I don't really like some, like the Sonic stuff, but it is your art so I don't really say anything.

Well, for me, I'd say that I like the fact that you've gone out on a limb and written something from your own heart. There's a different feel to a person's writing when they're writing what they want to write rather than what they think will please others, and your Droter story has that for me. I admit, I haven't looked up your other works.

I noticed some grammar and spelling issues in your writing which I think need/deserve to be cleaned up, and on a personal level I'd like to see more dialogue and minutiae of interactions between characters, but aside from that, like I say, I love the honesty of your work!

I know what part of the above means to me: your paragraphs are all quite big and big paragraphs almost always feel like slow reading. Lots of shorter paragraphs (i.e., tracts of dialogue) speed up the writing, kind of like literary lubrication.

I think I will find agreement that a bit more lubrication is always good :P

But seriously, giving your readers that change in the texture of your writings helps keep the experience of reading your works interesting. It gives us a break when we've read a few long paragraphs and when those longer paragraphs come up again we are ready for them again and can roll up our metaphorical sleeves and get stuck into the story again.