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FINALLY! i get to Upload this. please thank 
Lavery for the conversion from the wonky .wps file so i could actually work with this.
also, i STILL don't know why, but it's not showing the apostrophes (') and the e-accent in Pokemon... i seriously need to figure out how to fix that...
okay. back to the Author's Comment. this is a Pokemon Fanfic i wrote up around March and never got to upload thanks to various events. Lavery got it fixed for me and now i can upload it for y'all! the story is the combined backstory of my 2 RP-only characters Luke (a Lucario) and Vui (a genetically engineered Eevee)
the scene in Chapter 3 (no spoilers from me! read it yourself) was especially difficult for me to write. i grew attached to that character and writing that scene was pretty difficult for me at the time.
i think i captured the essence of how the Tournament Commentator speaks pretty well. bonus points if you ended up reading his dialogue in his voice.
i had to take a few liberties with exactly HOW the moves were executed and how to describe them. i would've made Luke's Dragon Pulse attack blue, (as it is in the game) but since Aura is also blue it would've been a tad confusing. i also took some artistic license and gave Luke some moves and abilities that simply arn't in-game.
and yes, Vui stays with Team Rocket as basically a merc. (in case that wasn't clear enough) i'm still debating on whether or not to keep him wearing the ADORABLE headband, but regardless of whether he wears it all the time, or just when on a TR mission he still has it on his person.
i am also a proud member of
rocketinc and want to give them a shout-out here for TR's part in the story.
also, is it just me, or does Luke's school-story sound oddly like Vader's backstory in EP3? that was pretty unintentional, actually the Old Man AND Vince are both evil, using Luke to their own ends. Vince as an agent of chaos and the Old Man as Law so radical that it turns to oppression.
Pokemon © Nintendo and Game Freak
Luke, Vui, and the story © me
Lavery for the conversion from the wonky .wps file so i could actually work with this.also, i STILL don't know why, but it's not showing the apostrophes (') and the e-accent in Pokemon... i seriously need to figure out how to fix that...
okay. back to the Author's Comment. this is a Pokemon Fanfic i wrote up around March and never got to upload thanks to various events. Lavery got it fixed for me and now i can upload it for y'all! the story is the combined backstory of my 2 RP-only characters Luke (a Lucario) and Vui (a genetically engineered Eevee)
the scene in Chapter 3 (no spoilers from me! read it yourself) was especially difficult for me to write. i grew attached to that character and writing that scene was pretty difficult for me at the time.
i think i captured the essence of how the Tournament Commentator speaks pretty well. bonus points if you ended up reading his dialogue in his voice.
i had to take a few liberties with exactly HOW the moves were executed and how to describe them. i would've made Luke's Dragon Pulse attack blue, (as it is in the game) but since Aura is also blue it would've been a tad confusing. i also took some artistic license and gave Luke some moves and abilities that simply arn't in-game.
and yes, Vui stays with Team Rocket as basically a merc. (in case that wasn't clear enough) i'm still debating on whether or not to keep him wearing the ADORABLE headband, but regardless of whether he wears it all the time, or just when on a TR mission he still has it on his person.
i am also a proud member of
rocketinc and want to give them a shout-out here for TR's part in the story.also, is it just me, or does Luke's school-story sound oddly like Vader's backstory in EP3? that was pretty unintentional, actually the Old Man AND Vince are both evil, using Luke to their own ends. Vince as an agent of chaos and the Old Man as Law so radical that it turns to oppression.
Pokemon © Nintendo and Game Freak
Luke, Vui, and the story © me
Category Story / Pokemon
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I have some questions about this scene from your story:
"Luke hugged his friend close. Tears streaming down his muzzle despite his attempts to hold them back."
1. When Luke cried, did his tears specifically stream down:
A: The bridge of his muzzle and off the tip of his nose as he hung his head
or
B: The side of his muzzle diagonally and off his lower jaw and chin
2. Exactly how would Luke react and what would he say to me if I hugged him, rubbed his back and licked those tears streaming down his muzzle with my tongue during the scene where he cried? Because every time I read that, I fantasize licking every last tear from Luke's muzzle.
3. Dumb question but on a scale from 1 to 10 with 10 being the saltiest, how salty would Luke's tears taste on my tongue if I licked them directly from his muzzle?
4. On a scale from 1 to 10 with 1 being freezing cold and 10 being scalding hot, how warm were those tears streaming down Luke's muzzle?
I know these questions sound weird but please please PLEASE reply back!
"Luke hugged his friend close. Tears streaming down his muzzle despite his attempts to hold them back."
1. When Luke cried, did his tears specifically stream down:
A: The bridge of his muzzle and off the tip of his nose as he hung his head
or
B: The side of his muzzle diagonally and off his lower jaw and chin
2. Exactly how would Luke react and what would he say to me if I hugged him, rubbed his back and licked those tears streaming down his muzzle with my tongue during the scene where he cried? Because every time I read that, I fantasize licking every last tear from Luke's muzzle.
3. Dumb question but on a scale from 1 to 10 with 10 being the saltiest, how salty would Luke's tears taste on my tongue if I licked them directly from his muzzle?
4. On a scale from 1 to 10 with 1 being freezing cold and 10 being scalding hot, how warm were those tears streaming down Luke's muzzle?
I know these questions sound weird but please please PLEASE reply back!
well, those are strange questions... honestly I really only put thought into the first one (Answer B BTW, I dunno how the logistics would work for crying the other way) though given the context of the scene for 2 he'd likely react negatively due to a random third party coming up and doing that. in a different context of just hug-crying I could see it being more justifiable, (cleaning up after all) though still strange
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