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Story - An East coast college has developed CLOCKWORK, a device that in theory will reverse time for 24 hours. However, the first time one of their own died, and the effect restored their life, though with every change they make, they learn that someone else is making changes of their own...
CAST
Alonira Risone, played by
alonira
http://www.furaffinity.net/full/4136949/
Liane Lysette, played by
rabbitfangs
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/4298129
Garret 'Pepster' Bunny, played by
peps6g73
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3174699/
Rowan Hunter, played by
laurenrivers
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/1869435/
McKenzie Red, played by
arctickiba
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/4397433
SUPPORTING/VILLIANS
Reporter (Requiem), played by
phoenixsrequiem
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3973731/
Emerald Skunk, played by
EmeraldSkunk
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2695602/
Student (Ty Vulpine), played by
tyvulpine
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3804210/
Professor Natasha Gremnov, played by
jazzfan
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/4289815
Raptor Clawford, played by
raptorc
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2237539/
Kelvrin Firkin, played by
kelvrin
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3899086/
Read Part 1 here!
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/4495144/
Read Part 3 here!
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/4699876
STORY INDEX - If you like my work, please enjoy some of my other stories.
http://www.furaffinity.net/journal/1440484/
CAST
Alonira Risone, played by
alonirahttp://www.furaffinity.net/full/4136949/
Liane Lysette, played by
rabbitfangshttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/4298129
Garret 'Pepster' Bunny, played by
peps6g73http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3174699/
Rowan Hunter, played by
laurenrivershttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/1869435/
McKenzie Red, played by
arctickibahttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/4397433
SUPPORTING/VILLIANS
Reporter (Requiem), played by
phoenixsrequiemhttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/3973731/
Emerald Skunk, played by
EmeraldSkunkhttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/2695602/
Student (Ty Vulpine), played by
tyvulpinehttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/3804210/
Professor Natasha Gremnov, played by
jazzfanhttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/4289815
Raptor Clawford, played by
raptorchttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/2237539/
Kelvrin Firkin, played by
kelvrinhttp://www.furaffinity.net/view/3899086/
Read Part 1 here!
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/4495144/
Read Part 3 here!
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/4699876
STORY INDEX - If you like my work, please enjoy some of my other stories.
http://www.furaffinity.net/journal/1440484/
Category Story / Fantasy
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 109 kB
Oh yes. :) *evil grin* I'm hopeful that maybe one of you will figure it out before the big reveal in part 3. :) Muahaha! I've been careful, so we shall see if anyone picks out the subtle clues. :)
I've been enjoying this one, for some reason it's been flowing out of my fingers much faster than usual. I think I finished this in about half the time it usually takes. ;)
I wonder if that's Emmy's job, taste testing the um... Products. :)
I've been enjoying this one, for some reason it's been flowing out of my fingers much faster than usual. I think I finished this in about half the time it usually takes. ;)
I wonder if that's Emmy's job, taste testing the um... Products. :)
I think more likely it was me Allie had in mind for that. Provided she was thinking at all. She's cracked under the strain if you ask me. Going all weird with the 'love barf' as you so aptly put it. And then playing secret agent to spy on me and Rowan. Sh well, at least I didn't have a run in with that dammed raptor this cycle! (not that I'd remember it if I did....)
Hehe. Well, I had to think of some sort of name to give it, love barf seemed as good a name as any. :) I mean, she just sort of threw up all over you and then ran off. ;) Hehe. I thought it'd be funny to do one of the campy 'spying with a terrible disguise' scene. ;) LOL.
Liane lucked out this time, she got her time watch back. :)
Liane lucked out this time, she got her time watch back. :)
Threw up is the right way to put it. Man what a jumbled up mess of stuff. I swear that girl has flown off her tracks! Too much stress, I'd say. And to think she could get away with the cloak and dagger look!
