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WARNING: THIS STORY CONTAINS INFLATION, STRETCHING, SMOOSHING, SQUASHING, FLATTENING AND MUCH MUCH MORE RUBBERY DOUGHY NONSENSE
Alright. Once again, this seems a bit longer than it actually is cause of the way I format dialogue. Yes, it's a bit long, but I assure you, the climax it's building to in this one is worth the buildup.
Rarity is very fun to write. Italics, Italics everywhere.
Also, this story has a bit of squashing and stretching and flattening in it, for those of you who are into that sort of thing.
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Alright. Once again, this seems a bit longer than it actually is cause of the way I format dialogue. Yes, it's a bit long, but I assure you, the climax it's building to in this one is worth the buildup.
Rarity is very fun to write. Italics, Italics everywhere.
Also, this story has a bit of squashing and stretching and flattening in it, for those of you who are into that sort of thing.
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Category Story / Inflation
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File Size 133 kB
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It's impossible to express how much I love this chapter man!
I didn't expect anyone except AJ to inflate so that was an awesome little surprise.
And the writing in general is just great. I don't think I once felt that you we're writing for the charaters, it was all perfectly in character.
If the next chapter is anything like these last two (this one especially), I know I'll love it too.
I didn't expect anyone except AJ to inflate so that was an awesome little surprise.
And the writing in general is just great. I don't think I once felt that you we're writing for the charaters, it was all perfectly in character.
If the next chapter is anything like these last two (this one especially), I know I'll love it too.
These are really, really good in both structure and silly fun. This chapter caught my by surprise with how everypony inflated. I was surprised Rarity made no mention of herself becoming a blimp, but meh. Some part of me secretly hopes that the story ends with the whole town become blimps. :P I don't understand why you have these in your scraps, these are so good!
They're in my scraps gallery because I intended this to be one, long story that turned out to be too long and too hard to work on all at once so I'm dividing it into chapters for now. Although at the rate I'm going, it's going to be about the length of a novella when I'm done with it, so I'm thinking of moving it all to my main gallery when I finish the next chapter.
Let's not get ahead of ourselves here! I don't want to set deadlines for myself. Last time took a long time because RL became hectic and I didn't have much free time or privacy for about a week and a half. I just want to work on it when the mood strikes me right and make it good.
Oh I understand that. Take as long as you need, it's all good. (I know you don't need my permission to do that of course lol)
Btw, at the beginning of applejacks inflation I was under the impression that she was on her belly until the story mentioned that she was balanced on the small of her back. There didn't seem to be a clear indication of her position until a ways in. Not a big deal. Just a thought for future reference. Otherwise the story had no obvious issues that I could see, just unending awesome.
Btw, at the beginning of applejacks inflation I was under the impression that she was on her belly until the story mentioned that she was balanced on the small of her back. There didn't seem to be a clear indication of her position until a ways in. Not a big deal. Just a thought for future reference. Otherwise the story had no obvious issues that I could see, just unending awesome.
Said like that it's very clear, I'm just prone to forgetting in the heat of the moment and most of the time when a character inflates its not on their back, so I made a bad assumption. I would suggest being a little clearer in the future, but I don't know how many others are as dumb as I am and made a bad assumption.
Alright, I'll keep that in mind. I'm a really visual person, and I try to translate to my writing by keeping descriptions simple and phrasing things in a way that I hope will create a clear picture in my reader's heads. If I can get so worked up in a long sequence that I leave something out, then that's my bad. Thank you, I'll try and keep that in mind.
Despite the bevy of odd fetishes I have, melting isn't one of them, and I never think to put it in, nor do I ever think of ways to have it happen. One of the T.O.O.N. stories I have planned will feature melting though. Not, like, the focus, but it'll be prominent. Anyways, thanks!
Rainbow Dash is hard because it's hard to nail her character down correctly without her sounding too much like Applejack or too much like a jerk. And that's something I don't feel bad about because even the writers on the show have trouble with her.
Fluttershy is hard for me personally because for some reason I have trouble coming up with dialogue that sounds in-character for her.
Fluttershy is hard for me personally because for some reason I have trouble coming up with dialogue that sounds in-character for her.
How much time? Gosh, I don't know. Not much. The trickiest part is figuring out how each pony will interpret the hex, and also figuring out how to keep things fast-moving and cartooney in a day spa. It seemed natural that Rarity would think Applejack needed to relax while on her way to the spa.
Other than that, this chapter came together pretty easily. I just let my instinct take over and wasn't thinking too much about it. Originally, Rarity was gonna sing a song when she was picking out a robe for Applejack, which I'm really glad I cut because I don't want to wrote a whole nother song and there's really no point. Plus, if I'm remembering correctly, I think I added Lotus and Aloe singing the song of their ponies during the gauntlet sequence cause I felt like the pacing was off and there needed to be one more thing in there, and that was the most bizarre thing that came to mind.
Anyways, I hope that answered your question!
Other than that, this chapter came together pretty easily. I just let my instinct take over and wasn't thinking too much about it. Originally, Rarity was gonna sing a song when she was picking out a robe for Applejack, which I'm really glad I cut because I don't want to wrote a whole nother song and there's really no point. Plus, if I'm remembering correctly, I think I added Lotus and Aloe singing the song of their ponies during the gauntlet sequence cause I felt like the pacing was off and there needed to be one more thing in there, and that was the most bizarre thing that came to mind.
Anyways, I hope that answered your question!
Truly the most frustrating of curses! I have to say, in a lot of ways, this story really does feel like it could just be an episode of the show. Legitimately funny in quite a few places, and everyone acts in character as well. I really appreciate just how much thought must have gone into making everyone besides Applejack affected by the hex, while at the same time still being true to their characters. Rarity going nuts is always good for a giggle!
Were it not for all of the giant bloated butts, it really could be an episode... Not that I'm gonna complain about focusing on ballooned butts~
Were it not for all of the giant bloated butts, it really could be an episode... Not that I'm gonna complain about focusing on ballooned butts~
Thanks, and yeah, that's what I was going for! I don't see much point in writing fanfiction if you can't get the characters to act and sound in-character.
And yes, there can never be enough big, bloated balloon butts. There's no way in hell they'll ever feature any in an actual episode, but a man can dream.
And yes, there can never be enough big, bloated balloon butts. There's no way in hell they'll ever feature any in an actual episode, but a man can dream.
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