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Caterpillar, a Peas-Ant,
Wakes up in
His lowly Abode
Of a Leafy-Roofed
Home.
“I will be
A Firefly, for
They are Nights.”
And with a
Skip and a
Hop he goes
Off, merrily singing,
“I’m not a
Sir, I’m a
Serf, and my
Enemy’s worse than
A Night ever
Cursed.”
And so He
Trots into the
Setting Sunflower, and
Fights many battles,
Watching the Firefly
Knights on their
Horsefly steeds, and
Meets a Fair
Ladybug, and the
Caterpillar woos her,
And they go
Off chanting,
“I’m not a
Sir, I’m a
Serf, and my
Enemy’s worse
Than a Night
Ever Cursed.”
And so they
Travel to the
Castle of Termites
And beg of
Queen Beatrice to
Night the Caterpillar.
But Queen Beatrice,
She nays, and
Serf Caterpillar canters
Off, into the
Setting Sunflower,
To his lowly
Abode of a
Leafy-Roofed home,
Chanting:
“I’m not a
Sir, I’m a
Serf, and My
Enemy’s worse than
A Night ever
Cursed.”
_______________
Caterpillar, a Peas-Ant,
Wakes up in
His lowly Abode
Of a Leafy-Roofed
Home.
“I will be
A Firefly, for
They are Nights.”
And with a
Skip and a
Hop he goes
Off, merrily singing,
“I’m not a
Sir, I’m a
Serf, and my
Enemy’s worse than
A Night ever
Cursed.”
And so He
Trots into the
Setting Sunflower, and
Fights many battles,
Watching the Firefly
Knights on their
Horsefly steeds, and
Meets a Fair
Ladybug, and the
Caterpillar woos her,
And they go
Off chanting,
“I’m not a
Sir, I’m a
Serf, and my
Enemy’s worse
Than a Night
Ever Cursed.”
And so they
Travel to the
Castle of Termites
And beg of
Queen Beatrice to
Night the Caterpillar.
But Queen Beatrice,
She nays, and
Serf Caterpillar canters
Off, into the
Setting Sunflower,
To his lowly
Abode of a
Leafy-Roofed home,
Chanting:
“I’m not a
Sir, I’m a
Serf, and My
Enemy’s worse than
A Night ever
Cursed.”
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I read your recently made comments on some of my work; do forgive me for taking so long to gander at your own gallery, even when you've mentioned it before. 8<
HOWEVER, I am most pleased with this work! I'll be honest, I don't know how to write free verse, which kinda sounds contradicting really, and most free verse irks me; though, THIS...this is delightful! Why?--because this is what I like to see in poetry--CREATIVITY, INNOVATION! =O
Congratulatory Points:
1.) The hero--it's a CATERPILLAR! Now that's epic! ;3
2.) You stayed within the fairytale realm and successfully merged the insect world with that of the middle-aged courts!
3.) Referring to the sun as a "sunflower" is simple, but wonderfully witty!
Hmm, in all honesty, I have only one possible suggestion, though it's by no means required: instead of "battles" in (quatrain 5, line 4), why not use "beetles"? Now, it may be a bit early to introduce that play on words, so it's really up to you. x3
Overall, it's a very cute and entertaining poem, Russ! ^^
'Twas a pleasure reading! \(^o^)/
HOWEVER, I am most pleased with this work! I'll be honest, I don't know how to write free verse, which kinda sounds contradicting really, and most free verse irks me; though, THIS...this is delightful! Why?--because this is what I like to see in poetry--CREATIVITY, INNOVATION! =O
Congratulatory Points:
1.) The hero--it's a CATERPILLAR! Now that's epic! ;3
2.) You stayed within the fairytale realm and successfully merged the insect world with that of the middle-aged courts!
3.) Referring to the sun as a "sunflower" is simple, but wonderfully witty!
Hmm, in all honesty, I have only one possible suggestion, though it's by no means required: instead of "battles" in (quatrain 5, line 4), why not use "beetles"? Now, it may be a bit early to introduce that play on words, so it's really up to you. x3
Overall, it's a very cute and entertaining poem, Russ! ^^
'Twas a pleasure reading! \(^o^)/
Hehe, well, I'll admit, I felt a strong urge to try my hand at this, shortly after reading it. ^^;
Alas, I have so many other topics I wish to expound upon. =/
Ah, so the portion in quotation marks is a song from which you alluded from another source then? No worries; though, that does make a lot more sense to me now, as I thought the song a tad bit contradictory to his journey. (o.o)
I mean, if I'm grasping this correctly (do correct me if I'm wrong): the caterpillar sets out on a journey to become a knight/night (wonderful play on words, btw), yes? If that's the case, why would he say he's not a "sir"? Now, of course, I may not be grasping your intentions for using that excerpt, so don't mind me. x3
I don't wish to look too deeply into it, less it spoil my enjoyment for the piece for which you have produced. ^^
Oh, and do excuse my rudeness: *bows back, respectfully* (^_9)
Good day to your, sir! :D
Alas, I have so many other topics I wish to expound upon. =/
Ah, so the portion in quotation marks is a song from which you alluded from another source then? No worries; though, that does make a lot more sense to me now, as I thought the song a tad bit contradictory to his journey. (o.o)
I mean, if I'm grasping this correctly (do correct me if I'm wrong): the caterpillar sets out on a journey to become a knight/night (wonderful play on words, btw), yes? If that's the case, why would he say he's not a "sir"? Now, of course, I may not be grasping your intentions for using that excerpt, so don't mind me. x3
I don't wish to look too deeply into it, less it spoil my enjoyment for the piece for which you have produced. ^^
Oh, and do excuse my rudeness: *bows back, respectfully* (^_9)
Good day to your, sir! :D
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