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A story I thought up some time ago. I really liked it and I thought it played on Robert and Mia's relationship very well. A part of my Olympian series, I'll add their bios later. If you know Greek myth, I bet you can guess who these two are.
Category Story / Fantasy
Species Dog (Other)
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 10.8 kB
An intriguing plot build. The opening is good in attracting the audiences attentions. The characters express lots of emotion which adheres to the works purpose excellently. The work is heavily controlled by dialogue, the more description and details you have the more a story comes to life for the reader. The ending was also well off as well.
Hi, I came here from ilovecritique. :D
Firstly can I just say that I liked the story, it was an enjoyable read.
However, you do tend to go overboard with the descriptions, try to reign that in a bit, don't tell your reader, show them. Currently you do a lot of telling and that was the one thing that made this fictional story not as good as it could be.
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