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Meat. Hunt.
Those were the only thoughts going through the mind of a T-Rex as it was charging after its prey.
When a strange roar came from the skies.
It didn't deter the predator from continuing the hunt.
The great ball of fire that crashed in the ground between them, however, did.
The violence of the impact created a shockwave strong enough to throw both animals off balance.
The prey, smaller and lighter, got up first and jumped on this unexpected opportunity to scram for its life.
The T-Rex, more clumsily and slowly, managed to get up, and snarled in anger and annoyance at the realization its prey escaped.
It turned its attention to the still hot meteor, and slowly got closer.
Thing. Intruder.
As it examined the meteor, the T-Rex started changing.
His legs started twisting and gettng closer.
His main body started going backward and straight up.
His arms grew at all speed, becoming even more powerful than they already were, and grew more digits.
As these changes came over it, the dinosaur also felt himself growing impossibly taller, stronger. He could also feel his reproductive organs swell to dispropotionate sizes, inducing new sensations in him.
Thing! Threat! Bad! No... Not bad... Feel... Good...
His mind was changing too. Concepts, language, knowledge, things beyond instinct were emerging in his brain, including the titanic pleasure brought by his metamorphosis.
Oh, that feels so damn good! Don't let it stop! Bigger, bigger, BIGGER!!
Little did he know, two mysterious silhouettes watched his transformation through a screen.
"Well... Looks like the first subject reacts very damn well to the MMHG sample."
"No shit."
"And what about the others?"
Well, I'm launching a new OC verse! Hope you'll like it!
And yes, it's also a feral-to-anthro TF.
Art by
greeneear88 : https://twitter.com/BarashBenski/
Original here: https://twitter.com/BarashBenski/status/835881916167520256
Not-yet-named T-Rex © me
Those were the only thoughts going through the mind of a T-Rex as it was charging after its prey.
When a strange roar came from the skies.
It didn't deter the predator from continuing the hunt.
The great ball of fire that crashed in the ground between them, however, did.
The violence of the impact created a shockwave strong enough to throw both animals off balance.
The prey, smaller and lighter, got up first and jumped on this unexpected opportunity to scram for its life.
The T-Rex, more clumsily and slowly, managed to get up, and snarled in anger and annoyance at the realization its prey escaped.
It turned its attention to the still hot meteor, and slowly got closer.
Thing. Intruder.
As it examined the meteor, the T-Rex started changing.
His legs started twisting and gettng closer.
His main body started going backward and straight up.
His arms grew at all speed, becoming even more powerful than they already were, and grew more digits.
As these changes came over it, the dinosaur also felt himself growing impossibly taller, stronger. He could also feel his reproductive organs swell to dispropotionate sizes, inducing new sensations in him.
Thing! Threat! Bad! No... Not bad... Feel... Good...
His mind was changing too. Concepts, language, knowledge, things beyond instinct were emerging in his brain, including the titanic pleasure brought by his metamorphosis.
Oh, that feels so damn good! Don't let it stop! Bigger, bigger, BIGGER!!
Little did he know, two mysterious silhouettes watched his transformation through a screen.
"Well... Looks like the first subject reacts very damn well to the MMHG sample."
"No shit."
"And what about the others?"
Well, I'm launching a new OC verse! Hope you'll like it!
And yes, it's also a feral-to-anthro TF.
Art by
greeneear88 : https://twitter.com/BarashBenski/Original here: https://twitter.com/BarashBenski/status/835881916167520256
Not-yet-named T-Rex © me
Category Artwork (Digital) / Macro / Micro
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Hey there, it's me again! So, I know it's been a really long time since my last review, I'm sorry. I've been really busy with college, writing reviews for RDude90 and just life in general. However, I'm back, and I'm ready and raring to continue writing reviews for your wonderful stories! As you can see, I'm starting back up with Chrono Dinos, the tale of a group of dinosaurs who find themselves growing into space and through time! So, let's get started with our first subject: A Tyrannosaurus Rex!
