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You all know me to be a solid writer striving to make a name for myself in the mainstream market. However, as I've come to realize, I cannot do this without the help of friends and volunteers who are willing and able to give my tales a try to see if they truly are worthy of taking up shelf space at a Borders, Walden Books, or Amazon.com.
For this reason, I have elected to share with all of you my "Agent Editions" of my two, master projects. If you could find the time, I would genuinely appreciate any and all thoughts on the validity of these works as I can discover whether-or-not my time writing them is worth it, or not.
Please note that, if interest is expressed, I am considering posting more of the story for review. One cannot hope to succeed in the world of writing and publishing without good feedback. Please note that, to anyone who is kind enough to help and is genuinely interested, I will be certain to include your name, if you'd like, in the books' "Special Thanks" section should they ever be successfully picked up.
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The tale you have here is my current endeavor, PROJECT EZIL. It is loosely based on my real life experiences growing up with a visual disability. However, unlike me, the main character, Bo Foxtrot, learns to get over her pride at a much earlier age and gets to do a number of fantastic things related to overcoming her disability.
If you've read the first five chapters of PROJECT EZIL before, you have no need to read this. However, if you haven't, I invite you to take a journey with me to the world of Ezil where foxes, wolves, and other mammals rule a world all their own that is watched over by three unique gods.
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AGENT SYNOPSIS:
PROJECT EZIL is the tale of a fox girl named Bo who wants to be just like everyone else. However, unlike everyone else, she was born with an ocular disease that limits her usable vision to barely half that of anyone else.
Throughout PROJECT EZIL, Bo learns to not only accept herself for who she is, but also how to overcome her shortcomings. All the while working hand-in-hand with one of Ezil's great lords in an effort to save the world from an impending evil that is bent on taking the world and restructuring it to his own whims.
The overall gist of PROJECT EZIL is to show how, despite one's situation, they can rise above and beyond any and all expectations. Filled with magic, alchemy, and self-discovery, PROJECT EZIL promises to inspire individuals from all walks of life while telling an engaging and entertaining story that will be hard to put down. It's innovative, "sketch" system allows readers with short periods of time available to them to progress through the book at a comfortable pace while, should extra time be allotted, encouraging readers to head into the next section knowing that the next big, plot twist is just around the corner.
For this reason, I have elected to share with all of you my "Agent Editions" of my two, master projects. If you could find the time, I would genuinely appreciate any and all thoughts on the validity of these works as I can discover whether-or-not my time writing them is worth it, or not.
Please note that, if interest is expressed, I am considering posting more of the story for review. One cannot hope to succeed in the world of writing and publishing without good feedback. Please note that, to anyone who is kind enough to help and is genuinely interested, I will be certain to include your name, if you'd like, in the books' "Special Thanks" section should they ever be successfully picked up.
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The tale you have here is my current endeavor, PROJECT EZIL. It is loosely based on my real life experiences growing up with a visual disability. However, unlike me, the main character, Bo Foxtrot, learns to get over her pride at a much earlier age and gets to do a number of fantastic things related to overcoming her disability.
If you've read the first five chapters of PROJECT EZIL before, you have no need to read this. However, if you haven't, I invite you to take a journey with me to the world of Ezil where foxes, wolves, and other mammals rule a world all their own that is watched over by three unique gods.
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AGENT SYNOPSIS:
PROJECT EZIL is the tale of a fox girl named Bo who wants to be just like everyone else. However, unlike everyone else, she was born with an ocular disease that limits her usable vision to barely half that of anyone else.
Throughout PROJECT EZIL, Bo learns to not only accept herself for who she is, but also how to overcome her shortcomings. All the while working hand-in-hand with one of Ezil's great lords in an effort to save the world from an impending evil that is bent on taking the world and restructuring it to his own whims.
The overall gist of PROJECT EZIL is to show how, despite one's situation, they can rise above and beyond any and all expectations. Filled with magic, alchemy, and self-discovery, PROJECT EZIL promises to inspire individuals from all walks of life while telling an engaging and entertaining story that will be hard to put down. It's innovative, "sketch" system allows readers with short periods of time available to them to progress through the book at a comfortable pace while, should extra time be allotted, encouraging readers to head into the next section knowing that the next big, plot twist is just around the corner.