Well I don't know if getting her time watch back is a good thing or not. I think she'd be better off being re-set and maybe next cycle Allie would have herself a little more together! I don't think it would hurt a thing for her to forget this one.
Well I don't know if getting her time watch back is a good thing or not. I think she'd be better off being re-set and maybe next cycle Allie would have herself a little more together! I don't think it would hurt a thing for her to forget this one.
I said it out loud just to be sure it sounded whacky enough. LOL. :) The main character was always intended to be extremely devoted to saving their love interest, that of course was why the plot gets going. ;) Part 2 and 3 are more about who else is involved, though with this one I was able to go for the comedy, the lovesplosion and the secret agent that everyone just stares at and pretends isn't there act. ;) LOL.
Oh, it is. Now that she has recalled the day, she remembers what Allie did for her and how sweet Rowan is, so she gets much closer to the gang for cycle 4. ;) And with one of their own having to be reminded of what happened, they need all the help they can get!
Oh, it is. Now that she has recalled the day, she remembers what Allie did for her and how sweet Rowan is, so she gets much closer to the gang for cycle 4. ;) And with one of their own having to be reminded of what happened, they need all the help they can get!
Of course you wouldn't!! You haven't got a mean bone in your body Liane!! I've known you forever it seems like and you've always been a loving, caring bunny. *steps back a pace, concerned that the cloning process seems to have developed some problems. She shouldn't be like this! Wonders what went wrong.*
I really, REALLY suspect two people for it, one being a teacher, and the other being one of the six students, heheh.
*tilts her head* Lauren, are you sending subtle hints of things you're trying to get me to do?
I noticed a lot of description about me in Liane's conversation, sneaky.
*tilts her head* Lauren, are you sending subtle hints of things you're trying to get me to do?
I noticed a lot of description about me in Liane's conversation, sneaky.
It's a mystery! What would the job description be? The same with edible panties, who does that stuff?
Strangely enough, Emmy is kind of a Tom Boy, I know it seems strange, but she's really embarrassed of wearing anything ultra girly where others could see her.
Psychic Zebra! It's those eyes, they're so bright they light up the souls of those you look at.
Strangely enough, Emmy is kind of a Tom Boy, I know it seems strange, but she's really embarrassed of wearing anything ultra girly where others could see her.
Psychic Zebra! It's those eyes, they're so bright they light up the souls of those you look at.
I bet there's a show on somewhere that discusses how you get these odd 'random' jobs. LOL. I wonder what you'd say at your kids school on career day?
Well, Emmy is in her room, so I figured girly pajamas. :) Tomboy, huh? Come to think of it, isn't she usually dressed in a skirt in art?
They just might be, so far I've always read people very well. :)
Well, Emmy is in her room, so I figured girly pajamas. :) Tomboy, huh? Come to think of it, isn't she usually dressed in a skirt in art?
They just might be, so far I've always read people very well. :)
So now there are two time watches out there that need to be found. Bad mokus!! I want to catch the traitor!!
I hate to run down college kids, but these don't seem too together. They just don't seem to know who they want to 'crush on' and who they don't. But I do feel sorry for poor Allie. She's obviously having a really hard time what with trying to save Liane! At least she knows who she loves. The fact she seems to be losing it because of it shows us that her emotions are deep and real. :)
I hate to run down college kids, but these don't seem too together. They just don't seem to know who they want to 'crush on' and who they don't. But I do feel sorry for poor Allie. She's obviously having a really hard time what with trying to save Liane! At least she knows who she loves. The fact she seems to be losing it because of it shows us that her emotions are deep and real. :)
This, by the way, is my 38000th comment given. :)
*evil grin* Oh yes, their numbers are growing while ours are shrinking. :) Who could it be???? :)
Well, they're college kids, what do you expect? ;) Hehe. :) I do hope you got a laugh out of Allie's romantic confession in the lab scene. :)
*evil grin* Oh yes, their numbers are growing while ours are shrinking. :) Who could it be???? :)
Well, they're college kids, what do you expect? ;) Hehe. :) I do hope you got a laugh out of Allie's romantic confession in the lab scene. :)
Whoa! That's a lotta comments. I've barely topped six thou.