We begin with the thoughts of our T-Rex protagonist as he barrels down on his prey! I like how you've used simple, monosyllabic words for his vocabulary, it's very fitting given that he's just an regular animal, rather than the anthropomorphic animals featured in most of your stories. However, the hunt is interrupted by a meteor crashing to the ground between them! Now, I have to admit, I do have some criticism to give here. I think the impact of the meteor is a bit underdelivered, it just doesn't really give the sense of just how important this meteor is and how big of an impact it will have. Adding a bit of detail on the literal force the meteor hits with, the T-Rex sliding to a halt, basically, just adding more movement to the scene, that would go a long way to helping to sell the impact. It would probably also help add to the tension of the chase, perhaps using a stronger word than running, like charging, you know, again, just a bit more movement. It really does go a long way to making things more intense. However, that's not to say it's bad though, not at all! It just needs a little bit more is all, and I hope I can at least offer some constructive advice and a few pointers. Also, this is a very small nitpick after all that, but instead of 'Those were the only thoughts going through a T-Rex', I'd suggest something like ' going through the mind of a T-Rex'. Again, it's a little thing, but as I've said before, little things make good writers great writers!
Anyway, we now come to the T-Rex cautiously moving in for a closer look. I like how you continue to use a vocabulary with short, simple words, it helps reinforce the point that he's just an animal at this stage. However, as the T-Rex examines this strange meteor that came out of nowhere, that completely changes, as does his body! His legs begin to shift and morph and change, the already huge, powerful, thickly muscled legs swelling outwards with even more muscle as his bones and joints grow and change position at a speed that just shouldn't be possible, yet there it is! And the changes keep coming, his torso straightening as his spine shifts and lengthens, his chest pushing out as two thick, meaty pectorals bulge outwards while a six-pack carves itself into his abdomen! And while all of this is happening, his arms are growing too, even more than the rest of him! No longer the tiny little things they one were, they're now enormous tree trunks of strength and power, with muscles that easily rival the meteor that caused these changes in size, while the digits thicken and multiply! On that note, here's a fun little fact for you: Did you know that a T-Rex's arms are believed, despite their relatively tiny size, to have been incredibly strong, probably able to lift about 450lbs? I remember at a science museum I went to, on a video quiz, it was referred to as the 'Schwarzenegger of Dinosaurs'. So now that he's so huge, I can only imagine how much he could lift now, I'm willing to bet he could easily rip mountains out of the ground and lift them over his head with a single hand! Heh, would it be too much to politely ask if we would be able to see something like that at some point in the future? Because if we can, that would be incredible, but if not, then don't worry about it, we've still got plenty to enjoy! Although, I do also have a suggestion for this section too, it's not much, but I think it could really be improved by focusing a bit more on the muscle growth! Sort of like how I described it above, that sort of description would really help highlight just how ridiculously big and powerful this dinosaur is getting!
However, the growth and the changes aren't over yet, oh no! Despite his already incredible height, he starts growing! His entire frame surges upwards at a breath-taking pace as his already stunning musculature thickens and grows even more powerful by the minute! I like how you specifically mention that this should be totally impossible, it completely defies the laws of physics as we know them, yet it's happening, it's undeniably happening! And of course, that's not the only change! Naturally, his reproductive system starts surging outwards, his member swelling until it reaches his head, leaking thick, creamy pre as his balls expand to nearly the size of the meteor itself! The only thing I could offer as an improvement here is just giving more detail on the sheer pleasure it's giving him, because he looks pretty happy in the picture!
Then we come to the mental changes, and let me tell you, these are just as amazing as the physical changes! There's something deeply alluring to me about becoming far more intelligent during a transformation like this. Add that to the stunning physical transformation, and this story is absolutely incredible in every single way! The way his speech changes as he's talking, going from single, simple words at a time to a couple of words, and then full on sentences is fascinating to read, and his vocabulary is not all that has expanded! With a mind so much sharper, and so much knowledge which has essentially come from nowhere, somehow, you can only wonder what else he knows now! So many topics he could understand now, for he's no longer an animal. He's become something more. Much more.
