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This is a sequel to Phoenix Rising, which can be read at http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2086780/
Dragon's Awakening (Part 3)
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2218797/
Serpent's Salvation (Part 4)
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3070582/
Nogitsune's Heart (Part 5)
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3680584/
Hybrid Theory (Part 6)
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/6027030/
It is not necessary to read it first, though it will enhance the experience in my opinion. This is a gift story for
phoenixrage16, 
blazger, and 
hikarishade. It is a direct follow up to Phoenix Rising, and as such is subject to the same internal continuity. There is a part 3 in the works, as I am aiming to make this a self contained trilogy.
Disclaimer: All characters are my personal take on them, and as such may not be 100% on model. They are copyright to me unless otherwise stated.
Kitsune's Gambit - A face from Volcan's past appears in the present as long held agendas return to the forefront. Volcan and Lauren investigate the legend of an ancient weapon, and a hidden enemy appears....
Starring:
Lauren Rivers - A female zebra scientist, copyright to
laurenrivers.
Lyndon Brennan - A male elephant, and Lauren's assistant and chief of staff.
Blazger - A male inverted tiger, and the head of security for Lauren's facility. He possesses the dormant gene, which has since been activated. He is copyright to blazger
Doctor Auron Chambers - A male red robin, and the chief medic of the facility.
Sarelle St. Alden - A vixen who works for Zeiracorp, and has secret ties to the dragons...
Julian St. Croix - A male dragon with a personal agenda.
Valerie Dessler - A mare, and Hikari Shade's partner.
Hikari Shade - A kitsune, and a former ally of Volcan's. Copyright to hikarishade
General Kyle Simon - A male giraffe, and a military officer. A friend of Lauren's.
Marroquin - A male white wolf, with signature red markings.
Lucy McKane - Marroquin's head of security.
Volcan - The male phoenix recovered from the lava flow, now a stranger in a new world... Copyright to phoenixrage16
STORY INDEX - If you like my work, please enjoy some of my other stories.
http://www.furaffinity.net/journal/1440484/
Dragon's Awakening (Part 3)
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2218797/
Serpent's Salvation (Part 4)
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3070582/
Nogitsune's Heart (Part 5)
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3680584/
Hybrid Theory (Part 6)
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/6027030/
It is not necessary to read it first, though it will enhance the experience in my opinion. This is a gift story for
phoenixrage16, 
blazger, and 
hikarishade. It is a direct follow up to Phoenix Rising, and as such is subject to the same internal continuity. There is a part 3 in the works, as I am aiming to make this a self contained trilogy. Disclaimer: All characters are my personal take on them, and as such may not be 100% on model. They are copyright to me unless otherwise stated.
Kitsune's Gambit - A face from Volcan's past appears in the present as long held agendas return to the forefront. Volcan and Lauren investigate the legend of an ancient weapon, and a hidden enemy appears....
Starring:
Lauren Rivers - A female zebra scientist, copyright to
laurenrivers.Lyndon Brennan - A male elephant, and Lauren's assistant and chief of staff.
Blazger - A male inverted tiger, and the head of security for Lauren's facility. He possesses the dormant gene, which has since been activated. He is copyright to
blazgerDoctor Auron Chambers - A male red robin, and the chief medic of the facility.
Sarelle St. Alden - A vixen who works for Zeiracorp, and has secret ties to the dragons...
Julian St. Croix - A male dragon with a personal agenda.
Valerie Dessler - A mare, and Hikari Shade's partner.
Hikari Shade - A kitsune, and a former ally of Volcan's. Copyright to
hikarishadeGeneral Kyle Simon - A male giraffe, and a military officer. A friend of Lauren's.
Marroquin - A male white wolf, with signature red markings.
Lucy McKane - Marroquin's head of security.
Volcan - The male phoenix recovered from the lava flow, now a stranger in a new world... Copyright to
phoenixrage16STORY INDEX - If you like my work, please enjoy some of my other stories.
http://www.furaffinity.net/journal/1440484/
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To defeat the dragons, they're going to need help FROM a dragon. You sure you don't want to use Voodoo? I know you find him creepy, but you don't have to give him all of his abilities.
List would be REALLY long if I told you all the abilities he'd have by now.
