw his twenties. His muzzle is lined with vicious looking teeth that curve back, latching into the meat and tearing it away from the flesh from the bone. The muzzle its self is short, ending in less then three inches. He had never had a need to root through his prays bowls and was never intended to, his hands always doing that work for him. His tongue is forked like that of a lizard, able to extend a foot from his mouth. The face is for the most part humanoid though. In place of eyebrows he has a small line of upward curving horns. The ears are like that of an elf. Both about five inches long and holding to the shape of a spearhead. The form portrays the face of a dragon evolving toward human.
His pants are simple jeans, once black, but have faded a great deal in there days of use. Now there color is more that of half burned coal. His hands, forearms, and feet are wrapped in honey leather died black. This thin, durable hide helps him to endure the onslaught of constant blows.
blua blua blua, i talk to much. anyway, hope you enjoy it.
A chimera, Kemthis’s scaled skin shines like a polished gem. They are small except for at the chest, his abdominal area, and following down the bottom length of his tail. His blood comes from that of a succubus, the Sartans, the Patryns, and ruby dragon of the labyrinth. Crimson red scales make up most of the coloration decorating his hide. Alternating large black and small green dragon stripes line his body similar to the stripes of a tiger. His wings are membranous. Shaded with black on there inner folds and seeming to be bleached along the bones. There exterior is the same fiery red as most of his other scales. Covering his body are blue runes that leave only his palms, head, and bottom of his feet unmarked. All of which are intricately linked, though none of them overlap.
Six horns adorn his head. They crest from the start of the hairline. They are black with chalky green coloration at there tip that make them look tarnished. The first two horns curve like a katana upward and slightly back. They extend nearly half a foot. The second pair curving back from just before the top of the head, laying back and arcing forty degrees above the horizon. The last of the horns come from just past the top of the head. These jut almost strait back like the sword of the samurai facing the sky. A slight upward tilt gives the suggestion downward slash just being released. Together they could almost be the tracers of the blades tip during the swing.
The spines along his back and tail are close set with no more then three inches between them. Holding to the shape of a raptor claw they continue in a single row. Starting at a height of only an inch at the base of the neck, they raise to three inches and pettier out to a height of one half at the tip of the tail. The aforementioned limb being almost five feet long and as thick as his wrist at its base and coming to a nub the size of his thumb at it tip.
Just below the wings are two pairs of segmented tentacles. A foot short of his tail, they are only half as thick. The bone like sections are about two inches in length, they protect them from damage as well as making them affective weapons. Such rigged defenses make them much less flexible then such appendages normally could be. There’re able to grab objects no smaller then a bottleneck or sword handle; but, only if wound about a few times. The grip still being a little loose and there fine manipulation is far inferior to his hands.
His hair is a deep midnight black frosted with emerald green. It is long and spikes out as it flows down the back of his neck and between his wings. Bangs with the horizon of a shark’s jaws hang down to just above his eyes. Scattered threw ought the main of his hair, silver clasped bands shine with what look like Celtic runes. These ties hold his hair in place through the use of a web work, keeping the long stands from obscuring his vision during fast movement. His eyes gleam gold in the sunlight. A single vertical slash of void is the pupil. They are those of a reptile; or perhaps, a demon. The iris’s peering into the soul with sight beyond that of any mortal man.
His hands are for the most part that of a human’s anatomy. The bone structure is a great deal more durable then a man’s, able to lock firmly into a solid weapon. Meant to slash into both flesh and bone with great power. The claws that extend from the fingers are curved talons. The inside of the crescent is as sharp as any blade used in combat. There overall composition is geared toward digging through the flesh and latching onto the bone beneath. His feet are those of a creature meant to run. The heel raised high and extended to the length of about a foot. The claws are much longer then those on the hands. At least a third of a foot in length, they hold to the same shape and design as those on his hands. He is able to dig into the ground before springing into the air for flight. There overall form is close a dragons, but with minor alterations to support a primarily upright posture.
He keeps himself in excellent physical condition. He has never been interested in muscle that would restrict his movement. Built more like a gymnast then a body builder, he prides agility and the ability to avoid physical damage rather then dealing it out. That in mind, part of every day is spent maintaining his ability to stay one step ahead of the enemy.
