A very touching and powerful story with a nice progression that makes me want to read every word that comes next. Has its fair share of sweet, funny and sad moments that work well with the character and I could feel every muscle in my face move along with Diamond Dancer's mood in the story.

That's a pretty sad tale. At least she hasn't given up on all of her dreams, and I hope she can achieve them.

Two things though:
1. This story is riddled with typos. It was enough where it began to become distracting. I find it always helps to read over my stories once or twice before submitting them. You'd be surprised at how many typos you can find.

2. I realized partway through the story that you never actually tell us what Diamond looks like. I can guess she is a pegasus by bloodline. The only thing you mention is that her eyes are multi-colored. Other then that I don't know her mane or coat color. I also don't know her cutie mark.

updated slightly for you all may work on part two at some point.