List would be REALLY long if I told you all the abilities he'd have by now.
Voodoo's never been on the side of the dragons. Personally, he thinks the conflict was just worthless, and chose to take whatever side Volcan chose. Where Volcan is, usually Voodoo isn't far away, and he'll always back him up. Plus, being part dragon, Voodoo would have very long life, so he'd still be alive by now.
And yes, I do have more to say...
This story is fucking EPIC!! You rule as a writer, even better then me! I love your writings!
And yes, I do have more to say...
This story is fucking EPIC!! You rule as a writer, even better then me! I love your writings!
Well, this conflict I sort of made up based on what hikarishade told me, that the kitsune and the dragons are not allowed direct war, and in fact I have her to blame for the entire story arc really. I had the idea of Volcan leading them to an ancient weapon, but Hikari's involvement, Julian's appearance, and the entire backstory they added was from our notes back and forth. So thank her for giving me the idea for the dragon/kitsune conflict behind the scenes.
While Voodoo would still be alive, I really just don't have a feel for the character, and I think that he just not the right fit.
I tried to make Part 2 exponentially more complex than part 1, I think I succeeded, but you tell me. While most of my longer stories are episodic, this is my first real attempt at 'movie' level storytelling, where the story is much more grand scale and things pay off much faster than a long running series. Part 2 added Julian, Hikari, Valerie, and Kate, which I think added a nice new flavor to the cast.
And really, half of the backstory behind the Shard I just made up on the fly. No shit.
hikarishade told me, that the kitsune and the dragons are not allowed direct war, and in fact I have her to blame for the entire story arc really. I had the idea of Volcan leading them to an ancient weapon, but Hikari's involvement, Julian's appearance, and the entire backstory they added was from our notes back and forth. So thank her for giving me the idea for the dragon/kitsune conflict behind the scenes. While Voodoo would still be alive, I really just don't have a feel for the character, and I think that he just not the right fit.
I tried to make Part 2 exponentially more complex than part 1, I think I succeeded, but you tell me. While most of my longer stories are episodic, this is my first real attempt at 'movie' level storytelling, where the story is much more grand scale and things pay off much faster than a long running series. Part 2 added Julian, Hikari, Valerie, and Kate, which I think added a nice new flavor to the cast.
And really, half of the backstory behind the Shard I just made up on the fly. No shit.
You did succeed in making this more complex then part 1. Sometime, I'll write a story with Lauren in it. Maybe I'll make it sort of a side story like you've done here, not based on the actual facts.
Keep in mind, all of my stories that feature Volcan, Voodoo will always appear in, so if I write it he'll appear too. But first, I gotta come up with a good plot and location before I can go thinking of that.
Keep in mind, all of my stories that feature Volcan, Voodoo will always appear in, so if I write it he'll appear too. But first, I gotta come up with a good plot and location before I can go thinking of that.
Thank you. ;) A good part 2 should always expand on part 1, making it a building block to expand in different directions. You should get something in the same vein, but differently expressed. When you do, if you need Lauren to be slightly indestructible... I can fill you in on her origin. :)
Just a suggestion, and this is something I've found.... Don't chain them together just because they're close. Sometimes, it makes for a better story of one isn't there for a while, and then shows up later, like in part 2 or some such thing. For the sake of the overall story, sometimes it works better if they're not together. Not to say that you can't come up with a good story with them both, but it's something I've learned as a writer.
To truly advance, keep your options open.
Just a suggestion, and this is something I've found.... Don't chain them together just because they're close. Sometimes, it makes for a better story of one isn't there for a while, and then shows up later, like in part 2 or some such thing. For the sake of the overall story, sometimes it works better if they're not together. Not to say that you can't come up with a good story with them both, but it's something I've learned as a writer.
To truly advance, keep your options open.
On that topic, how do you think I nailed Hikari's character? Pretty well, semi ok, or just who is this girl that shares her name?
I figured that since Hikari had been on her own for quite some time, and she said she usually looks for a new piece of tail every so often, I figured give her one of my characters to pal around with. It helped explain how they track her (look for Valerie), and also gave her someone to banter with rather than having all of her dialogue be with characters she doesn't 'know'. The story seemed to support the idea, so I gave her a partner in modern times.