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Oh, today I downloaded the stories, even though I haven't read em yet, and I think for Project Ezil the last few pages had writing, but the text was in white so it didn't show up? Maybe it messed up when I downloaded it... but are those ready to read too? :3 Maybe you wrote a note about it somewhere and I missed it... just something I noticed when I skinned through.
Ah, you have come to my rescue yet again, Oxnard. That is yet ANOTHER oops made as a result of my Adaptive Technology over here.
A funny note to share. Before I knew how to use Accessibility Options, or before they were apt for MS Office, I would re-configure Word Documents at the start by switching the background color to BLACK and the text color to WHITE. Later, I'd go back and correct this to ensure people could read it.
Now, as you noticed, I neglected to properly convert these pages. A matter that MS Word 2003 fixed and, because of it, I don't make the same, tedious mistake over-and-over again. Because of this, I will try and re-upload the file with the correction of making the WHITE text AUTOMATIC. Noting that I am not setting it to BLACK, because I've found times where doing so makes it not work right for everyone. AUTOMATIC does wonders for people who prefer a myriad of settings. Yep, yep, yep! Sure does!
So, with that said, I'm off to fix the blunder. In the meantime, if you can think of anything I can ever write for you, please let me know. I owe you BIG for all the saves you've done for me. You are too awesome and I only wish to be able to repay you in whatever way I can for your kindness and support. :)
A funny note to share. Before I knew how to use Accessibility Options, or before they were apt for MS Office, I would re-configure Word Documents at the start by switching the background color to BLACK and the text color to WHITE. Later, I'd go back and correct this to ensure people could read it.
Now, as you noticed, I neglected to properly convert these pages. A matter that MS Word 2003 fixed and, because of it, I don't make the same, tedious mistake over-and-over again. Because of this, I will try and re-upload the file with the correction of making the WHITE text AUTOMATIC. Noting that I am not setting it to BLACK, because I've found times where doing so makes it not work right for everyone. AUTOMATIC does wonders for people who prefer a myriad of settings. Yep, yep, yep! Sure does!
So, with that said, I'm off to fix the blunder. In the meantime, if you can think of anything I can ever write for you, please let me know. I owe you BIG for all the saves you've done for me. You are too awesome and I only wish to be able to repay you in whatever way I can for your kindness and support. :)
Whaaa? Black backgrounds and white text? Is that easier to read? :3 I always thought it was easier to see text dark against a light background, so that the black didn't dim things down and make it harder to see...
Then again, there's a quote I like that says "A small light shines best in darkness."
Hehe, you don't have to do anything for me... though, if I think of anything neat, I'll tell you! :3 I don't mind helpin' ya at all. :D
Then again, there's a quote I like that says "A small light shines best in darkness."
Hehe, you don't have to do anything for me... though, if I think of anything neat, I'll tell you! :3 I don't mind helpin' ya at all. :D
That's a great quote. Brings me back to the work you recently did with Oxnard painting the night sky. Quite inspiring.
As for the text / background situation, you are very correct in saying how black text is better on a white surface. However, in my case, my corrupted vision is no longer able to properly handle bright backgrounds. There is a haze my eye sees through now that, when hit with lots of light, bleeds things together into a foggy mess. It's for this reason that it is ideal for me to "Flip" the palette.
I'll be looking forward to whatever neat idea you come up with, too! Should there be any other aspect I can help you with, do not be afraid to ask either. I'm here to help in any way I can. Yep, yep, yep!
As for the text / background situation, you are very correct in saying how black text is better on a white surface. However, in my case, my corrupted vision is no longer able to properly handle bright backgrounds. There is a haze my eye sees through now that, when hit with lots of light, bleeds things together into a foggy mess. It's for this reason that it is ideal for me to "Flip" the palette.
I'll be looking forward to whatever neat idea you come up with, too! Should there be any other aspect I can help you with, do not be afraid to ask either. I'm here to help in any way I can. Yep, yep, yep!
