I haven't read all of your work but I did read Rising Bread.
I think you do a stellar job of creating characters through dialogue.
I liked reading the way you handled the description of the transformation and especially the way it made the main character more direct.
I think the way you peppered in Brom's description, the short intro at the beginning and then adding to it later with Sam's daydreaming.
The way brom and sam punched eachother into admitting they loved eachother was really hot.

Honestly, the only thing I kind of blanched at was when Sam started eating raw dough but it really drove the point home that his body needed fuel for the change.
I'll have to go back and read some of your other work, but Rising Bread was well written and well choreographed.
May append more notes later when I read the other stories.

you know, once i enjoy a story, it's hard for me to say anything constructive about it.
I already enjoy it so why looks for things to improve ><
But i do understand why you're looking for criticism .
As for what i like about your work, well it has got to be the way you describe the process.
Like when the orcs in the village took back control, or how they absorbed people into themselves, makes you feel like you're there in a way ><

I enjoy everything you do it's hard to find a bad thing. I really like what you did with King of Flesh. Absorption is not quite my thing but I can't be selfish. Since you enjoy that, then it's fine. They are your creations. The way you handled the village changing and the corruption of each character was really good. I really felt for the son in many ways. It was dark but a good kind of dark. I could picture that world in my mind. I don't know what else to critique on. Keep doing what inspires you,

Hello! I've not read all of your stuff (about which more below), but I have read some and "Rising Bread" is still fairly fresh in my mind. I also remember "The Beast Below" from a while back.

So first of all I'd say you're doing a pretty good job. Your writing is technically competent (not always a given on FA!) and you create interesting characters and put them in interesting situations. Rising Bread is a good example here: Sam has a problem (he's shy to the point of being fearful) and he is stuck. A new factor comes into play that pushes him out of his comfort zone and allows him to experience character growth (as it were). The actions of the characters involved make sense -- bonus points for NOT having the situation arise by total random chance but rather because of the conscious, well-motivated, and not-obvious-at-the-time design of another character -- and there is a satisfactory end to his arc.

In terms of what could be improved: aside from the very occasional typo, you clearly have the basics sorted so we're into the realm of opinion. One is that the second-to-last scene (Orc-Sam finds Brom) felt like it went a bit quickly. (And I don't just mean that the sex was fade-to-black -- that fit fine with the style. I was left wanting to see some more dialogue between them.)

One point that confused me a bit at first, and still doesn't sit quite right, is the change in speech patterns. That has fairly major implications in terms of the mental changes, and I'm not sure it holds up. (One explanation is that he's lost a lot of mental capacity, which would seem like an oddly cruel move on Brom's part. More likely is that the orc spirit is "holding the reins" to a large degree... but then why are Sam+Brom talking to each other in Human and not in Orcish? And even then, it's a bit odd that Orc-Sam remembers some things but forgets pronouns he's been using since childhood.) Maybe I missed a clue, but my impression was that it was a quick aesthetic decision.

About "King of Flesh" -- I haven't read those. The reason is, basically, that the chapters look so short! I was left wondering why you didn't just release a few at a time (or even wait until the full story is done, depending on how many you're planning to do). Serial-form is much trickier to write because you can't go back and edit earlier events...

Anyway. Please do keep writing! I like TF (and orcs!) so it's great to come across stories which check those boxes *and* are thoughtfully written.

Thank you for bringing those up.

In Rising Bread, I was originally going to have them speak orcish to each other, but thinking back, I'm not totally sure why I decided against it. I think I wanted them to keep talking in broken English to emphasize their bluntness and direct nature of the orc spirit in contrast to their human sides, but at the same time, you're right, it doesn't make much practical sense. I could have spent more time fleshing that aspect out, and I realize I tend to rush at the end of my projects which is something I really need to address.

As for the shortness of the King of Flesh chapters, when I started, I planned on releasing them on a weekly basis. Writing one short chapter each weekend. And you can tell how well that ended up. 1.5 years and only 5 up. I have the outline for the whole story written up, I just need to fill out all the events in between, and actually write them.

In any case, thanks for the feedback and analysis. I really value this sort of thing.