Uh.. well.. it's not that I don't like his stories it's just that.. they style of writing doesn't interest me much to be honest. There are plenty of punctuation problems with dialogue to begin with the it feels like a block of words from one end to another when it's all jumbled up. Conversations can be conversations but it's stuck in between each other. Twice is okay but.. I mean.. look at the amount of dialogues in one para?

If you saw and analyze story books, you can see that they place punctuations at the right place after each sentence is taken and it indicates a proper period. Also, I have yet to see authors that actually piece dialogues into a wall of text by itself. The format is a big problem though.

This may sound like a criticism and a flame but me, as a heavy critique, sometimes to some stories, I see that there are plenty of work to do. I see that people loved it but I don't. So, I'm just saying that it's not my kind of place to say that it's entirely not good.

Please send him critisms thru a note X3
He'll appreciate it, I'm not so good in stories and this kind of area <3

mmaayybbeee not... I'm afraid that this comment might turn into something bad for that person. I've been attacked by people for not taking my critisicm and flaming me. so.. i kinda stopped giving much of a review to people since I get stabbed for giving something good.