Alright, I read the first three chapters! I guess I'll comment at each segment, since I'm bad at long reads in single sittings, and one long comment would probably make it so I forget stuff. With 9/15 pages done so far, the next 6 hopefully won't be too far from now. (:
It's kinda funny - right when I started wondering how old Bo was, her age was mentioned in the story. 13 is a good age for it. :3 I noticed .hack almost always picks 14 year olds for their stories and games. Sounds like your audience too? :3
I noticed there weren't as many sounds in the first part... a lack of a usual something in your work! But I think it's kind of nice too - it brings a good balance since, as I read ahead, found more of it again. Even when I think maybe there is a lot of onomatopoeia, I know I'd rather read a quick word and have fun imagining it than having it described. (: Either way is good, but like we've discussed before, it's more real when it comes at you suddenly.
Not sure if you wanted me to point out spelling, but at the end of page 5 something was "rusting about in the woods" - I'm not sure, it might be a verb I don't know, but did you mean "rustling" instead of "rusting"?
Looks like her scoutiness came into use in the third section! It's good that she has that going for her as well. (: If it were someone else, with no flashlight, it would have been even more confusing for 'em!
And she runs into a mysterious stranger, something I'll find out more about on the next read. :3
I do like the name Bo. :3 And it seems like she has a fun little world around her too! Both with the fantastical elements like different species, unexpected underground paths, and real things like some slight family troubles, or a world that seems quite similar to ours with streets and doctors and everyone.
Hmmm... what else! Short chapters always make me happy. 8D At first I just wrote about the first two chapters, but I saw the third was short so I read that much more. :D
Hmm, I didn't even finish the whole reading and I wrote a lot - I guess that's all for now then! :3
It's kinda funny - right when I started wondering how old Bo was, her age was mentioned in the story. 13 is a good age for it. :3 I noticed .hack almost always picks 14 year olds for their stories and games. Sounds like your audience too? :3
I noticed there weren't as many sounds in the first part... a lack of a usual something in your work! But I think it's kind of nice too - it brings a good balance since, as I read ahead, found more of it again. Even when I think maybe there is a lot of onomatopoeia, I know I'd rather read a quick word and have fun imagining it than having it described. (: Either way is good, but like we've discussed before, it's more real when it comes at you suddenly.
Not sure if you wanted me to point out spelling, but at the end of page 5 something was "rusting about in the woods" - I'm not sure, it might be a verb I don't know, but did you mean "rustling" instead of "rusting"?
Looks like her scoutiness came into use in the third section! It's good that she has that going for her as well. (: If it were someone else, with no flashlight, it would have been even more confusing for 'em!
And she runs into a mysterious stranger, something I'll find out more about on the next read. :3
I do like the name Bo. :3 And it seems like she has a fun little world around her too! Both with the fantastical elements like different species, unexpected underground paths, and real things like some slight family troubles, or a world that seems quite similar to ours with streets and doctors and everyone.
Hmmm... what else! Short chapters always make me happy. 8D At first I just wrote about the first two chapters, but I saw the third was short so I read that much more. :D
Hmm, I didn't even finish the whole reading and I wrote a lot - I guess that's all for now then! :3
Thank you so much for the thoughts, Ox! I especially am thankful for the correction you noted. I did mean to say "Rustling." I'll go fix that ASAP.
Sections 4 and 5 are when the story begins to take its "Magical" twist. My goal in writing it is to try and properly balance out Bo's ability to come to terms with her condition while using the adaptations she learns to evoke magical spells and achieve amazing feats.
I'm also glad you like the name I chose for her. Well, to be honest, I didn't so much choose it as it was what seemed right when I started developing the story in my head. For some reason, "Bo" just sounds right.
Once more, I can't thank you enough for the insight. It means a lot as I continue to develop this work. Right now, I am finishing Sketch 23 and am on page 72. :) By the way things are going, "Project: Ezil" is going to be MUCH larger in size than "City of Solitude." :)
Sections 4 and 5 are when the story begins to take its "Magical" twist. My goal in writing it is to try and properly balance out Bo's ability to come to terms with her condition while using the adaptations she learns to evoke magical spells and achieve amazing feats.
