I'd say this is one of my favorites, too. the research that went into volcanoes was omg. I knew I needed a new character and, like before, this character was nothing like I had planned. the original plan would have broken away from the sense the rest of the story made, and I remember Cinnabar Island having erupted in the games, so I figured hey, this will make perfect sense. as for the pokemon training a human thing, you know what's funny? until you said something, I never really thought of it like that

eheh ^^;

really? wow. that's a lot .. .. and thanks ^^

Epic... I don't think that "Bomb" could describe lava. I would say something closer to a river, of course, it depends on what kind of eruption.... Quite a large number of people are getting turned into pokemon now >.> Now.... what will mew do.......

well, it can, if there is a lava bomb to be had. I mean, lava is flowy river sure, but a lava bomb is like.. lava inside a hardened lava shell that has various means of exploding. that's why it's a lava 'bomb' ^-^

OMG-BURNING-GRAVELER-ON-FIRE-USING-EXPLOSION-AND FALLING-AND-USING-ROLL-OUT-AT-THE-SAME-TIME >..>

>->;

"Casualties were quickly extracted, and all valuables ignored, as the officers rushed for the shore."

What? No theives or enterprising individuals? Surely you jest!
I think it would be more entertaining if he jumped through the window and landed on the ground in agonizing pain. He could still survive, but he'd be staggering or limping.
If Ash got in the gas tank, that would be tragic.
Use of terminology like caldera and the scientific stuff makes this story a lot better than some I've read.

“You’re real?!” he exclaims, sounding as surprised as he looks. “ You’re really real?! Where am I?"
"You're in a real place called the `Cool World.' No, wait. That's the wrong story."

"Her statement about ‘another form’ had been particularly confusing and, not necessarily wanting to agree to help without the confusion cleared, decides to inquire about this. “Another form?’ he asks, clearly sounding confused."

You could probably condense this chunk of text to have him simply say "Another form?" All the thoughts and questions and feelings would be implied and understood without an explanation.

“Deal! .. now, close your eyes, think of the pokemon you’d like to become.. Don’t choose anything too big, just choose a nice, small pokemon you like.” she says, closing her eyes. After a few minutes, she nods, and pokes him on the forehead. ‘I sense it.” she says. "Yes. MAGICARP!"
"Damn," said the flopping fish. "It just popped in there."

it's a massive volcanic eruption. lava balls are reigning from the sky. ash is pouring down. people are in danger of death, and there's looting in the streets? this seemed more than unlikely to me so no enterprising individuals
perhaps it would have been, but I didn't go down that route of damaging him too badly
thank you. I did a lot of research on volcanic eruptions, lava bombs, and I researched into what sort of eruption would produce how the island looked in Gold/Silver/Crystal, so I really appreciate that ^^ I didn't want to make a totally unrealistic portion, even if it's a back story. i thought it'd improve the story as a whole

sorry, dont get the reference ^^;

yes, but that would be far too condensed. besides, I prefer to explore his feelings than let the person interpret them. I'm trying my best to show, not tell

Ghostbusters?

raining*

That one quote was from the movie Cool World.
http://mogwaitoejam.wordpress.com/2.....-crack-part-1/

Hmm...I guess looters wouldn't like lava bombs too much.

I guess that was a Ghostbusters reference, but if he just happened to think of a Magicarp, he'd be screwed.

I'll check the link out later

heh, yeah. definitely not. if it wasn't that it would be the ash, or the possible pyroclastic flow

well, not necessarily. I'm sure Mew isn't THAT cold.