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County Fair
15 years ago
So, I am back with a whole new and fully completed story. Whoo! I am sure that you all are going to like this one. I've been working on it since the state fair rolled into town last year. It was meant to be a short story, but it certainly took on a life of its own and even at over 51,000 words, it's not as big as it could have been. Still, though there were somethings that I did not include, I am happy with the way the story has been laid out.
Before anyone asks, this is it, there is not going to be a sequel or anything else added to the story later on. However, I think that I ended this story well and whatever is left can remain up to the reader's imagination.
If you want to talk about the characters or the plot or comment on the story as a whole. This is the place to do it. I welcome all feedback, positive and negative so please don't be shy.
And yes, I am going to be getting back to work on Stranded shortly. I have a new writing program called Scrivener that I am still learning how to use and I am still learning how to use my mac in general, but sooner or later, I can assure you all, it will get done. =D
Anyways, I hope you all enjoy my new story and keep reading my demented fantasies
Before anyone asks, this is it, there is not going to be a sequel or anything else added to the story later on. However, I think that I ended this story well and whatever is left can remain up to the reader's imagination.
If you want to talk about the characters or the plot or comment on the story as a whole. This is the place to do it. I welcome all feedback, positive and negative so please don't be shy.
And yes, I am going to be getting back to work on Stranded shortly. I have a new writing program called Scrivener that I am still learning how to use and I am still learning how to use my mac in general, but sooner or later, I can assure you all, it will get done. =D
Anyways, I hope you all enjoy my new story and keep reading my demented fantasies
FireFox
~firefox
I haven't read all of them, but I probably will eventually. From what I gathered from parts 1 and 2, it will be a very enjoyable read as well!
Shalion
~shalion
OP
I'll be looking forward to hearing what you think when you finish
MattII
~mattii
Good stuff, although I was kind of expect a straight Rascal/Serge, Serge/Rose Serge/Rascal swap at the end, rather than them actually figuring out the reversal process.
Shalion
~shalion
OP
It could have definitely gone along those lines, however, I was not wanting the story to carry on any longer than it needed to, also, I really wanted the deception of Rose meeting with who she assumes is Rascal in Sarge's body but is in fact not; despite the fact that as it turned out, it did not amount to much. That would have been impossible without either a reversal process or a third party. A third party would definitely have been interesting and the various swaps made at the end to get everyone un-mixed again XD, but again, the story was already too long and I had to draw the line somewhere. I cut out several possible scenes immediately after Rascal swaps with Sarge for the first time as well. Overall, however, I think the story functions without the extra stuff.
MattII
~mattii
I'm also a little surprised that Rascal managed to contribute at the end, I mean wasn't he pretty much immobile in the previous scene?
GhostBlackburn
∞ghostblackburn
Another wonderful story from ya, I really enjoyed reading it, and how things all turn out in the end. keep up the awesome work.
Shalion
~shalion
OP
Thank you. I knew from the start how things would turn out, but I hope that I kept you guessing throughout the story
GhostBlackburn
∞ghostblackburn
you sure did, it was a great joy reading unseen events unfold in the story, Rascal played his part pretty for a first time fat bitch and mother to pup's that wasn't even his at first. the seeing that the jerk had some what of a heart to not just leave her pups in the woods. hehe well guess ya have to keep your income safe and some what happy. hehe thought couldn't help but chuckle every time Rascal got on the Mac. As for the ending, I would have never guessed that he would be getting his old body back until the fight, keeping Rascal closes protective pup at the fair ground turn out way better then I first seemed. out standing work Shalion.
Shalion
~shalion
OP
Aw, I am so glad you enjoyed the story. I was not wanting anything to be obvious. For you to be as shaken up as Rascal undoubtedly was means that I succeeded as a writer. =D And as I said before, I am very pleased with the ending, even if not everything that could have been in the story was.
