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I really don't know what to say. I am usually a fan of violent macros and i tend to avoid peaceful macro stories, but this one, this is one of he best stoties i have ever read, no doubt about it.
I loved the characters, their interaction, their inocence.

You did a good job on that, thanks a lot for sharing it! You have a new fan =o So does your character Azure :D

I'm very pleased to have satisfied someone who prefers violent giants, that's a tricky task! Good on you for sticking with it!

Thanks for your praise, I'm glad you enjoyed it so much! ^-^

You're welcome.
Btw, you could draw a scene or two from the story, i bet lots of people would enjoy seeying azure and oliver.

I've considered it, believe me, but somehow it always fades in importance to other commission ideas. Maybe if I learn to draw I'll do some :3

This is probably one of the best human/furry stories I've read thus far on FA.
It balances perfectly both emotion, thrills and drama. The characterization is wonderfully done!
I felt for these two all the way through the story. <3

Thank you very much! ^-^ I don't read many human/furry stories myself, but I'm flattered that you think mine is up there with the best of them! :)

This was actually pretty good. I like how you handled the character interactions.

Wow.

And to think that I logged on a few hours ago without the slightest thought that I may stumble across, what is now, one of my favorite stories on the internet.

I must applaud.

Gee, thanks a bunch! ^^ I'm very pleased to hear that! What part did you like the best? :3

Oh, this question. I can't tell you how often I'd like to say that I enjoyed the entire item, rather than a specific part, but no one likes hearing that answer anymore, huh?

Well, I'm still yet to be finished, but I can see the end is coming very soon. If you still request a favorite "part" of mine, I'll try to pick out one upon the story's completion.

Okay, here's a curveball for you then, what's the worst part? :3 What part made you go "Ew" or "what?" or "for christ's sake!"? If you could delete one section, what would it be? :3

Well, we do have some clichés thrown about (like the scene with the spider, which I found unnecessary), but if you're now seeking my least favorite part...

Well, I've given it enough thought to state that my favorite portion of the story lies toward the beginning, around the time that they both still held skepticism for one another, and to the point they finally concluded that they wanted to be together. Assuming the story had not already caught my interest, my enthusiasm for the plot would have sparked during the time the government came to inspect his house.

Now my least favorite? Well, I can't say I'll be adding the ending to any of my lists of top 10s, but I wouldn't make a point about any particular dislike, seeing as I've not one worth mentioning.

Well I'm happy that the story kept you interested until the end. Thank you for reading! ^^

I don´t know how long i watch you , sadly i newer read it before because i like it quite a lot . Thanks a lot for it .

So I finally finished reading this after 3 days (I've had to work inbetween) and I absolutely love this story! ^_^
That was really cool how Oliver got to have some fun near the end of the story. Personally I was hoping for some awesome miracle that furries and humans would get along. However, the ending did suffice.

The characters were absolutely wonderful! It really makes me wish that Azure was real. She's so nice and kind and not afraid to defend people she cares for.

I enjoyed pretty much everything in the story. But one of my favorite parts in particular was when Azure realized she could grow or shrink others when they were physically close to her. That was really cool!
Part of me was in tears because I felt so emotionally connected to the characters.


Again, this is an absolutely fantastic story! You have done an amazing job with it.
Thank you for creating a wonderful story to read! ^_^

N'aww, thank you for the lovely compliments! Great to hear this story still entertains years on ^-^

You are most welcome friend. ^_^

Ok, Wow … Just … wow. I’m struggling to come up with the right words, so give me a minute

*shuffles through notes and takes a deep breath*

To properly summarize my opinion of this story I need to divulge a little context so you can understand where I’m coming from, and in what light any of my criticism is intended. The vast majority of works on most any sight featuring prominent writing is ridiculously short, misspelled, filled with leet speech and poorly paced. What I like to think of as an average work is somewhere between 6 and 8 full pages, coherent and readable, and then only compelling if I’m especially lucky. I almost never read anything that amounts to less than ten pages because I don’t see the point in getting invested with a story I will finish in two minutes and never see a sequel or recurring character. It doesn’t matter if it’s the best written story in the world, if the ride is too short I’ll just pass it by. Hehe, if you thought my previous post was detailed then … hello! My name is Arbon, a pleasure to meet you sir! I got my start in literature through role-playing on second-life, and I was sort of famous for long, intricately detailed posts. Apparently we’re called ParaRPers.

