Darn it, you should have used fluke's pic for your thumbnail!

This is beautiful!!

The repeat of "A fragment of your shattered soul" in the first and third stanza is beautiful symmetry.

And the last two lines...if it were iambic pentameter, I would call it a heroic couplet.

Very, very well done!

Why thank you!! =P

That "fragment" is quite symbolic to the poem. Being how the poem was rather short and that the speaker goes through a revival phase, I felt it would be effective to repeat that line. ^^

And OH how you love those heroic couplets!!! lol

(as do I) =3

*hugs* ^^

Yeah, they are a nice way to summarize a sonnet.

"I am grateful that you took the time to plant yourself and grow in me."

HOW!! I MUST HAVE YOUR AWESOME!! I MUST!!!!! Witty crafted with awesome awesome. I am at a loss of words. So all i can say is awesome. Awesome...

Awesome.

Yeah, what he said. That line brought a tear to my eye.

(O.O)

Did it really? =O

Wow, I'm so glad you liked it!! \(ToT)/

Guess my first attempt at a love poem was most successful. =/

You guys are the BEST!! x3

AWEsome! =P

Faved!

I'm glad you liked it! =P

deep
and so is the image

*rubs hands together manically* >=3

Yes...yes...DEPTH!! \(^o^)/

*insert evil laugh here*

Your comment is WELL appreciated! =D

Thanks! ^^

Deep and contemplative.
Loving the I.P. at the end.
It just makes me sad that the narrator has to let whoever it is go..
I would have held on ;)

Yeah, I know what you mean. =3

But, though it's not DIRECTLY implied, the lover is actually deceased. =/

The speaker has been holding on to that memoir for quite some time, contemplating his future without his lover (somewhat selfishly). =(

In the end, somehow, she reminds him that he will never truly forget her. The times they shared are irremovable from his own heart. Of course, in most cases, holding on to something as a memoir is perfectly fine, I'd like to think. It's just that I wrote the poem to the specifications of the picture I was inspired by, in which the rose was taken by the wind. ^^

*sigh*

Oh love... \(^o^)/

Awww... Now that you put it that way, it makes perfect sense. I guess one of the best things about poetry is the mystery

I as an artist, am often my harshest critic, but when I read this, I feel as though perhaps there is indeed something I am doing right. That there is some mysterious purpose behind my emotions and scribbles. That perhaps the emotions that fuel me to express my heart, even if only a little, are translated beyond cyberspace to actually affect another conscious entity, in and equally beautifully sad way. This is beautiful, and touching. Thank you for sharing it, it provides me artistic sustenance and a glint of clarity through my foggy window.

You're quite welcome!! \(^o^)/

I was fortunate to stumble upon this pic. Also, I think it true for every field of art that the artist him/herself is their harshest critic. =/

Anyhoo, you are most CERTAINLY doing something right! Better yet, you're doing everything right!! =O

Poetry is just a hobby of mine, but I so enjoy it. I may not be able to draw, but I can paint a picture with words. My only wish is to share my canvas of words with others. =D

As of late, I have found inspiration in several FA pics, but never have I seen something as breathtaking as this one.

You have my thanks. ^^

Take care and keep it up! =3

Oh my goodness............................O_O

This poem was so beautiful. I'm at a lost for words. And you know, that I always have something to say. ^^
Every line I read, made my heart a little bit heavier. So many emotions portrayed in such a simple piece of work. I'm a huge sucker for romantic stuff.

A definite fave for me. *Gives really tight hug* That's my way of saying thanks. ^_^

Well, I am most appreciative of your kind words and apparently TIGHT hug!! \(^o^)/

It seems that everyone is loving my FIRST attempt at a love poem =/

I still owe so much to  Fluke though. Couldn't have done it without'em!! =D

Thank you soo much mah furiend!! x3

I need serious mental help, I am jealous as hell at this. You are able to put words into feelings as I can't. I am not good at much other than writing, yet my skills are far from great.

I'm sorry D-Tail, I love this, I just...I try so hard, and every step I make, I always find myself falling again. A;ways find a way to put myself down because I want to be somewhere I am not.

Well, I certainly CAN'T say that I HAVEN'T been where you are once. =/

In fact, at times...I may still feel like this. =3

*hugs you* ^^

I'm glad you liked this piece. Man, love is one hell of a topic! (o.o)

Now see here, we're gonna have to talk some more later. I'll definitely try to do what I can to make ya feel better about yourself. None of us lack purpose; it's just that FINDING it is rather difficult. =/

No worries man. I know I want to become a writer as a profession, just the freedom, the art, the ideals. I love to philosophize, and I have plenty of ideas, but I haven't had a teacher accept me as a student to learn the skills necessary to achieve my goals in the long term. I feel a need to vastly improve my vocabulary skills, and master structure in poetry. I want to learn how to express my feelings to their fullest, and I know that I can, it will take time and practice. As of now, the stuff that I write takes an hour on average. I know I can do better. I am a supreme amateur, but I am no n00b; I need a guide, and I am hoping eventually to find one. Once I learn the skill, I can work on mastering the technique and begin adding my own personality to my works, at which point I will be able to proceed on to even greater achievements. All will take time. I am only 17 after all; I have a lifetime ahead of me to perfect the art which is non-perfectible due to no such thing as perfection.

Well, it seems like you have all of your priorities straight. =P

I believe you can accomplish your long-time goal as well. ^^

ALSO, you say it takes you about an hour to write what you do? =/

Hehe, it takes me on average 3 days to finish something; sometimes a week, but that's quite rare. =3

There's no need to rush your work. It will be finished when you finish it. Just make sure that ALL of your feelings have been put into it. Also, for me anyways, I like to mask my feelings with imagery. Metaphors can resemble ANYTHING you want them to. THAT my good furiend, is the BEAUTY of poetry! =O

'There's no need for grammar or structure inside: A great poets words are those self-defined.' theJaQkel

That's my personal quote on my page at the moment. Now, do realize that by 'no need for grammar and structure' I mean that you can play with them a bit and get away with it. Lewis Carol in 'Through the Looking Glass' when speaking to Humpty Dumpty, Humpty Dumpty mentioned that words can mean whatever you want them to mean, if you give them your own definition, thus is how they will be defined.

I love all sorts of literary techniques, alliteration, allusions, similes, metaphors, metonymy. These are the spices to the perfect vision.

wow, that's really vivid!! Such imagery, such emotion! I really liked this:
"A fragment of your shattered soul is all I have, but now I know;
its vernal pulse must be returned so that you can be truly free."
it's bittersweet, but not in some emo way, it's just honest and I really like that. ^^

Awww!! x3

*hugs*

Well thank you very much; I really appreciate your comments. =3

In poetry, I find IMAGERY to be my BEST friend! ;D

It seems to be my strong point, being able to look at something and describe it WITHOUT mentioning IT. lol

GOTTA love them metaphors! \(^o^)/

More poetic goodness is ON its way! ^^

Thanks again! ;P

keep up the good work then. X3

Moast EXCELLENT!! This could be the best one I've read by you so far! It's personal, and believable, and absolutely undeniably REAL! The words are a representation of that which makes us alive, and human.

WOOT! \(^o^)/

And THAT'S why it will forever remain my FEATURED SUBMISSION! =/

I'll be truthful, I REALLY don't think I'll EVER top this one! =O

That aside, thank you SO much for the EXTREMELY nice comment and fave! :>