His face is that of a young man. No more then half way threw his twenties. His muzzle is lined with vicious looking teeth that curve back, latching into the meat and tearing it away from the flesh from the bone. The muzzle its self is short, ending in less then three inches. He had never had a need to root through his prays bowls and was never intended to, his hands always doing that work for him. His tongue is forked like that of a lizard, able to extend a foot from his mouth. The face is for the most part humanoid though. In place of eyebrows he has a small line of upward curving horns. The ears are like that of an elf. Both about five inches long and holding to the shape of a spearhead. The form portrays the face of a dragon evolving toward human.
His pants are simple jeans, once black, but have faded a great deal in there days of use. Now there color is more that of half burned coal. His hands, forearms, and feet are wrapped in honey leather died black. This thin, durable hide helps him to endure the onslaught of constant blows.
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Nicely written description you have here. I like how use normal objects and known species to describe how he looks. He sounds like a beautiful character, but he sure does have a lot going on as far as his description goes. Personally, I think a stats page would help people who want to draw him. For a while I had a hard time telling if he was supposed to be an anthro or a feral creature.
The writing is good and works for a story setting, but I think it could be simplified for the use of an artist drawing this character.
I hope that helps, he sounds like an awesome character I would like to draw, but I draw better from ref images.
The writing is good and works for a story setting, but I think it could be simplified for the use of an artist drawing this character.
I hope that helps, he sounds like an awesome character I would like to draw, but I draw better from ref images.
nice. I like the part of the tentacles... you said nothing about how they wind oput of the body, am I right? Well I'd depict it differently as -k- but that doesn't matter. He's a cool character for sure! If I had time to draw for free I'd draw him, but I don't have the time to draw the many things I want to alongsidfe to my study. =/ So I have to leave my time for my little projects, commissions and gifts for freinds.
it's cool, i know how time can be fleeting. i'm happy you like him so much though. i wish i had the money to commission you to do him with your love of the design. i just now started to get decent hours at my few month old job. i'll have to talk with you some time in the future about it.
to answer your question about the tentacles on the back, there wasn't anything in there besides info on placement of the fore mentioned limbs. i can tell you that they are ball jointed next to the spine under the wings and have a little bit of a scaly cuticle at the point of protrusion.
i hope that gives you a better idea of how he gets to play with them.
to answer your question about the tentacles on the back, there wasn't anything in there besides info on placement of the fore mentioned limbs. i can tell you that they are ball jointed next to the spine under the wings and have a little bit of a scaly cuticle at the point of protrusion.
i hope that gives you a better idea of how he gets to play with them.
i thought the ball joint would work best for them under the wings because it gives it the close relation to the spine for quick response time. it is also a good place to keep them from being obtrusive with most other actions he preforms. even with flight he cold streamline them to be out of the way and help with the trickier aerial maneuvers.
i even thought of doing a scene in one of my stories at some point were he lost the use of his arm. then wound two of his tentacles around the arm to continue fighting. i think that could be an awesome moment in my writing.
i even thought of doing a scene in one of my stories at some point were he lost the use of his arm. then wound two of his tentacles around the arm to continue fighting. i think that could be an awesome moment in my writing.
to kelp clarify the joint were they join with the body, think of the way an elephants tusks have a thin layer of skin along the base of them. just think of that having a skin design more like your thumb. leeway for it to move. a bit of folding in the direction it is tilted.
one of the reason i go so far with a description is my desire for a person to get as close to metal picture i have of the character. this is also because they are the guidelines for the first pictures of my characters and i try to get them as close as possible to begin with.
i do know what you mean though. i have a tendency to draw things out as much as steven king. i'm not quite to the level of tolken's descriptive negative, but some day i might be. i know i'm never short the words.
i tried not to be as bad in my stories. i even have one done as an audio reading if you'd like to give it a listen.
i do know what you mean though. i have a tendency to draw things out as much as steven king. i'm not quite to the level of tolken's descriptive negative, but some day i might be. i know i'm never short the words.
i tried not to be as bad in my stories. i even have one done as an audio reading if you'd like to give it a listen.
all kinds. XD i try to keep myself open, but for original works i tend to go for the fantasy adventure type. i do have one adult story so far in my gallery called, "what a job" that i did as a trade with my friend shugo, the one that i read is more of the fairytale type and i had a lot of fun writing it. i even left and obligatory moment in the story that only those with a dirty mind would catch. i thought it would be fitting since i was posting it on fa.