I'm no good at picking up clues and hints. You have to slap me in the face with something before I know it's there. But I do have my suspicions. (not saying either.....just going to play it close to my vest)
Yeah, true! College kids aren't too mature are they? In general, anyway. I did get a laugh from it but even more so I was embarrassed for her, because of her frantic babble and bailout. Poor thing! She's soooooo mixed up!
I'm no good at picking up clues and hints. You have to slap me in the face with something before I know it's there. But I do have my suspicions. (not saying either.....just going to play it close to my vest)
Yeah, true! College kids aren't too mature are they? In general, anyway. I did get a laugh from it but even more so I was embarrassed for her, because of her frantic babble and bailout. Poor thing! She's soooooo mixed up!
It's cuz I reply to everything. :) I use FA as a networking tool, to meet new friends and get more readers. :) Hehe. :) Plus I'm flirty and friendly. :)
Well, that's good too, you're my usual audience, the one I like to surprise with my OMG no way moments. :) Though I will be very impressed the day someone reads my clues and the things I don't say to predict the twist ending!
Oh, she'll be okay. :) She just tried to save herself some time this morning, plus day 3 teaches her that just because it happened yesterday doesn't mean it'll happen today, a lesson she needs for cycle 4. ;)
Well, that's good too, you're my usual audience, the one I like to surprise with my OMG no way moments. :) Though I will be very impressed the day someone reads my clues and the things I don't say to predict the twist ending!
Oh, she'll be okay. :) She just tried to save herself some time this morning, plus day 3 teaches her that just because it happened yesterday doesn't mean it'll happen today, a lesson she needs for cycle 4. ;)
You flirty? Do tell!!
I'm more of a passive reader. I just let it unfold before me. You could say I use reading to let my brain relax and have someone else do the thinking for me.
Save herself time indeed! That worked well!! Ha ha ha! Anyway she really already knows that things don't happen the same, if she thinks about it. Witness Liane being run over instead of shot in cycle 2.
I'm more of a passive reader. I just let it unfold before me. You could say I use reading to let my brain relax and have someone else do the thinking for me.
Save herself time indeed! That worked well!! Ha ha ha! Anyway she really already knows that things don't happen the same, if she thinks about it. Witness Liane being run over instead of shot in cycle 2.
I am. ;) Just a little... :)
Hey, that's perfectly cool. :) I like having all kinds of readers. :) Those that wait for the surprise, and those that dig for my clues. :) *evil grin* I hope you like the way I think. ;)
*giggles* Oh yeah, but Liane still got whacked, and she was so busy trying to get on making sure that didn't happen, she didn't really get to spend as much time on her love admission this time, but hey, who gets to do it four times by the first time? :)
Hey, that's perfectly cool. :) I like having all kinds of readers. :) Those that wait for the surprise, and those that dig for my clues. :) *evil grin* I hope you like the way I think. ;)
*giggles* Oh yeah, but Liane still got whacked, and she was so busy trying to get on making sure that didn't happen, she didn't really get to spend as much time on her love admission this time, but hey, who gets to do it four times by the first time? :)
Things are really starting to pick up, now! I want part three NOW!!!!
The story is great, but ARGH!! What was I even thinking with that stuff? I mean c'mon, condoms?! We're both female fer cry'n out loud!! And then I give her the time watch so I don't get a do-over?! What kind of sense does that make?! *Buries my face in my hands* I'm such a social klutz!!!
The story is great, but ARGH!! What was I even thinking with that stuff? I mean c'mon, condoms?! We're both female fer cry'n out loud!! And then I give her the time watch so I don't get a do-over?! What kind of sense does that make?! *Buries my face in my hands* I'm such a social klutz!!!