And then we come to the little epilogue of this chapter, and here we get some shocking reveals! This meteor is certainly not natural, which makes sense, because what natural force could cause such flat out impossible changes, to turn a dinosaur into a giant, hulking titan and grant him such intelligence? And we then learn that there are more subjects! We obviously knew that there was almost certainly at least one other subject from the title and the mention that he is the first subject, but there are more than two dinosaurs who are growing in such a manner! Who are these people? What are their goals? How are they doing this? What is this MMHG?
All of these are questions that will have to be answered in the later chapters... And you can rest assured, I will definitely be writing reviews for all of them!
This was quite a long review, longer than I expected it to be, but this is a great story! We've got dinosaurs! How can you make dinosaurs cooler? By growing them into enormous, hulking giants, and you've even added a splash of mystery for good measure! It's an excellent introduction to the story, and it sets expectations very high! I can't wait to get to reviewing the rest of the series!
And, to answer that question, as it turns out, yes, I certainly will like it!
See you with the next subject: The Triceratops!
We begin with the thoughts of our T-Rex protagonist as he barrels down on his prey! I like how you've used simple, monosyllabic words for his vocabulary, it's very fitting given that he's just an regular animal, rather than the anthropomorphic animals featured in most of your stories. However, the hunt is interrupted by a meteor crashing to the ground between them! Now, I have to admit, I do have some criticism to give here. I think the impact of the meteor is a bit underdelivered, it just doesn't really give the sense of just how important this meteor is and how big of an impact it will have. Adding a bit of detail on the literal force the meteor hits with, the T-Rex sliding to a halt, basically, just adding more movement to the scene, that would go a long way to helping to sell the impact. It would probably also help add to the tension of the chase, perhaps using a stronger word than running, like charging, you know, again, just a bit more movement. It really does go a long way to making things more intense. However, that's not to say it's bad though, not at all! It just needs a little bit more is all, and I hope I can at least offer some constructive advice and a few pointers. Also, this is a very small nitpick after all that, but instead of 'Those were the only thoughts going through a T-Rex', I'd suggest something like ' going through the mind of a T-Rex'. Again, it's a little thing, but as I've said before, little things make good writers great writers!
Anyway, we now come to the T-Rex cautiously moving in for a closer look. I like how you continue to use a vocabulary with short, simple words, it helps reinforce the point that he's just an animal at this stage. However, as the T-Rex examines this strange meteor that came out of nowhere, that completely changes, as does his body! His legs begin to shift and morph and change, the already huge, powerful, thickly muscled legs swelling outwards with even more muscle as his bones and joints grow and change position at a speed that just shouldn't be possible, yet there it is! And the changes keep coming, his torso straightening as his spine shifts and lengthens, his chest pushing out as two thick, meaty pectorals bulge outwards while a six-pack carves itself into his abdomen! And while all of this is happening, his arms are growing too, even more than the rest of him! No longer the tiny little things they one were, they're now enormous tree trunks of strength and power, with muscles that easily rival the meteor that caused these changes in size, while the digits thicken and multiply! On that note, here's a fun little fact for you: Did you know that a T-Rex's arms are believed, despite their relatively tiny size, to have been incredibly strong, probably able to lift about 450lbs? I remember at a science museum I went to, on a video quiz, it was referred to as the 'Schwarzenegger of Dinosaurs'. So now that he's so huge, I can only imagine how much he could lift now, I'm willing to bet he could easily rip mountains out of the ground and lift them over his head with a single hand! Heh, would it be too much to politely ask if we would be able to see something like that at some point in the future? Because if we can, that would be incredible, but if not, then don't worry about it, we've still got plenty to enjoy! Although, I do also have a suggestion for this section too, it's not much, but I think it could really be improved by focusing a bit more on the muscle growth! Sort of like how I described it above, that sort of description would really help highlight just how ridiculously big and powerful this dinosaur is getting!
However, the growth and the changes aren't over yet, oh no! Despite his already incredible height, he starts growing! His entire frame surges upwards at a breath-taking pace as his already stunning musculature thickens and grows even more powerful by the minute! I like how you specifically mention that this should be totally impossible, it completely defies the laws of physics as we know them, yet it's happening, it's undeniably happening! And of course, that's not the only change! Naturally, his reproductive system starts surging outwards, his member swelling until it reaches his head, leaking thick, creamy pre as his balls expand to nearly the size of the meteor itself! The only thing I could offer as an improvement here is just giving more detail on the sheer pleasure it's giving him, because he looks pretty happy in the picture!
