Ooh...I'm interested to read more!

Thanks I hope it will be. It may be awhile before I manage to post more since I'm just writing during whatever free time I have at work.

Yeah, I know how that is; it's hard to find time to write...

Just keep working on it when you have the opportunity, and post it when you've got some done. People will understand if you take a long time in doing so.

^^It sounds wonderful. I would definitely love to read more!!!

I'm intrigued, I must demand more, and that you check out my story.

Sounds like it could be an interesting story.

Ooooh, nice hook. I wouldn't mind reading more.

Wow, Thanks Never saw this one coming. If you have any tips at all It would be appreciated.

Don't have any really. Just remember to keep a core idea, simple points that the plot will take and expand on it.

Oooo very forbidding but also intrriguing ^__^ Very good work sir.
I only have one of two pointers...
Your use of descriptive language is beautiful but you need to reign in a bit to avoid sounding cliche...particularly the line "to make even the bravest soul wake in a cold sweat". There in nothing wrong with it as a sentence, but it is a little overly dramatic, pehaps even sensationlist.

Second, I don't know if this will apply in your further writing but here you tend to list things. I would say that both "torture, mutilation, abandonment and suffering" AND "strong, solid, refined" are both one word too long. There all awesome words, don't get me wrong, but again it does seem like your hammering the point home a little too hard.

In any case, this is a very promising start ^__________^ Well done!

Try not begging for interest...people will read or they wont...more than likely they wont though...not if this is your best work....get better or just give up already.

Fuck you