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Overanalysing latest Story...
2 years ago
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... I got some feedback from you guys, and I am more than grateful for it.
Please give me more feedback, so I can become a better writer.
HEAVY SPOILERS AHEAD...
Back to the topic at hand:
As I've written in the desciption, I wrote this little story after an argument with a patient of mine on the topic of assisted suicide. Since this is still a hot topic in germany, and stricly said, it's illegal in germany. There are ways, and possibilities, but all involved are in jail with one leg and one arm... It's highly controversial.
I don't want to go to deep into it, and I won't bother you with my oppinions on the topic now...
I wrote the story as a sort of blowof valve... to vent my frustration.
I got some feedback on it from you guys, that I could have bring the coping of my mainchara a bit more to the forefront.
I did not even think about the coping to be honest. Bereavement wasn't on my mind then. But yes, if you'd like to see it that way, there is the whole DABRA in the story.
We have:
D - Denial: When Shirya first comes to the temple, she is in denial, of what is to happen to her.
A - Anger: When she verbally attacks Rayas, for pushing her and speeding things up, so they could kill her faster, she is clearly in the anger phase
B - Bagaining: When she has sex with the Great Khan, that can be seen as bargaining for her live...
R - Resignment: After bargaining with the Great Khan fails, she resigns and comes with Rayas without any resistance
and finally:
A - Acceptance: As she lies on the altar and closes her eyes, she accepts her fate
So, if we see it that way, yes there is the whole 5 phasese of coping aka DABRA in the story. And yes, perhaps I could have bring that a bit more to the forefront, but therefor I had to think about it when writing the story...
I'll try to incoperate such things better in the next story... if it will circle around this theme again.
Please give me more feedback, so I can become a better writer.
HEAVY SPOILERS AHEAD...
Back to the topic at hand:
As I've written in the desciption, I wrote this little story after an argument with a patient of mine on the topic of assisted suicide. Since this is still a hot topic in germany, and stricly said, it's illegal in germany. There are ways, and possibilities, but all involved are in jail with one leg and one arm... It's highly controversial.
I don't want to go to deep into it, and I won't bother you with my oppinions on the topic now...
I wrote the story as a sort of blowof valve... to vent my frustration.
I got some feedback on it from you guys, that I could have bring the coping of my mainchara a bit more to the forefront.
I did not even think about the coping to be honest. Bereavement wasn't on my mind then. But yes, if you'd like to see it that way, there is the whole DABRA in the story.
We have:
D - Denial: When Shirya first comes to the temple, she is in denial, of what is to happen to her.
A - Anger: When she verbally attacks Rayas, for pushing her and speeding things up, so they could kill her faster, she is clearly in the anger phase
B - Bagaining: When she has sex with the Great Khan, that can be seen as bargaining for her live...
R - Resignment: After bargaining with the Great Khan fails, she resigns and comes with Rayas without any resistance
and finally:
A - Acceptance: As she lies on the altar and closes her eyes, she accepts her fate
So, if we see it that way, yes there is the whole 5 phasese of coping aka DABRA in the story. And yes, perhaps I could have bring that a bit more to the forefront, but therefor I had to think about it when writing the story...
I'll try to incoperate such things better in the next story... if it will circle around this theme again.