Then we come to the mental changes, and let me tell you, these are just as amazing as the physical changes! There's something deeply alluring to me about becoming far more intelligent during a transformation like this. Add that to the stunning physical transformation, and this story is absolutely incredible in every single way! The way his speech changes as he's talking, going from single, simple words at a time to a couple of words, and then full on sentences is fascinating to read, and his vocabulary is not all that has expanded! With a mind so much sharper, and so much knowledge which has essentially come from nowhere, somehow, you can only wonder what else he knows now! So many topics he could understand now, for he's no longer an animal. He's become something more. Much more.
And then we come to the little epilogue of this chapter, and here we get some shocking reveals! This meteor is certainly not natural, which makes sense, because what natural force could cause such flat out impossible changes, to turn a dinosaur into a giant, hulking titan and grant him such intelligence? And we then learn that there are more subjects! We obviously knew that there was almost certainly at least one other subject from the title and the mention that he is the first subject, but there are more than two dinosaurs who are growing in such a manner! Who are these people? What are their goals? How are they doing this? What is this MMHG?
All of these are questions that will have to be answered in the later chapters... And you can rest assured, I will definitely be writing reviews for all of them!
This was quite a long review, longer than I expected it to be, but this is a great story! We've got dinosaurs! How can you make dinosaurs cooler? By growing them into enormous, hulking giants, and you've even added a splash of mystery for good measure! It's an excellent introduction to the story, and it sets expectations very high! I can't wait to get to reviewing the rest of the series!
And, to answer that question, as it turns out, yes, I certainly will like it!
See you with the next subject: The Triceratops!
Okay, here's my answer, finally! ^^
"We begin with the thoughts of our T-Rex protagonist as he barrels down on his prey! I like how you've used simple, monosyllabic words for his vocabulary, it's very fitting given that he's just an regular animal, rather than the anthropomorphic animals featured in most of your stories. However, the hunt is interrupted by a meteor crashing to the ground between them! Now, I have to admit, I do have some criticism to give here. I think the impact of the meteor is a bit underdelivered, it just doesn't really give the sense of just how important this meteor is and how big of an impact it will have. Adding a bit of detail on the literal force the meteor hits with, the T-Rex sliding to a halt, basically, just adding more movement to the scene, that would go a long way to helping to sell the impact. It would probably also help add to the tension of the chase, perhaps using a stronger word than running, like charging, you know, again, just a bit more movement. It really does go a long way to making things more intense. However, that's not to say it's bad though, not at all! It just needs a little bit more is all, and I hope I can at least offer some constructive advice and a few pointers. Also, this is a very small nitpick after all that, but instead of 'Those were the only thoughts going through a T-Rex', I'd suggest something like ' going through the mind of a T-Rex'. Again, it's a little thing, but as I've said before, little things make good writers great writers!"
Details added
"Anyway, we now come to the T-Rex cautiously moving in for a closer look. I like how you continue to use a vocabulary with short, simple words, it helps reinforce the point that he's just an animal at this stage. However, as the T-Rex examines this strange meteor that came out of nowhere, that completely changes, as does his body! His legs begin to shift and morph and change, the already huge, powerful, thickly muscled legs swelling outwards with even more muscle as his bones and joints grow and change position at a speed that just shouldn't be possible, yet there it is! And the changes keep coming, his torso straightening as his spine shifts and lengthens, his chest pushing out as two thick, meaty pectorals bulge outwards while a six-pack carves itself into his abdomen! And while all of this is happening, his arms are growing too, even more than the rest of him! No longer the tiny little things they one were, they're now enormous tree trunks of strength and power, with muscles that easily rival the meteor that caused these changes in size, while the digits thicken and multiply! On that note, here's a fun little fact for you: Did you know that a T-Rex's arms are believed, despite their relatively tiny size, to have been incredibly strong, probably able to lift about 450lbs? I remember at a science museum I went to, on a video quiz, it was referred to as the 'Schwarzenegger of Dinosaurs'. So now that he's so huge, I can only imagine how much he could lift now, I'm willing to bet he could easily rip mountains out of the ground and lift them over his head with a single hand! Heh, would it be too much to politely ask if we would be able to see something like that at some point in the future? Because if we can, that would be incredible, but if not, then don't worry about it, we've still got plenty to enjoy! Although, I do also have a suggestion for this section too, it's not much, but I think it could really be improved by focusing a bit more on the muscle growth! Sort of like how I described it above, that sort of description would really help highlight just how ridiculously big and powerful this dinosaur is getting!"