I figured that since Hikari had been on her own for quite some time, and she said she usually looks for a new piece of tail every so often, I figured give her one of my characters to pal around with. It helped explain how they track her (look for Valerie), and also gave her someone to banter with rather than having all of her dialogue be with characters she doesn't 'know'. The story seemed to support the idea, so I gave her a partner in modern times.
Heh, yeah I did. Although, my friend 
soungs girlfriend, 
youkai-chan would go totally ballistic over it XD!
soungs girlfriend, 
youkai-chan would go totally ballistic over it XD! 
soung
Since it was already more or less predetermined as I was developing part two that this wasn't going to be a second part so much as the middle of a trilogy, I had to end the second part with an OMG!!!! Rather than part 1, which ended with a satisfying conclusion, leaving the immediate story wrapped up but not leaving you nowhere to go for part 2.
What was your reaction when you got to the end? :)
What was your reaction when you got to the end? :)
Drat? I would've thought I would've warranted at least a f*ckin A! ;)
I'll make a deal with you. ;) Maybe you can make a journal on your FA page and pimp these two so I can possibly get some more comments/readers, not to mention I've love to see how you write up the descriptions/opinions of them, and then I'll start work on part 3 sooner rather than later? :)
I'll make a deal with you. ;) Maybe you can make a journal on your FA page and pimp these two so I can possibly get some more comments/readers, not to mention I've love to see how you write up the descriptions/opinions of them, and then I'll start work on part 3 sooner rather than later? :)
If nothing else, it's advertising. If you talk about it, then maybe people will read my other stories. :)
I happen to think I'm a very skilled storyteller, for a non professional in the field of anthro literature, and I think I know how to make all the elements fit in a way that's cool and makes sense.
I like my fantasy worlds to feel like they could actually run, like I could live there, you know?
Want to know something funny?
Originally I had thought to have Hikari, Blazger, and Kate go to General Simon in order to get a 'flame stone' to cure Volcan, and send Lauren, Lyndon, and someone else to the portal, with Lauren and that someone else leaving Lyndon behind. Instead, though.... I thought 'why do I even need a flame stone', figuring a fetch quest is retarded, and then also thought that it would work better if I sent the ones with powers against the dragons.
So that story flipped, and Lauren and Lyndon went to see General Simon, and Hikari and the others go after the portal. I think it worked better, don't you?
I happen to think I'm a very skilled storyteller, for a non professional in the field of anthro literature, and I think I know how to make all the elements fit in a way that's cool and makes sense.
I like my fantasy worlds to feel like they could actually run, like I could live there, you know?
Want to know something funny?
Originally I had thought to have Hikari, Blazger, and Kate go to General Simon in order to get a 'flame stone' to cure Volcan, and send Lauren, Lyndon, and someone else to the portal, with Lauren and that someone else leaving Lyndon behind. Instead, though.... I thought 'why do I even need a flame stone', figuring a fetch quest is retarded, and then also thought that it would work better if I sent the ones with powers against the dragons.
So that story flipped, and Lauren and Lyndon went to see General Simon, and Hikari and the others go after the portal. I think it worked better, don't you?
Perhaps if the story ended here, maybe. But I have to consider part 3.
Thinking ahead, I know that it would be easier for Hikari to find a way back than Lauren, and secondly, I have a scene planned where Volcan is going to use his oratory skills to try and convince the phoenixes to back the other two races against the dragons.
I guess what it boils down to is, it'll work better for the final conflict for Lauren to already be here, and for the two characters that obviously have a history (Hikari and Julian) to use that to their advantage storywise.
Thinking ahead, I know that it would be easier for Hikari to find a way back than Lauren, and secondly, I have a scene planned where Volcan is going to use his oratory skills to try and convince the phoenixes to back the other two races against the dragons.
I guess what it boils down to is, it'll work better for the final conflict for Lauren to already be here, and for the two characters that obviously have a history (Hikari and Julian) to use that to their advantage storywise.
I tried to keep in mind the notes she gave me when giving her character dialogue, used her shifting ability quite a lot, I think, and while initially I was hesitant to use the shadow step, it worked reasonably well. Not to mention her morbid sense of humor, which I think Valerie matched.