When I first read your prologue, something usually glossed over or ignored by a lot of writers, the fact it was longer than what most people pass off as the entire story should have tipped me off. When I looked down at the little marker in Microsoft Word stating that this was 68 PAGES LONG I did a double-take, the only other time I’ve seen something like that out of fur affinity was when the formatting was messed up and all of the words were size 36 … I’d then shrink them down to a more readable size 12 and realize it only amounts to six pages.

That alone blew my mind, and because of that length I’m perfectly willing to ignore how few stories you have compared to most, and that alone would have been worth positive comments. Aww, but the pleasant surprise compounds in on itself, I knew from the first story that were a very talented (or at least attentive) writer, so surely a properly sized tale from you would have been a great read. Right?

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I was already hooked within the first two pages, you can bet your right toe it was a good read. I mean, wow … just wow. Where do I begin? The main characters were cutesy and likable but without sacrificing too much common sense. And I just love how I can point out problems and flaws with the characters, and have that pertain ONLY to the character within the story. Meaning they obviously aren’t mistakes on your part but rather essential core aspects of these people, and pertinent to the plot.

Oliver for example is a social outcast, has contempt for authority, is really, REALLY awkward with conversation on top of not being very bright, while his unending childlike enthusiasm makes him seem like an annoyance. Something akin to the comedy relief characters, serving as a foil to a more serious one. But none of these make me roll my eyes and want to skip past the parts he’s in, and they all come into play during the story. Brilliantly crafted character development, merged seamlessly with the plot.

Azure is a dangerous character who doesn’t think ahead much when it comes to safety, occasionally acts like a bully, and even contemplated stepping on someone her “boyfriend” was close to. And yet somehow she doesn’t seem to come off as cold, ruthless, or power craved (well, maybe she ENJOYS the power but she doesn’t seem to crave it) because her good qualities, her morals, and her general behavior conflict almost constantly with her reckless tendencies. Better still, the flaws in the character /enhance/ the story a great deal by putting Oliver in danger … on numerous occasions. She comes across as young, and prone to mistakes, but not evil. And at the same time, not entirely safe to be around.

I will say that the story as a whole isn’t very impressive, and it doesn’t lend itself to any truly noteworthy moments. Boy meets girl in the first act, boy and girl have fun together in the second act, boy fights to protect girl against a thre- yeah blah-di-blah-di-blah … other than “Giant anthro creatures live alongside humans” … which isn’t even the main focus, you just don’t have much going on for you.

And now how in the 9 Hells do you compensate for this otherwise glaring weakness of having a boring main plot? You focused entirely on the characters, and the plot was driven by character interaction. This is a luvey dovey romance (of a sort) and as such makes the perfect move by emphasizing characterization and dialog over exciting events. I can utterly and completely ignore a subpar storyline because the people I’m reading about are just that interesting.

The characters, the conversations between them, the excitement involved in just finding out more about these people … that’s where the focus is, that’s what’s entertaining, and that’s what drives the story. I love it!

When I was about halfway through and already deciding parts of a full critique, of which my impression was that the works was simply above average and worth mentioning, I wrote down a few paragraphs expressing my disappointment at a missed opportunity. It was a /furry/ story on /fur/ affinity about a world with prejudice between humans and furries, so I felt safe to assume that after this long you’d pass up the same juicy bit of conflict everyone else seems to. Hey, Oliver was a furry/macro enthusiast. I had already typed out how annoying it was that you didn’t include a friend meeting up with them, someone who isn’t crazy about furries and would have to be convinced about Azure.

Then I read on a little bit more and nearly fell out of my chair in shock … I mean, wha? You DID have the foresight to include one of Oliver’s friends? Don’t you know that you’re an amateur here, posting stuff for free? Your ideas are supposed to be mediocre at best! Where do you get off putting the same effort and thought into this as a professional writer would? Your supposed to be blind to those potential bits of plot like most everyone else!

