Heart Hacker.EXE
11 years ago
"How can something so enticing..."
There's no denying it, what you do to me, dear, it's electric.
You set my processors on fire, with a wink of your eye.
A passing glance, a slight touch and it's system overload.
Though I can't begin to comprehend it you cause my circuits to surge.
I cannot move nor make a sound because you have me under your control before my system even reloads.
You hack my heart, and I love it.
You set my processors on fire, with a wink of your eye.
A passing glance, a slight touch and it's system overload.
Though I can't begin to comprehend it you cause my circuits to surge.
I cannot move nor make a sound because you have me under your control before my system even reloads.
You hack my heart, and I love it.

MurphySlaugh
~murphyslaugh
Nice...a few minor changes though you might want to consider...3rd line...it should read "A passing glance..." (with an "n") rather than "glace". And the word "cannot" got split somehow. Might need to fix that otherwise it breaks the rhythm of your most excellent poem there.

Sycroni_Fokz
~sycronifokz
OP
Fixed, thanks Gramps!

MurphySlaugh
~murphyslaugh
You're welcome, grandson. It was a wonderful poem. :)

Sycroni_Fokz
~sycronifokz
OP
I really got into the android side of me with this one. I'm glad you enjoyed it

MurphySlaugh
~murphyslaugh
What what it would have been like if you got into the Apple side of you? *snickers*