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Finally got one of my projects done! ^^ Really, really proud of this. I'm actually thinking of using it as a basis for lore/mythology in a book should I ever get to writing it.
I feel it best to show an omitted stanza, to show my progress in it.
Embittered rivals slashed and pierced one
Another, droplets of red giving way to bloss-
Oming hues of luscious floral diadems.
This was what the fifth stanza was before I scrapped it and redid it. In this, the poem would've continued to six stanzas, but I changed my mind and shortened it. I'm quite pleased with the results.
I feel it best to show an omitted stanza, to show my progress in it.
Embittered rivals slashed and pierced one
Another, droplets of red giving way to bloss-
Oming hues of luscious floral diadems.
This was what the fifth stanza was before I scrapped it and redid it. In this, the poem would've continued to six stanzas, but I changed my mind and shortened it. I'm quite pleased with the results.
Category Poetry / All
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 790 B
Thank you. ^^ I will say that I don't plan to get rid of the stanza entirely, as it took me too much of a great deal of effort to even write it not to keep. Just felt it was currently out of place with the rest of the writing. Fairly certain "Embittered rivals..." had something to do with it, as it's what caused me to omit the stanza in the first place. Should I decide one day to rework this piece, I'll probably tinker with that stanza. Would've let me work a bit further with the end as compared to how I compressed it now.
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