What exactly does "ass pull" mean? Is it the same as "pulling my leg"?

An ass pull is a literary device in which the writer fills in a plot hole with whatever dumb thing pops to mind first.

unless he is pulling out of THIS ass, in qhich I'm totally fine x3
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/18236331/

http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/Asspull

I'd be up for reading and proofing. 'Bout all I CAN do is write. (Now if I'd ever get off my tail to finish my work, that'd be great ^^)

You can read Will Eisner's "Comics and Sequential Art" and "Graphic Storytelling and Visual Narrative." If you want to go deeper, there are some screenwriting books that get more into character development, story structure, and stuff like that.

Have you figured out how FF, or at least this particular arc, ends?

i have ending of first arc planned
i also study from tv tropes a lot because im a cheap ass and dont want to buy a book lol

I have one of them in PDF form if you're interested.

TVtropes is a fun resource, but it's really just a list of ingredients. Knowing how to put them together is what storytelling is.

thanks for your offer but I'll stick with tv tropes because it's easy for me to digest(accessibility)

I am a writer. I can help.

So far I find myself immersed in the world of FF. I like the characters and their development. I find we haven't seen a lot of Xiv and Mia recently, even though I assume they're the main characters, but I understand the development of the Okkan girls is important too.
Right now I find the plot is very open and some exposition may be needed at this point. It's been a long time since the world was introduced by Xiv telling the story to the children and talking to the frontierspeople. The mystery bad guy is super-powerful, enough to kill Okkan Exalted warriors, yet he claims he's not the mercenaries' boss. So you have a few ends to tie up and some reveals to do.
Cheers!

that's some good analyses :)
You seem to get a lot of clues, good job :)

First chapter certainly does set an idea of what kind of world the story is set in and a hint at the technology. I get little bits of old western, steampunk (airship) and obviously fantasy all rolled together. You get a sense of the relationship between two characters as well. Mia definitely feels more like the one who's serving as guide for Xiv and while I wouldn't say he "hired" her per-say, it is fairly easy to tell they have an arrangement of sorts going. ^^'

It's obvious Xiv is more used to living a more rooted, tribal lifestyle whereas Mia is the one who probably travels about for a living. Therefore, the question of what Xiv is seeking makes for a good intro of plot. What brought someone who normally resides in the same place out of his usual setting to go follow a ring (lol...)? All of this is assuming the reader didn't skip ahead and read the other chapters, mind you. Long and short of it, story-wise it both makes sense and has a decent hook.


Will add more chapter analyses in future replies.