I'm also glad you like the name I chose for her. Well, to be honest, I didn't so much choose it as it was what seemed right when I started developing the story in my head. For some reason, "Bo" just sounds right.
Once more, I can't thank you enough for the insight. It means a lot as I continue to develop this work. Right now, I am finishing Sketch 23 and am on page 72. :) By the way things are going, "Project: Ezil" is going to be MUCH larger in size than "City of Solitude." :)
Woo! I noticed something! Hehe.
Ooh, magic? :3 That should be fun! Since the world is already in a fantasy setting, I think it makes magic funner to read about, rather than when it's randomly stuck in our world. (:
The only other Bo I know, aside from Little Bo Peep (?) or ...well I guess that's all. There's also a shy little boy in .hack named Bo, so it's a cute little name. (:
I wish you luck with the project! Sounds like you're having fun. :D
Ooh, magic? :3 That should be fun! Since the world is already in a fantasy setting, I think it makes magic funner to read about, rather than when it's randomly stuck in our world. (:
The only other Bo I know, aside from Little Bo Peep (?) or ...well I guess that's all. There's also a shy little boy in .hack named Bo, so it's a cute little name. (:
I wish you luck with the project! Sounds like you're having fun. :D
Oh, Ox, you have no idea. That's why I really hope it works out to some end. This work has A LOT of special value to me. One for it being a fantasy story, two as it is a partial biography of my life, and three that it allows me to pay homage to that wonderful summer I spent in Colorado.
Actually, as an update, the section I am at now is where Bo begins her training at the "Oxnard Center for the Blind." The place I attended was "The Colorado Center for the Blind," but I didn't want to use the same name. However, I am having a blast re-creating the instructors and fellow students' personalities through various furries. :) When I'm done, I'm going to at least share this story with the CCB and my sister to see if they can pick up on the "references." I'm really "Ham-Ham"ing it up! ;)
Actually, as an update, the section I am at now is where Bo begins her training at the "Oxnard Center for the Blind." The place I attended was "The Colorado Center for the Blind," but I didn't want to use the same name. However, I am having a blast re-creating the instructors and fellow students' personalities through various furries. :) When I'm done, I'm going to at least share this story with the CCB and my sister to see if they can pick up on the "references." I'm really "Ham-Ham"ing it up! ;)
I'll be hoping! :D And you know, just because your other project didn't get picked up doesn't mean it can't! Things are kinda tough out there... you could always resubmit it for publishing sometime later - even if that's years away or whenever things get better. One of my old professors said you should always try to put your writing to use, and keep working at it! I think the same goes for this project. I hope things work out, but even if things go differently, you can always give the story a shot at a different time too. :3
Oh, and a little thing ya reminded me, I don't think I said it but maybe I did. But I do like her mature personality. (: She mentioned focusing on what she can do instead of all the negative things she struggles with... I think hearing grown up things like that makes her more of a good role model? Or at least a good lead.
And it's neat how you're giving tribute to the Colorado place, and your pals there too! And it's really the OCB in your story? 8D Ehehe, wow! I am honored! :D I hope it does her well - and I hope your sister gets a good look at the story too, and can pick up on some of the neat things ya left in there for her to especially notice. :3
Oh, and a little thing ya reminded me, I don't think I said it but maybe I did. But I do like her mature personality. (: She mentioned focusing on what she can do instead of all the negative things she struggles with... I think hearing grown up things like that makes her more of a good role model? Or at least a good lead.
And it's neat how you're giving tribute to the Colorado place, and your pals there too! And it's really the OCB in your story? 8D Ehehe, wow! I am honored! :D I hope it does her well - and I hope your sister gets a good look at the story too, and can pick up on some of the neat things ya left in there for her to especially notice. :3
Indeed. I am extra psyched about writing how the CCB changed my life. Despite the fact I still falter in places, I am MUCH more open about embracing myself as a blind individual because of them. My only regret is that I was not open-minded sooner. If so, I bet I could've been a whole lot more now than I am. However, there's also no sense dwelling negatively on the past. Learn from it and move on proudly. That's the way!
