
Tai: *in shock until dumbbell hits foot* Dude, train me!
Another epic pic done by the fabulous
Echin
Here we see Tai working out at the gym. The young feline, between his workouts and moonlighting superheroing, has given him quite the build. But looking around, seeing even more massive beasts around him, has lite a desire to become even bigger. But he had no idea how to. Just then, a great shadow fell over the feline. Looking up, his eyes grew wide. Before him stood what could only be described as the blue and orange god of gyms. A great bear whose body had been sculpted over his eternal life. The feline had heard the legends, but never saw for himself. The legendary Maximus Ursus.
That moment passed as the bear continued on his way. It wasn't far though, as he seated himself on the same bench Tai occupied. The feline's heart leaped in his chest. His eyes locked on the bear, not daring to move nor breath. He looked over the bear's back, observing every ripple that decorated it. It was only by chance that his eyes glanced up and met with the blue eyes of Maximus. A sense of surprise and shame filled the feline. He was staring and didn't realize it. His first meeting with a legendary figure of history and he came off as some muscle obsessed pervert. Before he could turn away and leave in shame, Maximus gave him a playful, but warm smile. This threw Tai for a loop. After all, he had just been staring at the bear's backside for some time, he figured anyone would be creeped out by that. The thought was completely erased from Tai's mind with what Maximus did next. The bear shifted his body a little, allowing the feline to see his sculpted front. Max pumped his arm as if he too were doing dumbbell curls, causing his muscle to bulge and the veins to rise. The sight of the powerful bicep and tricep on the blue bear's arm caused the feline's fur to shoot up and his hand to let go of the dumbbell he had been holding. A dozen thoughts raced through his mind. Relief that Max did not to seem to mind his stares, surprise at the show of muscle, admiration for how hard Max must have had to work to develop such a body, and finally desire to be as large and strong himself. The falling dumbbell broke this as it struck Tai's foot. But instead of reacting in pain, it caused his to blurt out what was now on his mind.
"Please train me."
Picture done by
Echin
Maximus Ursus owned by
Maximus-Ursus
Tai owned by me
Another epic pic done by the fabulous

Here we see Tai working out at the gym. The young feline, between his workouts and moonlighting superheroing, has given him quite the build. But looking around, seeing even more massive beasts around him, has lite a desire to become even bigger. But he had no idea how to. Just then, a great shadow fell over the feline. Looking up, his eyes grew wide. Before him stood what could only be described as the blue and orange god of gyms. A great bear whose body had been sculpted over his eternal life. The feline had heard the legends, but never saw for himself. The legendary Maximus Ursus.
That moment passed as the bear continued on his way. It wasn't far though, as he seated himself on the same bench Tai occupied. The feline's heart leaped in his chest. His eyes locked on the bear, not daring to move nor breath. He looked over the bear's back, observing every ripple that decorated it. It was only by chance that his eyes glanced up and met with the blue eyes of Maximus. A sense of surprise and shame filled the feline. He was staring and didn't realize it. His first meeting with a legendary figure of history and he came off as some muscle obsessed pervert. Before he could turn away and leave in shame, Maximus gave him a playful, but warm smile. This threw Tai for a loop. After all, he had just been staring at the bear's backside for some time, he figured anyone would be creeped out by that. The thought was completely erased from Tai's mind with what Maximus did next. The bear shifted his body a little, allowing the feline to see his sculpted front. Max pumped his arm as if he too were doing dumbbell curls, causing his muscle to bulge and the veins to rise. The sight of the powerful bicep and tricep on the blue bear's arm caused the feline's fur to shoot up and his hand to let go of the dumbbell he had been holding. A dozen thoughts raced through his mind. Relief that Max did not to seem to mind his stares, surprise at the show of muscle, admiration for how hard Max must have had to work to develop such a body, and finally desire to be as large and strong himself. The falling dumbbell broke this as it struck Tai's foot. But instead of reacting in pain, it caused his to blurt out what was now on his mind.
"Please train me."
Picture done by

Maximus Ursus owned by

Tai owned by me
Category Artwork (Digital) / Muscle
Species Bear (Other)
Size 1280 x 896px
File Size 162 kB
Hmm...if I really had to look that close, I say that the following sentence which is After all, he had just been staring at the bear's backside for some time, he figured anyone would be creeped out by that. While there is nothing wrong in terms of grammar, I would have put the word "something" before "he figured" which would form the following sentence:
After all, he had just been staring at the bear's backside for some time, something he figured anyone would be creeped out by that. As you can see, it follows up with a a opinion/reaction-like effect.
For the rest, all seems good enough. Hard to find any errors here.
Note: ignore the two hidden comments, as its the same one as I'm posting right now. The former two comments ended with some errors of my own
After all, he had just been staring at the bear's backside for some time, something he figured anyone would be creeped out by that. As you can see, it follows up with a a opinion/reaction-like effect.
For the rest, all seems good enough. Hard to find any errors here.
Note: ignore the two hidden comments, as its the same one as I'm posting right now. The former two comments ended with some errors of my own
*chuckles* Train you? *putting an arm over your shoulder, then pulling you into my chest and giving you a playful headlock and pulling your cap over your eyes* I'll train you, buddy...but first we need to get you a pair of lifting gloves since you seem to have sweaty paws and can't keep a grip on your dumbbells!
* completely absorbed with joy from the headlock, the feel of the bear's arm and chest against him, Max's playful attitude, and the agreement. its only broken at Max's last words* Huh? Dumbbell? *looks down to see his dumbbell rolling away and a powerful pain in foot* um, sure! But, I think I need to go to a hospital first.
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