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Thoughts and critique?
7 years ago
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Could I get some feedback on the description of this picture? I rarely ever WRITE things, so I want to know if this is good or not.
Any criticism, positive or negative, is appreciated!
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/28123273/
Any criticism, positive or negative, is appreciated!
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/28123273/
Not sure what else to say.
And as for the pauses, those were pretty intentional. That's not normally the way she speaks, but this is a pretty uncomfortable discussion. I wanted the writing to mimic actual speech.
Her going "Oh I just said that" about the uncomfortable parts of her did kinda work though.
But thanks for the critique! I still wish more people would leave some.