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Okay, I'm sorry I had to resubmit this but I rerecorded it and it wouldn't let me change the submission file of the original.
Yeah the timing really sucked in places so I rerecorded the whole thing and added a bass solo, have fun with that Shia!
Lyrics:
With each rising footstep
I get closer to the top
with each losing battle
I may suffer but I’ll never stop
Making something out of nothing was never quite a
strong suit that I had
Taking with me just as much as I can carry as long as
noone and I mean noone has a hand in my bag
winded bending trees caressed by simple melodies
erupt from the earth casting happy shade
Forest filled with light a breeze to cool the after-bite
a stroll on down through the fine black dust we’ve made
Chorus
when the oil smells like bullets, do we really
have the option to stay the course
when the water turns to fire right before us, can we
still try to hold back the bleeding, do we really have that kind of force?
Was it ever enough to know when the silence turns to voice
take your loved ones in your arms
one direction sinking low in the mirror, write it down
take a collection, say you had no other choice
spend all my days, dealin’ with you
can’t break the chain that you’re pullin’ me to
just hoping that you can follow it through
don’t waste my time I can stomach it too
(repeat)
Chorus
Making something out of nothing was never quite a
strong suit that I had
Taking with me as much as I can just as long as
noone and I mean noone has a hand in my bag
Yeah the timing really sucked in places so I rerecorded the whole thing and added a bass solo, have fun with that Shia!
Lyrics:
With each rising footstep
I get closer to the top
with each losing battle
I may suffer but I’ll never stop
Making something out of nothing was never quite a
strong suit that I had
Taking with me just as much as I can carry as long as
noone and I mean noone has a hand in my bag
winded bending trees caressed by simple melodies
erupt from the earth casting happy shade
Forest filled with light a breeze to cool the after-bite
a stroll on down through the fine black dust we’ve made
Chorus
when the oil smells like bullets, do we really
have the option to stay the course
when the water turns to fire right before us, can we
still try to hold back the bleeding, do we really have that kind of force?
Was it ever enough to know when the silence turns to voice
take your loved ones in your arms
one direction sinking low in the mirror, write it down
take a collection, say you had no other choice
spend all my days, dealin’ with you
can’t break the chain that you’re pullin’ me to
just hoping that you can follow it through
don’t waste my time I can stomach it too
(repeat)
Chorus
Making something out of nothing was never quite a
strong suit that I had
Taking with me as much as I can just as long as
noone and I mean noone has a hand in my bag
Category Music / Rock
Species Canine (Other)
Size 120 x 96px
File Size 5.44 MB
the biggest change I can point to is the addition of the bass solo. The vocals are slightly different and a bit more controlled I think. The drums cut out at the end now allowing for a more calm ending... well before I shift into the gear of bluegrass.
And I lined up the rhythms WAY better.
Maybe I'm the only one who noticed some of these problems. But it was a personal thing where I didn't want to listen to a sub-par track with my name on it.
Thank you!!!
And I lined up the rhythms WAY better.
Maybe I'm the only one who noticed some of these problems. But it was a personal thing where I didn't want to listen to a sub-par track with my name on it.
Thank you!!!
I'll fully admit I didn't get to hear the first version, though I remember seeing you post it last night, I was preoccupied and couldn't find time to listen. Even so, this song is amazing. The words speak of humble and sad demise, but yet of hope somewhere out there. I can't find the right words to say what I mean... never could really.
Regardless, I do have one critic. The bass solo, while something interesting (bass solos are amazing in my opinion, and needed a little more often, as the instrument itself so often unnoticed) could do with being turned up a notch in volume. While I heard everything else quite clearly, hearing the bass during it's moment to shine was a strain on my ears. Otherwise, what I could hear of it was interesting and well done.
Regardless, I do have one critic. The bass solo, while something interesting (bass solos are amazing in my opinion, and needed a little more often, as the instrument itself so often unnoticed) could do with being turned up a notch in volume. While I heard everything else quite clearly, hearing the bass during it's moment to shine was a strain on my ears. Otherwise, what I could hear of it was interesting and well done.
it might be your speakers/headphones. I've got it cranked as high as it'll go on the recording. Also, I"m plucking an not picking making all my bass lines a bit more muted. Picking adds a bite to the attack but doesn't allow me to smack the strings like I like to, making it bounce off the fret. Try turning up the bass on your speakers. If it's a stock laptop situation, yeah my laptop speakers don't pick it up very well at all.
Thank you much though. The second verse is kinda about the oil spill.
Thank you much though. The second verse is kinda about the oil spill.
you're thinking backwards. I write the chords, and then jam lyrics in to fit with it ^^
but yeah I have to change crap all the time to help with flow so I don't stumble over words, or add in nothing words like just, or OH as an extra syllable here or there.
The lyrics usually aren't fully final until I'm done recording. Sometimes I'll do a line, sing it differently than what I have written, and then change it cause i like it better.
but yeah I have to change crap all the time to help with flow so I don't stumble over words, or add in nothing words like just, or OH as an extra syllable here or there.
The lyrics usually aren't fully final until I'm done recording. Sometimes I'll do a line, sing it differently than what I have written, and then change it cause i like it better.
Oh goodie, I guess that waiting before commenting was worth it. I thought take one was pretty good, but hearing it again, similar but so changed is really cool. Wonderful when people go back to fix up little things to make something so great to listen to~
I've been writing to many madrigals lately, so I've got word painting hammered in my head, so when you sing "with each rising footstep I get closer to the top" I expect the melody to climb up and up! Of course, not having that doesn't take from the music, and I think that it would sound cheesy, don't you? But you did do it at the fourth line when you sing "never stop" the word "stop" seems to be held for a bit longer than expected. It's those little things which make music nice to listen to rather than just hear, if you get what I mean. You even did it in the third stanza, winded bending trees... I'm going to have that playing in my head today!
Well, I could go on for a while, but wow, did I enjoy listening to this, wonderfully active bass-line, some really awesome singing and a bit of fun at the end, man you can sing fast, imagine if you had to replay the whole song at that tempo... A song with variations.
And the text you used is nice and long, almost like those french musicians!
I've been writing to many madrigals lately, so I've got word painting hammered in my head, so when you sing "with each rising footstep I get closer to the top" I expect the melody to climb up and up! Of course, not having that doesn't take from the music, and I think that it would sound cheesy, don't you? But you did do it at the fourth line when you sing "never stop" the word "stop" seems to be held for a bit longer than expected. It's those little things which make music nice to listen to rather than just hear, if you get what I mean. You even did it in the third stanza, winded bending trees... I'm going to have that playing in my head today!
Well, I could go on for a while, but wow, did I enjoy listening to this, wonderfully active bass-line, some really awesome singing and a bit of fun at the end, man you can sing fast, imagine if you had to replay the whole song at that tempo... A song with variations.
And the text you used is nice and long, almost like those french musicians!
yeah since it was so full I kinda stuffed it with lyrics. I now realize what you mean by word painting. I have a fantastic example of a setting of a Walt Whitman poem, but apparently it's either unpublished or unpopular.
"darts like lightening" switches parts quickly. Yeah I see what you mean now
thanks for really going into the lyrics. I work hard on them and it's good to know that people are reading!
"darts like lightening" switches parts quickly. Yeah I see what you mean now
thanks for really going into the lyrics. I work hard on them and it's good to know that people are reading!
Oh, your lyrics are always wonderful, I may not get into them in the comments too much because I'm not a good literary critic, I do really appreciate the time you put in them, they make the music so much more worth it, especially because your thematic (the subject matter) material is so different from everything out there!
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