I'm happy you like her personality. It is largely based on how my folks raised me growing up. They NEVER lead my sister, or I, to believe our visual impairment was anything more than a SLIGHT inconvenience. My dad never got on me because I wasn't into sports or able to drive. Instead, he embraced my ability to play video games and bought my sister and I a computer with the statement, "It's your Ferrari." :) That "Ferrari" is how I can type 75+ WPM now and have solid PC knowledge that, despite my slipping over the years, has put me in a prime position in many situations. :)
But, on a flip-side, Bo's character is also going to LEARN that ignoring her disability isn't the best thing to do either. I did NOTHING but ignore it and tried VERY VERY HARD to pretend I was like everyone else. Heck, there was even a time in High School that I got the brainy idea to take my glasses off to show how "Normal" I was. Dumb, dumb, dumb. Furthermore, I never asked for assistance in seeing what was on the board. That is why my Math and Science scores blew in my latter years of schooling.
So, in this story, Bo is going to learn that, although it is scary to face her condition head-on and use tools that make her stand out and admit she is indeed blind, it is truly for the better. Furthermore, the only person she has been truly fooling about her condition is herself, too. You'll read more on that in Chapter 4 and 5.
As for the story's school being the "Oxnard Center for the Blind," there is a number of reasons I went for that name. However, as you are my closest friend here, I must truly say that it put the icing on the cake to choose that name for the place. Kind of puts one great memory with a current, positive source. Can't beat that. Nope, nope, nope!
Have a good night!
I'm happy you like her personality. It is largely based on how my folks raised me growing up. They NEVER lead my sister, or I, to believe our visual impairment was anything more than a SLIGHT inconvenience. My dad never got on me because I wasn't into sports or able to drive. Instead, he embraced my ability to play video games and bought my sister and I a computer with the statement, "It's your Ferrari." :) That "Ferrari" is how I can type 75+ WPM now and have solid PC knowledge that, despite my slipping over the years, has put me in a prime position in many situations. :)
But, on a flip-side, Bo's character is also going to LEARN that ignoring her disability isn't the best thing to do either. I did NOTHING but ignore it and tried VERY VERY HARD to pretend I was like everyone else. Heck, there was even a time in High School that I got the brainy idea to take my glasses off to show how "Normal" I was. Dumb, dumb, dumb. Furthermore, I never asked for assistance in seeing what was on the board. That is why my Math and Science scores blew in my latter years of schooling.
So, in this story, Bo is going to learn that, although it is scary to face her condition head-on and use tools that make her stand out and admit she is indeed blind, it is truly for the better. Furthermore, the only person she has been truly fooling about her condition is herself, too. You'll read more on that in Chapter 4 and 5.
As for the story's school being the "Oxnard Center for the Blind," there is a number of reasons I went for that name. However, as you are my closest friend here, I must truly say that it put the icing on the cake to choose that name for the place. Kind of puts one great memory with a current, positive source. Can't beat that. Nope, nope, nope!
Have a good night!
Woo! Finished the last two chapters. (:
I see a bit more of her ignoring her seeing difficulties, like you mentioned. The way you described the Morgan dude at first, just as a blur of colors, made him all grainy and hard to visualize at first - which actually I guess was pretty perfect. :3 Or at least I think it makes it more engaging, because the viewer is on the same level as her, as we both slowly learn more about who it is that she's talking to. (:
The sorcery part kicked in soon after like you mentioned too - science and mysticism! :3 I like how there can be both, since it's usually just one or the other in stories. Not a major thing, but just a little something I appreciated, hehe.
Oh, I also liked how unresponsive she was. It seems like a really overwhelming situation for her, as we learn more about the plot to come, it's just kinda best to listen and take it all in, instead of getting super sucked into it or reacting too soon.
Hopefully she'll have fun with her new egg pal, whatever it is they end up going through in the story. :3 It sounds like a neat start to a big adventure!
And the Eyes of Ezil is a cool little name for a space station place, since I'd imagine they're watching over their world form up above. And June is the creator of their world? Hmm... maybe more of that will be involved later on! If she's already in space in the first few chapters, I wonder how much further she'll go as the plot develops.