right now i'm working on a story that actually is long enough for chapters! i've got the rough draft of the first in chapter in my scraps and it is technically not even mature yet. i do however intend to tun it into my most fetish oriented extravaganza by the time i'm done. *starts playing circus music* i'm going to try and fit everything i can in their as long as it doesn't personally offend me. the hard part about all of this is that i still want it to have a real story. that's why the first chapter doesn't even have anything adult in it, i want to build plot for it. somethi8ng a lot of porn writers on fa tend to skimp on.
right now i'm working on a story that actually is long enough for chapters! i've got the rough draft of the first in chapter in my scraps and it is technically not even mature yet. i do however intend to tun it into my most fetish oriented extravaganza by the time i'm done. *starts playing circus music* i'm going to try and fit everything i can in their as long as it doesn't personally offend me. the hard part about all of this is that i still want it to have a real story. that's why the first chapter doesn't even have anything adult in it, i want to build plot for it. somethi8ng a lot of porn writers on fa tend to skimp on.
i've really been dragging my feet on it to be honest. i need to work on it more. i don't think i've even touched it in two weeks, erk.
more people wanting to see it sould totally give me some intensive boost to work on it some more though. at this point the plan is to finish the second chapter and then do a second draft of the first so it fits with the fallowing events better and i can get all of my errors out of it.
then its lather, rinse, and repeat.
more people wanting to see it sould totally give me some intensive boost to work on it some more though. at this point the plan is to finish the second chapter and then do a second draft of the first so it fits with the fallowing events better and i can get all of my errors out of it.
then its lather, rinse, and repeat.
it shall be done, just at procrastinator speed. your free to read the first chapter at some point if you want. it's all full of errors and everything, but kemthis one of two main characters. the other is my friend
vandroiy . it's turning out to be a lot like an anime or manga plot line the way it looks now and i'm not talking dirty either, it's just got that comicy/hero vs. villian feel that you get with most of them. i'm hoping to put a lot more depth into it as i go, but i have no idea how yet.
...i'll figure it out eventually though. i don't know half of what's going to happen in a story tell i'm writing it. it keeps the story flowing when you only base events of a vague outline and make the story from that. i get to tie it all together nice and neat with the editing though.

...i'll figure it out eventually though. i don't know half of what's going to happen in a story tell i'm writing it. it keeps the story flowing when you only base events of a vague outline and make the story from that. i get to tie it all together nice and neat with the editing though.
thank you so much for all the complements!
it took me a really long time to get that description to what it is now. ^^; i think something like 2 months of fin tuning every week or so. it was a soul search as well, so that took a lot too.
i doubt i'll publish any of the work i do hear any time soon. *sigh* i have no where near the free time and motivation these days to maintain my writing at a decent pace. i want to get to that point before i even think of going for the gold. ^^
i do have plans to finish the story, "still water" witch i am working on now. the rough draft of the first chapter is in my scraps if you would like to check it out. it has been hellishly slow work on the story and i haven't touched it in about a month. i'm always too burnt out after i get home from my job these days that i'm not up for thinking about much.
i plan to kick my but into gear though. i've been listening to, "the dark tower" series for inspiration like i did in the old days and am getting that love of the idea again. something i've missed a lot. now i just need to build up the motivation and get too it again.
it took me a really long time to get that description to what it is now. ^^; i think something like 2 months of fin tuning every week or so. it was a soul search as well, so that took a lot too.
i doubt i'll publish any of the work i do hear any time soon. *sigh* i have no where near the free time and motivation these days to maintain my writing at a decent pace. i want to get to that point before i even think of going for the gold. ^^
i do have plans to finish the story, "still water" witch i am working on now. the rough draft of the first chapter is in my scraps if you would like to check it out. it has been hellishly slow work on the story and i haven't touched it in about a month. i'm always too burnt out after i get home from my job these days that i'm not up for thinking about much.
i plan to kick my but into gear though. i've been listening to, "the dark tower" series for inspiration like i did in the old days and am getting that love of the idea again. something i've missed a lot. now i just need to build up the motivation and get too it again.
thank you so much for all your kind words. i know i have a tendency to myslef down more then anything else.
your right that it will become finished eventually. and i am delighted that you have such confidence in my abilities. ^^ be warned though, the rough draft is just that, chock full of unchecked work that has oodles of errors. XD
...i'll fix it in the second draft. XD
your right that it will become finished eventually. and i am delighted that you have such confidence in my abilities. ^^ be warned though, the rough draft is just that, chock full of unchecked work that has oodles of errors. XD
...i'll fix it in the second draft. XD
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