And then … gah! I read on further to find that not only is this guy fully exploited for all he’s worth as a major character … you made him entertaining in his own right? He’s not just some throw away character there for one scene and forgotten the next, and he arrived just as conversation between Asure and Oliver was starting to stagnate. Brilliant! Richard is by far my favorite character of the main cast, mainly for his intelligence, his demeanor … and, ok … MOSTLY because he has the best possible line you could use to introduce him:

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‘Uhhhh… Oliver? Is that you?’ he said, feeling ridiculous but knowing it was one of very few explanations.
The Furry just stared at him. Perhaps his memory had been affected.
‘How did you become Furry?’ he pressed. ‘I mean, I know you wanted too, but… wow. And how’d you become a girl? Look at you!’ Richard said, beginning to become excited. ‘You’ve got boobs and everything!’
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Sorry but third time’s the charm. Never again will I assume you’ll walk into the same pitfalls as most amateur writers, and I feel somewhat guilty about doing so the begin with. I’ll put that emotion right along-side my frustration over not finding this sooner.

Because I assume your going to ask this one (or appreciate me making sure you don’t have to) I did have a favorite scene. While the story as a whole doesn’t lend itself to especially gripping moments, I absolutely loved when the Sergeant Major shot a bullet towards the fuel-line of a smashed car, blowing it up right under Oliver’s feet. Most. Badass. Scene. Ever. Or more specifically, it was a great way to show how resourceful he could be under pressure, and that the stubborn refusal to never give up against an overpowering opponent is entirely logical … well, so long as all of the facts are taken into account. Ok, IF all giants were violent blood-thirsty savages with nothing but distain for humanity and a mean streak (as the propaganda establishes early on) THEN it makes perfect logical sense. Watertight plot threads people, come and look at how well these interactions were weaved together.

Looking over, I’m also really freaking amazed by how the officers, the military forces, weren’t actually villains. And they weren’t portrayed as idiots or bigots either, just people who’s job it is to protect the citizens doing their job to protect the citizens. Do you have any idea how /rare/ it is to find a human antagonist, in a pro-furry story, ON FUR-AFFINITY! In which the human makes complete, rational sense that a reader can agree with?

He wants Azure gone because Macros are dangerous around humans (and hehe, whether she thinks so or not, she IS dangerous) and he points out that no matter how nice she might seem or how much she cares about people’s lives, he can’t rightfully risk letting hundreds of innocent people get killed because she had an off day, or not getting what she wanted lead to a temper tantrum. This is a girl who bullies cops into doing what she says because no one is around to stop her. I like the girl sure, I’d like to meet with her on occasion or explore this Macro society, but in the long haul I’m with the Sergeant Major, get her away from my house.

And then … and THEN you have the gal to set this up perfectly for a sequel? Not only am I now interested in the plot and setting, but you’ve set up the remote possibility of seeing Oliver try to get along with other Macros while in Azure’s care?

I … you seem to want open criticism and the fact you’ve re-edited old works means your certainly new ideas or improvements to heart. And I’ve always felt that just saying what’s good about a story is entirely unhelpful, it doesn’t give the author anything to do, or anything to mull over. In the same way that only pointing out what’s bad is entirely unhelpful, as it doesn’t give any direction. But when I read this over and try to look for ways to improve it, keeping in mind what it is and where it’s coming from, I just can’t find a fault.

It’s pretty-much flawless, it avoids every major pitfall, it takes advantage of every opportunity, it simply does not look like something an amateur came up with. It has too much passion, too much heart, soooo much effort must have went into making this. But … in the interest of actually helping the author, I do have to come up with a way to improve it. My only method, which I’m sorry, but is rather unfair, is to judge this based on the standards of a professional story. Something I had to pay for, or rather you’d expect people to pay for it.

I know it’s essentially free to read and costs nothing more than enough time to get through it but … to find a fault I have to up the standards and place it in the same category smash hits like Hairy potter or Eragon would go in. That’s all I can picture you “Improving” towards, and given how much better your current works are than my own I feel guilty about making this criticism, but here goes anyway.

If trying for mass appeal, you really messed up a lot of your chances by making Oliver a furry lover. A sympathizer would have been fine, perhaps someone who just doesn’t quite believe the propaganda but would still be a terrified of a furry if he came across one. But Oliver outright LOVES furries and macros, and his life sort of revolves around it. This is not identifiable for a mainstream audience, no matter how readily accepted it is on the internet. It isn’t even compelling or interesting to a mainstream audience because he isn’t really treated as “Weird” … criminal perhaps, but not especially weird or unusual.

