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Update for Episode X- All The Pieces
10 years ago
I apologize for the delay in getting this episode released. I had a really hefty outline finished and thought it'd be a picnic to get it fleshed into a full-sized episode... not so. I had a bit of an issue moving from Reyshan's perspective and the way he interacts with people/situations to Zeke's. Basically, I got 3500 words into it before realizing that on the heels of IX, the whole thing sounded like more Reyshan, and not a completely different and unique character. While this is certainly a more action-oriented episode than IX was, there's a bit of character development in it for Zeke, and I simply couldn't have it read that way. So, I scrapped it and began again.
This second time, it's going much more smoothly and I'm a lot happier with it. I accomplished this by completely pushing IX from my mind, re-reading The Hollow Skin a few times, and treating this as a continuation of that because that's exactly what it is. There's still some rough dialogue that I'm gonna tweak before release, but all in all, much better piece. Here's an excerpt:
The frustration and growing anger from the hailing pilot was no longer politely hidden.
"Listen lady, I don't know how long she's going to last. I don't know what's wrong with her, I have no way of finding out; what I do know is that whatever she pulled from that box to her suit is important, or it wouldn't have attacked her like this. We need to find out what's going on, and we need to do it now, before whatever happened to them spreads out. Clear me to dock."
She shook her head, and Kienan could sense the fear radiating from her, almost tangible. "Niner-Niner One, I apologize for any inconvenience, but I simply can not-"
"Geresh'ekana yaak t'oo... clear my approach, goddamn it! Now!"
She was starting to crack. "I can't..."
Even through the earpiece, even though it was muffled behind the Ferean's respiratory equipment, the retort was a bellowing, furious roar. "Mark it, bitch, I will blow the fucking front door down if you don't let me get this girl to a damn hospital!"
Kienan's terminal lit up as it caught energy readings coming off the vessel. "Ma'am..." he said, alarmed, and pointed it out as she turned to him. The crazy bastard is gonna do it. There were several thousand people moving to and from the docks to the actual bazaar at any given time. This would be bloody.
Potentially should be released by the end of this week, if progress continues as well as it has been. Stay tuned.
This second time, it's going much more smoothly and I'm a lot happier with it. I accomplished this by completely pushing IX from my mind, re-reading The Hollow Skin a few times, and treating this as a continuation of that because that's exactly what it is. There's still some rough dialogue that I'm gonna tweak before release, but all in all, much better piece. Here's an excerpt:
The frustration and growing anger from the hailing pilot was no longer politely hidden.
"Listen lady, I don't know how long she's going to last. I don't know what's wrong with her, I have no way of finding out; what I do know is that whatever she pulled from that box to her suit is important, or it wouldn't have attacked her like this. We need to find out what's going on, and we need to do it now, before whatever happened to them spreads out. Clear me to dock."
She shook her head, and Kienan could sense the fear radiating from her, almost tangible. "Niner-Niner One, I apologize for any inconvenience, but I simply can not-"
"Geresh'ekana yaak t'oo... clear my approach, goddamn it! Now!"
She was starting to crack. "I can't..."
Even through the earpiece, even though it was muffled behind the Ferean's respiratory equipment, the retort was a bellowing, furious roar. "Mark it, bitch, I will blow the fucking front door down if you don't let me get this girl to a damn hospital!"
Kienan's terminal lit up as it caught energy readings coming off the vessel. "Ma'am..." he said, alarmed, and pointed it out as she turned to him. The crazy bastard is gonna do it. There were several thousand people moving to and from the docks to the actual bazaar at any given time. This would be bloody.
Potentially should be released by the end of this week, if progress continues as well as it has been. Stay tuned.
