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Thanks for the Favorite, BTWs! =3 I really appreciate it
And I don't think that would be weird or even necessarily rude (just don't tell your actual school friends about the stories x3 ). One should be free to write about whatever they want, even if it's writing about an imaginary second life with a completely different set of school friends. =3
part1: http://www.furaffinity.net/journal/4365931/
part2: http://www.furaffinity.net/journal/4372563/
and part 3: http://www.furaffinity.net/journal/4389731/
Hehe, spring break? x3 And yet it's still winter =P
Anyways, well I really like the characters. I find Todd and especially Ethan to be quite adorable! And having Brandon and the other bullies in the story does a really good job of keeping the balance of positivity vs. negativity.
Really the only thing I think you need to improve on is your grammar. The multitude of improper usage, inappropriate tense changes, mistakes in spelling, and other errors made the story a wee bit hard to follow and gave the work as a whole an unappealing physical look. I think if you cleaned it up a bit, this great story you have started here could really shine. =3
So yeah, other than the grammar 'n' such, I think you're doing a fantastic job writing this story so far. ;3
me:(pokes you) this is like script format.
lolz XD hmm but yeah XD thanks for liking todd and ethan XD and wat u mean by cleaning it up a bit XD
Hehe, you're welcomes =3
Cleaning it up a bit = fixing the grammar issues
Going to the mall? Oo! That sounds like fun! Though maybe instead of making the school day a half day, you could have them decide to meet up at the mall either after school or another day as it would kind of be weird to randomly make the school a half day out of nowhere. That's just my thought.
Anything wrong?
(btw the drawing's damn amazing :p)
Aww, thanks! You're too kind. <=)