Well, he's what I would call a 'high power' character. Part 1 introduced Volcan, Part 2 introduced Hikari, a second very powerful character. With Julian being the villian, I don't want four high powered characters, as I really don't know how Voodoo would fit. Volcan is the fish out of water, Hikari is the girl in the know, and Julian is the one pulling the strings. I think the cast is already large enough, and I really just don't think I can support another 'heavy' character like that.
Since generally I avoid characters that are too invulnerable or powerful, if they get above a certain level it gets much more complex to write for them because you need to avoid the 'why can't they just' kind of thoughts when they get into a tough spot. If they can use their powers for anything, it gets kind of tricky to keep a story engaging.
Now, in theory the concept of fighting fire with fire seems like a good idea, but realistically, you wouldn't put out a fire with fire, you'd use water. :)
Also, I find it hard to explain why neither Hikari nor Volcan would've mentioned him by now, which sort of would add a knot to the story which doesn't need to be there.
Now, in theory the concept of fighting fire with fire seems like a good idea, but realistically, you wouldn't put out a fire with fire, you'd use water. :)
Also, I find it hard to explain why neither Hikari nor Volcan would've mentioned him by now, which sort of would add a knot to the story which doesn't need to be there.
Volcan would only mention Voodoo if something relating to him was brought up, and Hikari always thought of Voodoo as more of a toy then anything else, something she could just mess around with. Or at least, when I use him in RP's I do with hikarishade, she sure seems that way.
hikarishade, she sure seems that way.
Wow, that was fast, I thought that would take longer. :) *grins* The first one was about my normal length, this one came in about 5 pages longer, but they were all needed scenes, in my opinion. ;) *grins more*
I assume I did alright on the humor? How about the shadow step, did I master that okay? ;) I think I utilized her shifting ability pretty well. ;)
As I said above, the backstory behind this arc is all your fault. You gave me the idea for the behind the scenes war, and the fact that the dragons and kitsune can't simply just go at it... It gave me plenty of places to go. ;)
I assume I did alright on the humor? How about the shadow step, did I master that okay? ;) I think I utilized her shifting ability pretty well. ;)
As I said above, the backstory behind this arc is all your fault. You gave me the idea for the behind the scenes war, and the fact that the dragons and kitsune can't simply just go at it... It gave me plenty of places to go. ;)
All right. At first I thought the shadow step was really going to be a hindrance, but I was able to visualize it in my head in a way that worked. Did you like her partner? She's my lead character in a story I had to reboot, and thus haven't gotten any of it finished yet, but Valerie is drawn in my gallery, she's the horse with the two colored legs. ;)
Though I think it worked out well, the story thread I planted in one suggesting Hikari was around, and then the dragon/kitsune war just seemed to fit as such a perfect story reason for everything. It provided a way to bring Hikari into the fold, gave me a great opening scene, and provided a direction for the third installment in the trilogy. :)
Though I think it worked out well, the story thread I planted in one suggesting Hikari was around, and then the dragon/kitsune war just seemed to fit as such a perfect story reason for everything. It provided a way to bring Hikari into the fold, gave me a great opening scene, and provided a direction for the third installment in the trilogy. :)
Part 3 has already begun, I'm currently working on it. ;) I like how it's going so far, it looks like it'll be a fun third part. :)
I rarely seem to do one shot stories, I usually like to do multiple parts so stuff pays off for loyal readers. :)
Part 3 should be posted within two weeks if I don't lose any steam. :)
I rarely seem to do one shot stories, I usually like to do multiple parts so stuff pays off for loyal readers. :)
Part 3 should be posted within two weeks if I don't lose any steam. :)
I think you look sexy in uniform. :) *giggles*
I tried to keep Hikari and Volcan as close as possible to the notes I was given by each while still adding my own flavor to them. I think I was able to do a decent job on a 'movie' storyline, but I think some of the characters might be hard to work with on a long running series basis.
Of course, this was really just intended to be a short series, so that I can work with.
I tried to keep Hikari and Volcan as close as possible to the notes I was given by each while still adding my own flavor to them. I think I was able to do a decent job on a 'movie' storyline, but I think some of the characters might be hard to work with on a long running series basis.
Of course, this was really just intended to be a short series, so that I can work with.
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