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The little, brown and white mouse-boy has grown so much, since that first, scary day he woke up in the hospital, with no idea who he was. Now, he's ready to take his first, major step back into society, by earning his formal name. For Chris, it's one part Catholic Confirmation and one part Debutant Ball, and a one hundred percent excuse to be a part of a massive party, the kind only Cray City could throw.
There's a couple of parts of this story that I feel, need a twitch more work. Chris' middle name has been giving me fits, for one thing. I decided to throw it up, as is, because I'm leaving today, on a week's vacation, and I couldn't do that without posting something. I owe it to everyone who has been so enthusiastic about The Mouse Diaries. One gag, in here, I need to mention specifically, because it's a bit obscure. "Scott Pack" is slang for a firefighter's Self Contained Breathing Aparatus, after the company that most comonly manufactures them.
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There's a couple of parts of this story that I feel, need a twitch more work. Chris' middle name has been giving me fits, for one thing. I decided to throw it up, as is, because I'm leaving today, on a week's vacation, and I couldn't do that without posting something. I owe it to everyone who has been so enthusiastic about The Mouse Diaries. One gag, in here, I need to mention specifically, because it's a bit obscure. "Scott Pack" is slang for a firefighter's Self Contained Breathing Aparatus, after the company that most comonly manufactures them.
The Mouse Diaries
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Category Story / Transformation
Species Mouse
Size 120 x 98px
File Size 11.7 kB
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"...Eugene MacGruff is enough of a match for my old name that it won't take me long to adapt."
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"Well, if you murdered anyone, 'Butcher' is kinda a dead giveaway." I remarked.
"What?" the bulldog exclaimed, and then he burst out laughing. "No, no, my granddad ran a meat market. He was one of the first men to offer a selection of his wares, with an eye to the Furry consumer. That's where my nickname came from."
That's when my eyes went wide, my eyebrows shooting up my forehead, "But that means you're..."
He put a finger against my lips, silencing me.
"Left behind, remember."
I nodded.
Butch gave him just enough clues that Chris was able to figure out the bulldog's original name. That's what he was about to say.
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"Well, if you murdered anyone, 'Butcher' is kinda a dead giveaway." I remarked.
"What?" the bulldog exclaimed, and then he burst out laughing. "No, no, my granddad ran a meat market. He was one of the first men to offer a selection of his wares, with an eye to the Furry consumer. That's where my nickname came from."
That's when my eyes went wide, my eyebrows shooting up my forehead, "But that means you're..."
He put a finger against my lips, silencing me.
"Left behind, remember."
I nodded.
Butch gave him just enough clues that Chris was able to figure out the bulldog's original name. That's what he was about to say.
Certain things, I'm deliberately leaving up to the reader, to make up for themselves. Butch's original name, and the exact reasons behind why he choose to become a bulldog-morph are one of them. I simply left enough hints to give the reader a jumping-off point. If you have to know what I was thinking, when I wrote it, send me a note.
Simple, 
UniPrae likes fantasy stuff. Cray includes several unicorns, a couple of dragons, and one character who might be a half-elf. In context, I don't want to give away too much, in case a scene comes up where the mouse learns it, as part of the story. What I can stay is that on the surface, Prae's a hippy college professor, who keeps getting dragged into these things, because he's a unicorn, and because of a legend that one of his ancestors originally owned the entire valley.
*Laughter* You really like Dave, don't you. Well the answer is yes. Something's about to happen to Chris, that will force Dave's hand. Before that story gets posted, though, I have to make sure that when it finally does happen, it will feel to readers like you, that events have been moving in that direction, all along.
UniPrae likes fantasy stuff. Cray includes several unicorns, a couple of dragons, and one character who might be a half-elf. In context, I don't want to give away too much, in case a scene comes up where the mouse learns it, as part of the story. What I can stay is that on the surface, Prae's a hippy college professor, who keeps getting dragged into these things, because he's a unicorn, and because of a legend that one of his ancestors originally owned the entire valley. *Laughter* You really like Dave, don't you. Well the answer is yes. Something's about to happen to Chris, that will force Dave's hand. Before that story gets posted, though, I have to make sure that when it finally does happen, it will feel to readers like you, that events have been moving in that direction, all along.
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