Hehe, have fun finishing the rest of the story! I'll be hopin' as always. (:
One story preview thing down, one more to go. :D
I see a bit more of her ignoring her seeing difficulties, like you mentioned. The way you described the Morgan dude at first, just as a blur of colors, made him all grainy and hard to visualize at first - which actually I guess was pretty perfect. :3 Or at least I think it makes it more engaging, because the viewer is on the same level as her, as we both slowly learn more about who it is that she's talking to. (:
The sorcery part kicked in soon after like you mentioned too - science and mysticism! :3 I like how there can be both, since it's usually just one or the other in stories. Not a major thing, but just a little something I appreciated, hehe.
Oh, I also liked how unresponsive she was. It seems like a really overwhelming situation for her, as we learn more about the plot to come, it's just kinda best to listen and take it all in, instead of getting super sucked into it or reacting too soon.
Hopefully she'll have fun with her new egg pal, whatever it is they end up going through in the story. :3 It sounds like a neat start to a big adventure!
And the Eyes of Ezil is a cool little name for a space station place, since I'd imagine they're watching over their world form up above. And June is the creator of their world? Hmm... maybe more of that will be involved later on! If she's already in space in the first few chapters, I wonder how much further she'll go as the plot develops.
Hehe, have fun finishing the rest of the story! I'll be hopin' as always. (:
One story preview thing down, one more to go. :D
I'm glad you appreciated Bo's introduction to Lord Morgan. He is going to be Bo's pain-in-the-butt throughout the remainder of the story. You can think of him as the friend, or family member, that won't take "No" for an answer and always believes they are right. Then again, as the brains of the great lords of Ezil, it's not too surprising that he would have such an ego.
As the story moves on, the two other deities will make appearances along with a pair of dragons. June is the creative force behind the world whiie a slight nemesis, Scarlet, is all about anarchy. They live in space among the three, orbiting moons of the planet. The dragons, on the other hand, reside in confinement on Ezil itself. :)
Based on what you read, I must ask if you think it would be worthwhile to share the next five sections? If so, I will add them as the "Complete Agent Edition." Publishing Agents typically ask for either the first few chapters, or first 30 pages. Whatever comes first. By Sketch 10, the 30 page requirement is 110% met. :)
Let me know your opinion and I will proceed from there. Yep, yep, yep! I will!
As the story moves on, the two other deities will make appearances along with a pair of dragons. June is the creative force behind the world whiie a slight nemesis, Scarlet, is all about anarchy. They live in space among the three, orbiting moons of the planet. The dragons, on the other hand, reside in confinement on Ezil itself. :)
Based on what you read, I must ask if you think it would be worthwhile to share the next five sections? If so, I will add them as the "Complete Agent Edition." Publishing Agents typically ask for either the first few chapters, or first 30 pages. Whatever comes first. By Sketch 10, the 30 page requirement is 110% met. :)
Let me know your opinion and I will proceed from there. Yep, yep, yep! I will!
Hehe, he did seem kinda full of himself, mentioning how impressamazed she must be. 8D But that's family for ya. :B The background for the deities and dragons sounds like it'll come in use later on too!
I don't think it'd be a problem showing more of your progress. (: It didn't take long to read this half, so as long as you'd like to, go on ahead! :3
I don't think it'd be a problem showing more of your progress. (: It didn't take long to read this half, so as long as you'd like to, go on ahead! :3
Wow, pretty sweet so far. After reading the first chapter I didn't really know what to expect out of this but upon finishing the first part, I can safely say that I'm eager for more. After all, I'm about as confused as Bo is about this whole situation. I don't really have any suggestions or anything, story seems pretty well put together. I love the dialogue and the clever onomonopias. I'll see if I can read your second part tonight, if not then hopefully later in the week. Keep up the excellent work!
Thanks a million, Tacki! I've never written about anything besides humans and scalies before, so this endeavor has been quite a fun challenge. Hearing that it is flowing well makes me very happy. :)
Oh, on another note, be on the look-out for my Tuesday post. It's another "Special Project" that, I believe, will appeal to far more of my friends, like you, then anything I've submitted in awhile. :)
Oh, on another note, be on the look-out for my Tuesday post. It's another "Special Project" that, I believe, will appeal to far more of my friends, like you, then anything I've submitted in awhile. :)
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