Hehe. :) I was going for comedy, there. ;) I tried to think of the strangest, oddest things she would give her in an attempt to be speedy and rush off to save the day. :)
But it'll pay off in part 3. ;) Besides, this way Liane doesn't have to be filled in on the day reset tomorrow. ;) Hehe. :) We love you. ;)
I hope you guys got a laugh out of her blurb. :)
But it'll pay off in part 3. ;) Besides, this way Liane doesn't have to be filled in on the day reset tomorrow. ;) Hehe. :) We love you. ;)
I hope you guys got a laugh out of her blurb. :)
Oh you pulled it off beautifully! I laughed out loud when I read about that "love barf"! I'm just so embarrassed about how poorly I pulled it off! ///^^///
And I'm sure everything will turn out okay in the end. I can see the beginnings of how I make up with Liane already, what with my spying on her "date" showing her that I am actually interested in her, despite her earlier conclusions.
But I think I've noticed a minor plothole in the interaction of the Clockwork device and the Time Watches... Whatever someone's directly in contact with when time resets will stay with them if they're wearing a Time Watch (Blood-soaked clothing, necklace, etc.), and yet everyone in the story is convinced that there's no way for anything to be carried through from one Cycle to the next. Is it just that they're not realizing what's going on each morning yet? Along those lines, if they always wake up each morning in what they were wearing at the end of the previous Cycle, what happened to what they were wearing during the first iteration of the day? I mean, if I was wearing my pajamas when I woke up the first day, then time resets and I'm in my blood-soaked outfit, where do my pajamas go? Erased from existence? Just some thoughts from someone used to time-bending stories like this... ^^;
And I'm sure everything will turn out okay in the end. I can see the beginnings of how I make up with Liane already, what with my spying on her "date" showing her that I am actually interested in her, despite her earlier conclusions.
But I think I've noticed a minor plothole in the interaction of the Clockwork device and the Time Watches... Whatever someone's directly in contact with when time resets will stay with them if they're wearing a Time Watch (Blood-soaked clothing, necklace, etc.), and yet everyone in the story is convinced that there's no way for anything to be carried through from one Cycle to the next. Is it just that they're not realizing what's going on each morning yet? Along those lines, if they always wake up each morning in what they were wearing at the end of the previous Cycle, what happened to what they were wearing during the first iteration of the day? I mean, if I was wearing my pajamas when I woke up the first day, then time resets and I'm in my blood-soaked outfit, where do my pajamas go? Erased from existence? Just some thoughts from someone used to time-bending stories like this... ^^;
Hehe. :) Well, Allie's a smart girl, she just hasn't figured out how to say what she means just yet. ;) In cycle four everything will even out. :)
Well, if you noticed the necklace she was wearing was copied, but Alonira picked up the one Liane would've given her and said 'I'll fuse these together later', suggesting a duplicated object would just meld together with its counterpart. Since the day resets there can never be more than two of something, and the power of the field is not strong enough to expand beyond your person, so only what you're wearing would be copied, if it was. Additionally, even if you could carry something over, other than information, what would be useful that wouldn't already be in your tools at the beginning of the day? :)
Well, if you noticed the necklace she was wearing was copied, but Alonira picked up the one Liane would've given her and said 'I'll fuse these together later', suggesting a duplicated object would just meld together with its counterpart. Since the day resets there can never be more than two of something, and the power of the field is not strong enough to expand beyond your person, so only what you're wearing would be copied, if it was. Additionally, even if you could carry something over, other than information, what would be useful that wouldn't already be in your tools at the beginning of the day? :)
*Giggles* Sounds a lot like me... ^^; Takes me a while to work out what I wanna say sometimes... And I can't wait for everything to be great between us again! The diversion of Liane's affection was kinda funny, but, well... "SKANKS!" XP
And information is exactly the thing that would be valuable. Sure you couldn't take much, physically, but say keep a flash drive in your pocket, or in your hand (Or in your mouth if need be), and you could take a TON of information through to the next cycle: Notes, pictures, even video! "Look, this is going to happen in about five seconds!" would go a long way toward convincing someone that you're telling the truth about living the day over and over again.