Suggestion listened
"However, the growth and the changes aren't over yet, oh no! Despite his already incredible height, he starts growing! His entire frame surges upwards at a breath-taking pace as his already stunning musculature thickens and grows even more powerful by the minute! I like how you specifically mention that this should be totally impossible, it completely defies the laws of physics as we know them, yet it's happening, it's undeniably happening! And of course, that's not the only change! Naturally, his reproductive system starts surging outwards, his member swelling until it reaches his head, leaking thick, creamy pre as his balls expand to nearly the size of the meteor itself! The only thing I could offer as an improvement here is just giving more detail on the sheer pleasure it's giving him, because he looks pretty happy in the picture!"
Improvement done
"Then we come to the mental changes, and let me tell you, these are just as amazing as the physical changes! There's something deeply alluring to me about becoming far more intelligent during a transformation like this. Add that to the stunning physical transformation, and this story is absolutely incredible in every single way! The way his speech changes as he's talking, going from single, simple words at a time to a couple of words, and then full on sentences is fascinating to read, and his vocabulary is not all that has expanded! With a mind so much sharper, and so much knowledge which has essentially come from nowhere, somehow, you can only wonder what else he knows now! So many topics he could understand now, for he's no longer an animal. He's become something more. Much more."
Oh indeed
"And then we come to the little epilogue of this chapter, and here we get some shocking reveals! This meteor is certainly not natural, which makes sense, because what natural force could cause such flat out impossible changes, to turn a dinosaur into a giant, hulking titan and grant him such intelligence? And we then learn that there are more subjects! We obviously knew that there was almost certainly at least one other subject from the title and the mention that he is the first subject, but there are more than two dinosaurs who are growing in such a manner! Who are these people? What are their goals? How are they doing this? What is this MMHG?"
Answers in the following parts!
All in all, a huge, developed critic I enjoyed a lot, and that really helps a lot! ^^
Thanks!
And can't wait the following ones
"We begin with the thoughts of our T-Rex protagonist as he barrels down on his prey! I like how you've used simple, monosyllabic words for his vocabulary, it's very fitting given that he's just an regular animal, rather than the anthropomorphic animals featured in most of your stories. However, the hunt is interrupted by a meteor crashing to the ground between them! Now, I have to admit, I do have some criticism to give here. I think the impact of the meteor is a bit underdelivered, it just doesn't really give the sense of just how important this meteor is and how big of an impact it will have. Adding a bit of detail on the literal force the meteor hits with, the T-Rex sliding to a halt, basically, just adding more movement to the scene, that would go a long way to helping to sell the impact. It would probably also help add to the tension of the chase, perhaps using a stronger word than running, like charging, you know, again, just a bit more movement. It really does go a long way to making things more intense. However, that's not to say it's bad though, not at all! It just needs a little bit more is all, and I hope I can at least offer some constructive advice and a few pointers. Also, this is a very small nitpick after all that, but instead of 'Those were the only thoughts going through a T-Rex', I'd suggest something like ' going through the mind of a T-Rex'. Again, it's a little thing, but as I've said before, little things make good writers great writers!"
