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I completed these two paintings this week. I feel like a fucking boss.
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Basically, this is like a second earth. Original one didn't fair so well, got fried. That weird tilted structure in the back is actually a gigantic ship that carried a bunch of people to the new planet. There are a bunch of them all over this new planet and they serve as a epicenters for the cities. The robot is actually one that was made on old Earth and has an artificial soul. Sort of like an AI. I'ts like the only one that knows how to fix a defense grid in place on the new planet to shield it from massive solar flares. The chick is the daughter of a robotics repair shop owner (convenient yeah?) and the robot (who I haven't named yet) has been in their possession for a long time now. These two are bros and the chick cares for him. She does't really know about his real purpose. no one really does. The robot doesn't even know much about it. (I think??) I have a really bad habit of writing myself into a corner. this story is actually a tie in to another story I wrote 2 years ago for my first Illustration class
PLEASE CRITIQUE
STORY
Basically, this is like a second earth. Original one didn't fair so well, got fried. That weird tilted structure in the back is actually a gigantic ship that carried a bunch of people to the new planet. There are a bunch of them all over this new planet and they serve as a epicenters for the cities. The robot is actually one that was made on old Earth and has an artificial soul. Sort of like an AI. I'ts like the only one that knows how to fix a defense grid in place on the new planet to shield it from massive solar flares. The chick is the daughter of a robotics repair shop owner (convenient yeah?) and the robot (who I haven't named yet) has been in their possession for a long time now. These two are bros and the chick cares for him. She does't really know about his real purpose. no one really does. The robot doesn't even know much about it. (I think??) I have a really bad habit of writing myself into a corner. this story is actually a tie in to another story I wrote 2 years ago for my first Illustration class
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Very nicely done. Not too super-futuristic (Back to the Future part II), but obviously not entirely modern. I'm guessing this is in about 2020?
Also, on the bad side, I noticed a couple of things (ocd tendencies DX):
1.) The guy with the red backpack is wearing a watch on his right wrist.
2.) The right hand of the chick on the bench (I could be way off on this) seems a bit small.
3.) While I love the look of the robot, I'm confused by the face. I personally like it, but I can't see companies building service robots without faces when they have hands that are that developed already (the hands on a robot could be tricky to get, as well as a 'personality' for it to sit like that).
Overall, I love it. I really love the way you designed the robot, and the fashion development, while not going overboard on 'futuristic' guesses.
Very nicely done. Not too super-futuristic (Back to the Future part II), but obviously not entirely modern. I'm guessing this is in about 2020?
Also, on the bad side, I noticed a couple of things (ocd tendencies DX):
1.) The guy with the red backpack is wearing a watch on his right wrist.
2.) The right hand of the chick on the bench (I could be way off on this) seems a bit small.
3.) While I love the look of the robot, I'm confused by the face. I personally like it, but I can't see companies building service robots without faces when they have hands that are that developed already (the hands on a robot could be tricky to get, as well as a 'personality' for it to sit like that).
Overall, I love it. I really love the way you designed the robot, and the fashion development, while not going overboard on 'futuristic' guesses.
Thanks!
I fucked up the robots hands ( and the girls) and completely looked over them when I was finishing things up. As far as his face goes, he is supposed to have been built with an Artificial Soul. I couldn't think of a design that could work to show more personality that wasn't a rip off of Iron Giant.
The wrist watch is actually just a random wrist band thing. Just to add a little more color.
The reason she is dressed like that Is because she is the daughter of the owner of Kane's Robotics. (the shop in the background) and those are work clothes.
I see the problem with her neck. That was bad perspective on my part.
I'll explain more in the description!
I fucked up the robots hands ( and the girls) and completely looked over them when I was finishing things up. As far as his face goes, he is supposed to have been built with an Artificial Soul. I couldn't think of a design that could work to show more personality that wasn't a rip off of Iron Giant.
The wrist watch is actually just a random wrist band thing. Just to add a little more color.
The reason she is dressed like that Is because she is the daughter of the owner of Kane's Robotics. (the shop in the background) and those are work clothes.
I see the problem with her neck. That was bad perspective on my part.
I'll explain more in the description!
First off, from the thumbnail I thought this was a photo which to me means you've nailed the composition and color scheme. I love the world you've built into the piece and especially how naturally the robot fits in to it. The problems arise when we hit the girl and the robot up close. The anatomy problems are minor, and redrusker already pointed out what's wrong with her face far more eloquently than I could, though I think something is off in the placement of the face on the head that he didn't touch on, almost like the surface of the face is there, but not the underlying bone structure.
My major concern is that the colors of girl & boy are muddy and washed out to me. The shade of the bus stop versus the bright, sunny afternoon behind them generally would make some of the deeper shadows appear almost black, even if there's a multitude of colors going on inside them.
All that aside, I love this piece and want to see more of this world as you make it.
NOW IMMA GO BACK TO TALKING ABOUT DICKS AND BOOBS IN ALLCAPS.
My major concern is that the colors of girl & boy are muddy and washed out to me. The shade of the bus stop versus the bright, sunny afternoon behind them generally would make some of the deeper shadows appear almost black, even if there's a multitude of colors going on inside them.
All that aside, I love this piece and want to see more of this world as you make it.
NOW IMMA GO BACK TO TALKING ABOUT DICKS AND BOOBS IN ALLCAPS.
Man, I really need a good reference monitor for color-proofing D:
I tried to make the characters in the background a little more washed out just from being in the sun, but the sky is way too vibrant.
Thanks for the critique. I really appreciate it!!
I have another illustration in the works right now.
I tried to make the characters in the background a little more washed out just from being in the sun, but the sky is way too vibrant.
Thanks for the critique. I really appreciate it!!
I have another illustration in the works right now.
No problem! I'm far from a great artist, but I love to soak up art theory like a mofo. I'm just glad I was able to provide constructive feedback.
I remember someone posted a site that let you test how good your monitor's color was by arranging color swatches along a gradient. And while it's not a substitute for the real thing, there are sites that will help you calibrate your monitor- not perfect, but better than no calibration whatsoever. I'll see if I can find a link to that test.
I remember someone posted a site that let you test how good your monitor's color was by arranging color swatches along a gradient. And while it's not a substitute for the real thing, there are sites that will help you calibrate your monitor- not perfect, but better than no calibration whatsoever. I'll see if I can find a link to that test.
oh damn!! i saw this piece on reddit a few months back. i didn't realize the artist had an FA account or i would have empathized more! they were pretty hard on it. i hope you got some good advice. from a technical standpoint the piece is amazing, so much detail and variety in the piece!
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