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Username: 
mazz
Submission Name: Propaganda sketch
Larger/Original Version: http://www.furaffinity.net/view/4738829/
Species: Demon, pig, horse, sheep thing
Type of Media: Traditional art
Type of Response wanted: Constructive criticism, redlines, tips, comments... anything.
Artist's Comments:
A trade I'm working on with an artist I really admire. I am proud of this but IMO I could make it better, I'd love help with doing so.
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Art © mazz
mazzSubmission Name: Propaganda sketch
Larger/Original Version: http://www.furaffinity.net/view/4738829/
Species: Demon, pig, horse, sheep thing
Type of Media: Traditional art
Type of Response wanted: Constructive criticism, redlines, tips, comments... anything.
Artist's Comments:
A trade I'm working on with an artist I really admire. I am proud of this but IMO I could make it better, I'd love help with doing so.
Artist this is done for is
Art ©
mazz
Category Artwork (Traditional) / General Furry Art
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 900 x 710px
File Size 391.2 kB
Spend a little more time studying wrinkles in fabric. There is a rhyme and reason to how they fold! :]~ right now it looks like the character is in some clothes that were packed in a plastic bag and stuffed under a mattress until they were messified, lol. Take a look at some good clothes references - try taking a picture of someone with similar clothing and note where the folds happen and how - at the knee joints, at the arm joints and elbows.
Another thing I'd nitpick at is that it'd be much easier for the character to hold themselves up if you locked the elbow on the arm they're leaning on, and moved the shoulder up to show how they're steadying their weight.
Got some nice things going on in the picture :] keep on trucking!
Another thing I'd nitpick at is that it'd be much easier for the character to hold themselves up if you locked the elbow on the arm they're leaning on, and moved the shoulder up to show how they're steadying their weight.
Got some nice things going on in the picture :] keep on trucking!
My boyfriend was erasing parts of my sketch and showing me exactly what you're talking about with clothing folds. I understand it but it's so hard! I really am trying to avoid just drawing everything naked though so I appreciate people helping me with clothing folds.
Omg, I see what you mean about the arm and shoulder so it looks more like he's holding his weight. I noticed instantly what you meant when I went and looked at my sketch! I will be sure to fix that. Thank you so much, I would have not even realized I was missing something so important about body structure.
<3 Thanks you!
Omg, I see what you mean about the arm and shoulder so it looks more like he's holding his weight. I noticed instantly what you meant when I went and looked at my sketch! I will be sure to fix that. Thank you so much, I would have not even realized I was missing something so important about body structure.
<3 Thanks you!
It looks very nice, but I do see a few little things that need to be fixed.
For one, the right arm looks a tad too stiff... It may be the position of that hand. Try to make the hand extend a little lower, to give it a more natural look. Also, the other arm seems a tad too thick.
I agree with Zydala on the wrinkles. Take time to study how cloth falls on limbs, and bunches in parts of the body. The best way to do this is either study stock photography, or take a cloth and drape it over a chair. Different fabrics drape and bunch differently, so keep that in mind as well.
I love the style of the hoofs, but they look a bit too small. I almost want to say they should be a little bigger to support the characters weight. Take physics in account as well.
I hope this helped. o3o
For one, the right arm looks a tad too stiff... It may be the position of that hand. Try to make the hand extend a little lower, to give it a more natural look. Also, the other arm seems a tad too thick.
I agree with Zydala on the wrinkles. Take time to study how cloth falls on limbs, and bunches in parts of the body. The best way to do this is either study stock photography, or take a cloth and drape it over a chair. Different fabrics drape and bunch differently, so keep that in mind as well.
I love the style of the hoofs, but they look a bit too small. I almost want to say they should be a little bigger to support the characters weight. Take physics in account as well.
I hope this helped. o3o
Thank you, I see what you mean about the right arm, the references I have for the character he does have smaller hooves so I'm reluctant to change them but I agree with the size should be larger.
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I've gotten other comments on the left arm having different issues, it's something I plan to fix, and when I do I'll make it a little less thick as well.
<3 Thanks for the critique and tips. <3
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I've gotten other comments on the left arm having different issues, it's something I plan to fix, and when I do I'll make it a little less thick as well.
<3 Thanks for the critique and tips. <3
I tried a quick redline. ^^ Hope it helps even a little, I'm not the best at anatomy.
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/4957544/
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/4957544/
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