Dream-Catcher
8 years ago
General
Dawn sun and birdsong.
Sopping brow. New dream-catcher,
Now torn to tatters.
Sopping brow. New dream-catcher,
Now torn to tatters.
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Part of the problem is that you seem to be trying too hard to tell us something, which is, again, not really in the spirit of haiku. The best haiku give an couple well juxtaposed images to be left to the reader to supply any meaning.
Another problem I see is your strict adherence to the 5-7-5 syllable guideline of haiku. This could, if you're not careful, hurt an otherwise fine haiku. For instance, a couple words here seem a bit superfluous.
I will say, however, that though the first line is a common, almost cliché, image, it does juxtapose well with the images that follow. I'll say that you can easily salvage this haiku.
Also, don't hate me if my critique seems too harsh. This is, after all, just my opinion, and I hope it helps.
Yes, this deviates from the traditional execution in that it juxtaposes three images instead of two, and in the implied magical realism. But, this still depends on the reader to put it all together and discern what I'm trying to get at, like any other haiku.
I'll probably continue to tinker with it. I was given the prompt "dream-catcher" and hurriedly produced this.