Oh my, a flaw.
17 years ago
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I was reading through my Dave & Kelly stories again, both as a gigantic ego stroke and to try to shake off the writer's block that threatens my Nanowrimo story, and I noticed something odd about the way I handle dialog. The vast, vast majority of the time I write spoken words, I do it like this:
He put down his mug, looked out the window, and smiled.
"Here she comes now."
Notice anything? No 'said'. I write something that hints at the character's state of mind and suggests who is speaking the line, but no 'said'. I almost never use 'he said "Hey, good to see you."' or '"Hey, good to see you," he said.' I just cut that part out all together.
Now that I think about it, since I always start a new line for dialog, I'm not sure how I'd even write that first option.
Hmmm. It seems I'm imperfect. :P
MUSING OVER.
He put down his mug, looked out the window, and smiled.
"Here she comes now."
Notice anything? No 'said'. I write something that hints at the character's state of mind and suggests who is speaking the line, but no 'said'. I almost never use 'he said "Hey, good to see you."' or '"Hey, good to see you," he said.' I just cut that part out all together.
Now that I think about it, since I always start a new line for dialog, I'm not sure how I'd even write that first option.
Hmmm. It seems I'm imperfect. :P
MUSING OVER.
NorthRoberts
~northroberts
Well done. It's always good to mix it up. But sometimes, a well placed "he said" is the right way to go.
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