The entire story as a whole would have been much stronger if he was either just a slight sympathizer or outright believed what the government wants everyone to feel about furries. There would have been much more conflict at the start of the story, between Azure and Oliver, and between Azure’s desire to not kill anyone and her need to stay alive and fed. Sure you alluded to this with a single conversation about the possibility of them killing each other, but it was so phoned in and glanced over … I just think you made a mistake when creating the character.

As it stands a lot of the main conflict is between Azure and Oliver’s desire to be together against the world’s stand that Macros should stay far away from the bit sized hairless things. But I submit to you the assumption that conflict between Oliver’s desire for safety and normalcy against his instinct to be a good friend to the fuzzy white size shifter would have been instantly more compelling.

And then there’s that ending … Oliver was almost crushed by Azure’s sister, multiple Macros were able to “escape” into human lands on multiple occasions without alerting a super-army with long range missiles who just lock coordinates and airstrike anything above the tree-line, and the major repercussions of Azure and Oliver dating are severally glanced over to make way for, essentially, the ending credits. Wouldn’t Oliver at least need to think about it before he trusts his life to the person who’s almost accidentally killed him, the brother of a girl he’s dating almost INTENTIONALLY killing him, and the FATHER of the girl he’s dating who goes out of his way to intimidate him.

I can picture this working out just fine for Azure, but shouldn’t we get to see Oliver going over the potential problems, or thinking of his options here? As much as I want to see a sequel, the ending here could have been handled better.

And then there’s …

Um.

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There’s more suggestions coming, give me a minute

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Still looking for flaws


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GoshDarnit!!!

There’s got to be something else somewhere in here. Argh! Ok, closing thoughts? This was an excellent read and a rare gem, and if I were to come across it in a book-store I’d pay about two dollars for it IF the cover looked pretty enough, and IF there wasn’t another Sci-fi story available with a more entertaining premise that I could have gotten instead. Take that for what it’s worth (and note that I shop frugally) and please be aware that I’m forced to bump this out of it’s weight class to find anything wrong.

Hehe, and yes I'm already looking on your old account to read that chapter 7 you refereed to earlier. If you want to post small scraps of your next major project in scraps, main gallery, or even a private message, I would be honored to see more of what you've been thinking up.

Hoooolly fuck.... O.O

Thank you... Really thank you. Open up a note with me, want to talk with you.

damn good story too bad zerox is the loner type.

Thank you very much for reading and enjoying it so much. It's not without its faults, I would never publish it at the state it's in right now. Azure's backstory is terrible, it was cobbled together as an excuse to keep the story going, there's no real sense of where she's come from and only a vague hint of the situation of the world. I'd have to do a lot of work with that before I'd consider selling it.

But thanks again for the compliment! Hope you enjoy my other stories too if you chose to read them :)

I've heard this from several people now, and out of curiosity what would you be hoping to see in a sequel to this story?

I have read this at least 3-4 times. Love it! Any news if/when a sequel is being written?

Wow thank you for your ongoing enjoyment, makes me pleased that it has such staying power with some people. I had thought about making a sequel, but I have a looot of other stories on the go, and I have no immediate plans to start on one.

Sweet mother of Joseph, this will make for an awkward comment.

You see, I downloaded this story little over a year ago and never paid attention to its author. I really enjoyed the story and just today I was reminded of it when I was searching for some gentle macro stories to go over for reference in preparation for my own. I could not find this one via searching FA, and so I rummaged through the files of my computer for it, dismayed that I might not find it and its owner may have left FA.

I found the file in my computer and, lo and behold, the author read "Aussie_Luvtail", the same man I had just recently added to my watch list. Talk about a link to the past! I do not believe in luck or coincidence, but I am nevertheless mesmerized by this series of events.

Thank you, sir, for writing my favourite macro story; keep up the good work!

Hey thanks so much mate, I'm so glad that you enjoyed it! Flattered to hear it's your favourite macro story!

An inspiring story. There were more than a couple time when i thought "this is going to be pure fanservice, isn't it?" But no, you kept it inteligent, you kept it moving, you made it actually about what was happening to these characters. And i like that.

My greatest criticism is the "Why do you love me?" scene. "Because you have fur and a tail" doesn't seem to be a very honest answer.

