Among the most interesting facets of the story is the fact that you wrote it in the present tense. And you used it correctly, sticking to the formula throughout (unlike many other stories I read online, where the writer will erroneously flip flop back and forth between writing in present tense and writing in past tense, seemingly unaware of the difference). Present tense isn't all that easy to utilize effectively (which is why I generally steer clear of it when writing prose), but when done well (such as in this story), it does have its inherent benefits, like bringing about an added layer of suspense. We're right there with Sasha every step of the way, from his plotting to steal the potion from Yiharbin's storeroom to him actually putting his stealthy ambitions into action. Throughout the theft, we're on edge, hoping he doesn't get caught by his former mentor who can appear at any moment (reading this, I was under the impression that Sasha was Yiharbin's potion brewing apprentice or something, before he got banished for incessantly asking his master for the love potion. Or was he just an employee at the store? Or was he merely a customer?).

Such a sad fate that even after he succeeded in acquiring the potion, he didn't know how to use it. I wonder if he resorted to seeking Lady Archea's help, and, if he did, did she lay eggs inside him? Poor fellow. He just wants to be loved. And to have sex. Is that too much for a guy to ask for!?