The melody is really good, but the instruments sound 'wrong' somehow. It might sound better if you used higher quality samples. Alternatively, since you're going for a retro sound, I bet that song would make an awesome chiptune. Maybe you could get some NESsoundchip or SID samples?

Though, that's just my thoughts, it's a good song anyways. I'm not even a musician, just a dabbler. ^.^;;

I like it!

Very sweet, natural-sounding melody with a simple harmony. Good job!

I should mention, while I'm thinking of it, that the beginning part of the chorus section - the first two bars there that only have three different notes between them - are actually part of a larger overall musical theme of the world. It's supposed to sound slightly synthesized and unreal because their world works, in important ways, just like a large computer. It's even called 'The System'.

good tune but I think it's a bit too calm, maybe. has more of a "world map" feel than "hub level" feel