Details added
"Anyway, we now come to the T-Rex cautiously moving in for a closer look. I like how you continue to use a vocabulary with short, simple words, it helps reinforce the point that he's just an animal at this stage. However, as the T-Rex examines this strange meteor that came out of nowhere, that completely changes, as does his body! His legs begin to shift and morph and change, the already huge, powerful, thickly muscled legs swelling outwards with even more muscle as his bones and joints grow and change position at a speed that just shouldn't be possible, yet there it is! And the changes keep coming, his torso straightening as his spine shifts and lengthens, his chest pushing out as two thick, meaty pectorals bulge outwards while a six-pack carves itself into his abdomen! And while all of this is happening, his arms are growing too, even more than the rest of him! No longer the tiny little things they one were, they're now enormous tree trunks of strength and power, with muscles that easily rival the meteor that caused these changes in size, while the digits thicken and multiply! On that note, here's a fun little fact for you: Did you know that a T-Rex's arms are believed, despite their relatively tiny size, to have been incredibly strong, probably able to lift about 450lbs? I remember at a science museum I went to, on a video quiz, it was referred to as the 'Schwarzenegger of Dinosaurs'. So now that he's so huge, I can only imagine how much he could lift now, I'm willing to bet he could easily rip mountains out of the ground and lift them over his head with a single hand! Heh, would it be too much to politely ask if we would be able to see something like that at some point in the future? Because if we can, that would be incredible, but if not, then don't worry about it, we've still got plenty to enjoy! Although, I do also have a suggestion for this section too, it's not much, but I think it could really be improved by focusing a bit more on the muscle growth! Sort of like how I described it above, that sort of description would really help highlight just how ridiculously big and powerful this dinosaur is getting!"
Suggestion listened
"However, the growth and the changes aren't over yet, oh no! Despite his already incredible height, he starts growing! His entire frame surges upwards at a breath-taking pace as his already stunning musculature thickens and grows even more powerful by the minute! I like how you specifically mention that this should be totally impossible, it completely defies the laws of physics as we know them, yet it's happening, it's undeniably happening! And of course, that's not the only change! Naturally, his reproductive system starts surging outwards, his member swelling until it reaches his head, leaking thick, creamy pre as his balls expand to nearly the size of the meteor itself! The only thing I could offer as an improvement here is just giving more detail on the sheer pleasure it's giving him, because he looks pretty happy in the picture!"
Improvement done
"Then we come to the mental changes, and let me tell you, these are just as amazing as the physical changes! There's something deeply alluring to me about becoming far more intelligent during a transformation like this. Add that to the stunning physical transformation, and this story is absolutely incredible in every single way! The way his speech changes as he's talking, going from single, simple words at a time to a couple of words, and then full on sentences is fascinating to read, and his vocabulary is not all that has expanded! With a mind so much sharper, and so much knowledge which has essentially come from nowhere, somehow, you can only wonder what else he knows now! So many topics he could understand now, for he's no longer an animal. He's become something more. Much more."
Oh indeed
"And then we come to the little epilogue of this chapter, and here we get some shocking reveals! This meteor is certainly not natural, which makes sense, because what natural force could cause such flat out impossible changes, to turn a dinosaur into a giant, hulking titan and grant him such intelligence? And we then learn that there are more subjects! We obviously knew that there was almost certainly at least one other subject from the title and the mention that he is the first subject, but there are more than two dinosaurs who are growing in such a manner! Who are these people? What are their goals? How are they doing this? What is this MMHG?"
Answers in the following parts!
All in all, a huge, developed critic I enjoyed a lot, and that really helps a lot! ^^
Thanks!
And can't wait the following ones
Hey there! Great to see you're back! Don't worry, these things happen, I understand!
So, first up, I saw those new details you added, and let me say, they're brilliant! It really does add a tremendous sense of drama and impact, no pun intended! You've done an excellent job with those details too, I could picture it perfectly! The tension of the hunt, the crash of the meteor, the mighty predator and its prey collapsing to the ground! I also really liked the mention of the anger the T Rex has once it realises that its prey has escaped. It's a little thing, but it adds that little, how do you say, touch, if that makes sense? I don't really know how to describe it, but hopefully you get what you I mean!
Anyway, next up, that suggestion I made for the muscle growth and him showing off his strength! I'm very, very glad you like those ideas! The mention of his arms growing even more powerful is a nice little touch! It's not getting lost in the details of describing every single muscle group swelling outwards, because as wonderful as that would be and as much as I would love all the details on his growing, expanding musculature, we do need to be realistic on what you can add in a reasonable timeframe. Coming up with ideas is easier than putting them to paper, I know that well! Plus, I'm really excited to see just what you have planned for showing off his strength! I can't wait to see just how strong he's going to become!