I'm a little upset it kept me up all night, but it all in all was worth it.

oh and maybe one or two spelling errors

Glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for the feedback, sorry it was unputdownable and you lost sleep ^^" Yeah I'm not the best at romantic dialogue I admit :)

This is a amazing story, I love it

Glad to hear it, thank you!

No problem, it's a really nice one

Thanks so much! Nice to have thoughtful feedback like this, glad you enjoyed it!

When you say you'd like to see more stories like this, which aspect do you mean?

Awesome, I freaking loved it, and I'm usually one for the violent macros, but if done right I love the soft ones, and I LOOOOVED thidls one 20/10

I'm glad I can make gentle giants appealing to those that prefer the violent kind! Thanks for reading, hopefully you may enjoy some of my other stories that feature macros too.

i have read this story so many times now and it still one of the best macro stories ever.

Is there a posibility of a sequel?

Thank you! So glad it was worth reading more than once!

Sadly I don't think so. I've decided a sequel would have nowhere to go in this unfinished and rushed setting, it would just end up a purely romantic size difference story, and that's already 90% of what I write so I don't see the need to repeat myself. You might enjoy Size Swap once I finally finish it if this sort of thing is what you're after!

Nice work!

Thank you for reading!

Got to say, I identify closely with Oliver. I too live in a small town and am ignorant of such simple concepts as "first base".

That said, good job keeping Azure and Oliver's relationship interesting. I thought they would go right for the sex, but you fooled me several times.

So far my favorite line is, "You're just saying that 'cause my breasts are larger than your body." Way to use the recurring joke in a non-corny way! I also love the microwave exploding. "I can explain, Ma! Azure did it!"

My main gripe is that this isn't a novel. It could use time for the two of them to get better acquainted, to the point where Azure starts complaining about Oliver's bad habits and vice versa. Wonderful as it is to see a couple fall in love, just once I want to witness how they stay in love.

I get it: this is your first story. So you may never revise it, much less have it published-but that would be great.

Thanks for the lovely comment! Glad you enjoyed the humour. Hah yes it's a shame it isn't a novel, but I have many ideas for novels that are far more suitable than this one, so it's a shame those aren't novels either. Someday I hope!
And yes I'll almost certainly never revise this because it's too old at this point, I simply don't write like this any more, and since so many people still seem to like it I won't dissapoint them by changing or deleting this copy.

What do you mean by suitable?

Well this story would never make for a good novel because the length just isn't there. But also the worldbuilding and universe isn't there either, it would have to be written almost from scratch, and at that point I'd much rather tell a new story with new characters. I'm pretty sure I'm done with these two, I mean it's been more than a decade and I never even got any art of these characters.

It's a cute old story, and I'm sure any critic now doesn't matter, but what the hell. I liked it for the cute relationship. But the pacing was bad, as in, you didn't slow down and really build any of the scenes. Get into the half-second emotions and stuff.

Also, even by the end of the story, I don't feel like I understand this world. What is "the furry base"? Is it a prison? The furries seem to be able to leave whenever they want. And if furries and humans hate each other so much, and the humans are so useless at fighting just one inexperienced boy, why isn't there a much larger conflict raging? Furries should be able to sneak into any town or city at micro size, then rampage for a few minutes, then shrink and disappear. The most terrifying hit-and-run tactics ever. Maybe I'm looking too deeply. As my High School english teacher used to say, "if you examine any fictional world closely enough, something about its logic is going to break somewhere."

Critics are always welcome, thanks for your time! And yes I'm sure the pacing was bad, I haven't read it in many years but I'm certain I wouldn't be very happy with it.
The worldbuilding is definitely awful in that regard, you're absolutely right, but my "excuse" for that is it was written as a story within a story. It was being written within a larger novel that I will never finish where all those concepts were already part of the world, and so they didn't need to be expanded on. That's why this story kind of fails as a standalone story, I should have written it from scratch to make more sense. But I was only 17 or 18 when I wrote it all, and I wasn't as concerned with quality as I would be today. Still, thanks for your comments!

oh wow. OH WOW. OH WOW.

Wow I can't believe people are still reading this story. Thanks for reading, I take it you enjoyed it?

Yeah, It's great!
Just missing a bit of worldbuilding, but other than that, it's pretty good!

You're definitely right, I made an edit to the description to finally address this. Thanks again for reading, glad you enjoy it!