And information is exactly the thing that would be valuable. Sure you couldn't take much, physically, but say keep a flash drive in your pocket, or in your hand (Or in your mouth if need be), and you could take a TON of information through to the next cycle: Notes, pictures, even video! "Look, this is going to happen in about five seconds!" would go a long way toward convincing someone that you're telling the truth about living the day over and over again.
I know you better than you know yourself, it seems. :) *kiss kiss kiss* :) We're going to be the coolest college kids EVER. ;)
Yeah, but still, most folks wouldn't believe you anyway even if you had evidence. And as evidened by Day 3, things are changing due to external interference. Sides, girl, is that that hard to write a note over again the next morning? :) *giggles* Anyway, cycle 4 will fit it all back into place. ;)
Yeah, but still, most folks wouldn't believe you anyway even if you had evidence. And as evidened by Day 3, things are changing due to external interference. Sides, girl, is that that hard to write a note over again the next morning? :) *giggles* Anyway, cycle 4 will fit it all back into place. ;)
Apparently I'm rather transparent... lotsa people I don't even know have been going "Oh she'll love this" or "I bet she's going to..." so it must not be that hard... ^^;
*Nods* Yea, true. But in this case it's 'cuz there's a bunch of people going about actually trying to change things, so obviously things will change. In a more controlled environment, things will likely run a bit closer to the same course every time. But yea, can't wait for the next chapter! =^.^=
*Nods* Yea, true. But in this case it's 'cuz there's a bunch of people going about actually trying to change things, so obviously things will change. In a more controlled environment, things will likely run a bit closer to the same course every time. But yea, can't wait for the next chapter! =^.^=
Hey, I take pride in my ability to read folks. :) *beams proudly*
Though you might not be so sure. :) See, one of the things to remember is that every time the day resets, there is a butterfly effect. Everything the six time watch holders do (on both sides) is dependant on them doing the same thing the next day. If anyone changes their actions, everything they touched changes, and the differences get bigger the more the day progresses. Ie, the kids not going to class. Later on, Professor Gremnov pulls them aside. This didn't happen in day 1 and 2 because they were in class. Now that Liane knows, she will act differently in cycle 4, now that she knows, and Emmy will not do the same thing since Liane will not go back to her room after the lab in day 4. :)
Though you might not be so sure. :) See, one of the things to remember is that every time the day resets, there is a butterfly effect. Everything the six time watch holders do (on both sides) is dependant on them doing the same thing the next day. If anyone changes their actions, everything they touched changes, and the differences get bigger the more the day progresses. Ie, the kids not going to class. Later on, Professor Gremnov pulls them aside. This didn't happen in day 1 and 2 because they were in class. Now that Liane knows, she will act differently in cycle 4, now that she knows, and Emmy will not do the same thing since Liane will not go back to her room after the lab in day 4. :)
And you do it so well, too! *Strokes your ego* XP
Yes, exactly my point. The more people there are, the more changes will occur, even inadvertently. But in a more controlled environment, one person could replicate the day to near perfection, limiting any changes they make to dead-end chain reactions (the opposite of the butterfly effect: no matter what you do, the end result is the same), and with such a baseline, be able to study what changes where bring about what results. It'd be a rather fascinating study, and I'd enjoy it very much indeed. =^.^= (Prob'ly why I built Clockwork in the first place, huh?)
Yes, exactly my point. The more people there are, the more changes will occur, even inadvertently. But in a more controlled environment, one person could replicate the day to near perfection, limiting any changes they make to dead-end chain reactions (the opposite of the butterfly effect: no matter what you do, the end result is the same), and with such a baseline, be able to study what changes where bring about what results. It'd be a rather fascinating study, and I'd enjoy it very much indeed. =^.^= (Prob'ly why I built Clockwork in the first place, huh?)
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