Then, we come to the wonderful bliss he's going through! Nice one there, now it really comes across like it's as amazing as the art makes it out to be! And I do like your response, that got a chuckle out of me, so well done!
Finally, yes, and I can't wait to get onto reviewing those parts either! I've got so many reviews to write, and that's just to catch up with current series!
I'm absolutely delighted you enjoyed it so much, it was a very long review, but I'm glad you loved it! I'm genuinely thrilled that I could help you, because you've got so many wonderful ideas and amazing stories! It's a real honor to be able to read them and help you improve, and I'm very grateful that you're so open to critique! I remember being struck by how open to critique you were with Page 3 of Special Flavour, it was then that I knew that you were the sort of writer who really wants to make their writing the best that it can be! I'm more than happy to give you constructive feedback on things you can change and improve! (Along with gushing and squeeing over things I love!)
It was an pleasure to review this one, and don't worry, I plan to get the next review up as soon as I can! Until then, take care, and keep up the amazing work!
So, first up, I saw those new details you added, and let me say, they're brilliant! It really does add a tremendous sense of drama and impact, no pun intended! You've done an excellent job with those details too, I could picture it perfectly! The tension of the hunt, the crash of the meteor, the mighty predator and its prey collapsing to the ground! I also really liked the mention of the anger the T Rex has once it realises that its prey has escaped. It's a little thing, but it adds that little, how do you say, touch, if that makes sense? I don't really know how to describe it, but hopefully you get what you I mean!
Anyway, next up, that suggestion I made for the muscle growth and him showing off his strength! I'm very, very glad you like those ideas! The mention of his arms growing even more powerful is a nice little touch! It's not getting lost in the details of describing every single muscle group swelling outwards, because as wonderful as that would be and as much as I would love all the details on his growing, expanding musculature, we do need to be realistic on what you can add in a reasonable timeframe. Coming up with ideas is easier than putting them to paper, I know that well! Plus, I'm really excited to see just what you have planned for showing off his strength! I can't wait to see just how strong he's going to become!
Then, we come to the wonderful bliss he's going through! Nice one there, now it really comes across like it's as amazing as the art makes it out to be! And I do like your response, that got a chuckle out of me, so well done!
Finally, yes, and I can't wait to get onto reviewing those parts either! I've got so many reviews to write, and that's just to catch up with current series!
I'm absolutely delighted you enjoyed it so much, it was a very long review, but I'm glad you loved it! I'm genuinely thrilled that I could help you, because you've got so many wonderful ideas and amazing stories! It's a real honor to be able to read them and help you improve, and I'm very grateful that you're so open to critique! I remember being struck by how open to critique you were with Page 3 of Special Flavour, it was then that I knew that you were the sort of writer who really wants to make their writing the best that it can be! I'm more than happy to give you constructive feedback on things you can change and improve! (Along with gushing and squeeing over things I love!)
It was an pleasure to review this one, and don't worry, I plan to get the next review up as soon as I can! Until then, take care, and keep up the amazing work!
"I also really liked the mention of the anger the T Rex has once it realises that its prey has escaped. It's a little thing, but it adds that little, how do you say, touch, if that makes sense? I don't really know how to describe it, but hopefully you get what you I mean!"
I get it ^^
It's just... It felt logical it would think of its prey first
I'm really glad you like my stories ^^
Like I said at the time, the first version of Special Flavour part 3 had been made very late at night. I just wanted to be done with it and go to bed
Your critique and
worldtraveler 's one made me look at it again and think "yeah, it sucks", and redo it properly.
I'm very glad it won me a fan ^^
Thanks again for the review, and see ya at the next one!
I get it ^^
It's just... It felt logical it would think of its prey first
I'm really glad you like my stories ^^
Like I said at the time, the first version of Special Flavour part 3 had been made very late at night. I just wanted to be done with it and go to bed
Your critique and
worldtraveler 's one made me look at it again and think "yeah, it sucks", and redo it properly.I'm very glad it won me a fan ^^
Thanks again for the review, and see ya at the next one!
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