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One of my darker works. If you have questions or comments on the meaning or work as a whole, feel free to let me know.
Category Poetry / All
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 546 B
I thought it was exceptional.
Just some spelling errors, but that's really never a big deal and can be fixed easy.
That's all I see really.
The symmetry between the upper and lower half is very nice too.
I think my only suggestion would be to maybe make it two stanzas to make it a little easier to read.
Keep up the good work.
Just some spelling errors, but that's really never a big deal and can be fixed easy.
That's all I see really.
The symmetry between the upper and lower half is very nice too.
I think my only suggestion would be to maybe make it two stanzas to make it a little easier to read.
Keep up the good work.
Thank you for your feedback, good sir. If split, I think it'd make the most sense to split it into three stanzas, as that follows the rhyme scheme. There's somewhat of an aesthetic purpose to it being a single stanza though; that being it's supposed to create a greater feeling of intensity.
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