Reminds my vaguely of http://youtu.be/T23D193nCys Darkness by Disturbed.

Wow, really? That's actually my absolute favourite song from them! lol

It's nice and calm overall, a thoughful and almost bitter / lamenting kind of vibe, very nice. I think the drum pattern is perhaps a little busy (or maybe just a bit heavy on the snare usage) if you wanted it to go down a half-ballad kind of route, but that depends on what sort of vocals you had in mind for it

I think building up into something heavier might be a trifle predictable for this sort of track, I'd be inclined to have a go at dropping the drum and acoustic away into something quiet and spacious - perhaps string led with a stronger vocal over it, get some really nice lyrics out and then bring the drums & guitars back in to turn an 'epic' stand-back-and-go-woah moment back into something with energy and hook to it... if that makes any sense whatsoever...! haha

The alternative is to go sinister and sporadically heavy with it - sorta like Pantera's "This Love" maybe

You've easily got a good foundation there though, keep it up!

Damn, I really like the softer-then-epic idea! I'm getting the feeling that this is going to be another long, keyboard-heavy song...Awesome! :D

Much thanks! :D

I'm hearing the need for a V chord, the I-vi progression kinda leads into it but then never quite arrives. I'd then resolve that deceptively to bVI or like, the major VI. It feels like it's ready to switch keys at this point, or at least have some sort of extended harmony. From there, you could build out a new chord progression and develop the do-fa-mi-la-do theme in that new tonal area.

If you'll believe it, even though I've been playing the guitar (and everything else) for almost 20 years, and writing for at least 15, I actually can't read music to save my life, only tabs, and know theory only by sound, so I have only the slightest idea of what you're saying. lol I know the do-fa-mi-la-do, though!

It sounds really good. Though in my opinion it sounds like their might be a little to much wet signal gain on the lead guitar as well as some spots with the keyboard. But that's only if you reeealy want me to say something about it that sounds off.

Well, this is all digital instruments at the moment. When I finally figure out what I can do with it, it will be done with real instruments. :)

Ahh, okay, that makes sense then. :D Can't wait to see (hear) what you do to it!

lol I can't wait until my brain stops derping and I can think of a way to keep it going. ;P

XD Well best of luck. Mine has been derping for seven months on a story I should be writing. :|