Black and white, Needs color to make it Awesome-er. that is all

It's good art all around, you come up with far more better ideas than me.

Yeah I agree with Jak, more color would be a nice addition. Hmm what can I say that I don't like or you can improve on *thinks for a moment as he re-browse gallery*...Nah most of the stuff I can think of feel like nitpicks more than criticisms so I'll hold them back.

I love your simplistic style. I just seems to work quite well with the childish nature of the McInTots comic which made me watch you in the first place.

Art is cute , story is good , just needs more porn though .

erm... go check this guy out  thekzx

Are you interested in art criticism or is this just a plea for attention? Because if you want my honest opinion, I will give it to you.

Art Criticism, of course. I enjoy trying to get better

In all honesty, it doesn't seem like you put as much work into your drawings as you should. It's not just the absence of color, but the absence of shading that makes your characters seem rather flat. Try using some light source shading to give your characters weight and dimension. Find the place that light exists in each frame and have your characters reflect it.

Also, the line weights are too consistent... you should use thin lines for subtle features, and thicker lines for outlines, to distinguish characters from the backgrounds. You may also want to throw in some background details so it doesn't look like your characters are floating in a milky white void.

There are points in the comics where you take the Penny Arcade route of pasting the same characters in different frames, slightly changing the face to express different emotions. Don't do this; it's a cop-out. You're missing a golden opportunity to sell the personalities of the characters when you keep them in the same poses. Thoughts are expressed not only through words, but gestures.

When you draw full body poses, use a line of action, then draw a skeletal structure over it, then draw details on that, and then finally the clothing. The line of action will give your characters' poses emotion and impact, while the layering will give the characters a more natural look. Clothing in particular should look like it's being worn, not bolted onto the character, so make shirts billow if they're not tucked in and add some seams to pants if they have it.

All right, I'm starting to sound like a dick so I'll switch gears. The facial close ups are well done, adding impact to dramatic scenes. I especially liked the artsy "half character" drawing you did in one of the sci-fi comics. Keep doing these, but take the advice I've given you earlier and make these scenes really pop. That's what's missing from your artwork right now... pop. It's the kind of thing you have to really strive for. Right now I'm seeing "just good enough," and that's never enough to make an impact.

Thank you for a really long and insightful critique. I really appreciate it. I'm only responding to these points as to illuminate the reasons as to why I draw the way I do. Don't take this as hostility (it ain't :P)

Alot of the things you mention I would be doing if it didn't take so long or it's something I'm not quite good at yet. The shading is something I've been trying out in Edo Tails and Protostar Zero, cus I never really have done it before.

I do like that thick outline/thin inside look. It's something I've been meaning to get around trying. The line consistency, however... well, it's not something I have a great amount of control over. What you see is what I was lucky to get out of an hour or two of trying to draw the stuff.

One thing you mention a lot of people mention: the copy-pasting. I don't see it as a cop-out, in the way that I'm using it; I'm trying to stay true to THOSE particular moments in real life. Not every single emotion has a gesture attached to it. Not every single line of dialogue needs a stupid dramatic pose. Then it would look stupid, unreal or stagey and look like I'm trying too hard to show off. THE CHARACTERS WOULD FEEL LIKE CAPTAIN KIRK (as exaggerated by Family Guy.) I've never EVER liked it when people do it. Now, I'm not saying characters should remain static. No. Just... ugh, when people in REAL LIFE talk, they don't usually put on a show, know what I mean? I do the copy-paste on purpose, not to be lazy (maybe in a FEW instances) I do it for the exact comedic or dramatic timing I'm striving for. Like I said, not every emotion or dialogue has to be... undulated or spasmed out of the character like a high-pressure water hose. I don't think I'm missing out on any opportunity for personality. I mean... poses and gestures are important, yeah, and so is dialogue, of course, but I don't want to over power something that honestly doesn't come into TOO much play in real life. Real life isn't about people flailing about. I don't even know people like that. Most people just... move their hands a little when talking. It's about subtle movements humans do, which is what I do when I change the little parts of copy-pasted images. Kids, especially, just do stupid shit with their hands when talking, which I've been trying to figure out how to properly portray that.

I do draw line of action, skeleton, character, clothes, but for some reason, the skeleton looks MUCH better than when the body is drawn. It's annoying. It won't translate, so I've been experimenting lately with EXTREME lines of motion and seeing if that translates to something hehe. So far it's kinda working.

Also, clothes are not easy to just DRAW. I'm trying to get in more realistic looks of clothes, but it's not like it's something that just COMES naturally. There are lots of things I'm trying to get right.

Also, I'm not trying to make any kind of impact. I'm just doing something that I love. That's all.

No color is the only flaw

i know most ppl like the clean lines but ive always like the sketchy kind of drawings. be nice to see some of thoughs from ya but i know EVERY one else dont.

I would if it were easier to do that on a tablet. If I had a working scanner, you'd DEFINITELY be seeing a lot of sketchy stuff from me

Well, your art may be a little crudely drawn, but it isn't crude.
I like that you've stuck with it, the drawing for so long.

Not really a criticism as such but I think I like the older pencil stuff more than the more professional looking computer edited stuff. Not saying you should change the format of Mcintots or Edo Tails, just that it might be cool to see a few old-style pencil sketches every now and again.

And I LOVE the black and whiteness. Please don't switch to colour! [/manga nerd]

once I get access to a scanner again, you WILL see pencil stuff again, cus I draw it all the time.

I also think your copy-paste is a little overused in some MT comics. You know I do it too, but when so many panels are so similar, it's actually distracting from the humor and story. Try some tricks like cropping/zooming on the speaking characters.

C'mon, brother. You know why I do the copy-pasta; there is comic timing that can ONLY be achieved with minimal motion. Not to mention, as I've said before, in real life, people don't DANCE AROUND while talking; their arms move, that's about it.

I don't think there's anything wrong with using it. I just thinking using the same tableau over several strips is overuse. To date, the only sequence that bothered me was the sitting-playing-video-games one. Get those kids a Wii so they can have some exercise! Or a Leapfrog Zippity.

No Wii. Old video game console for old school playing. How it was back in day. This you learn.