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Category Story / Human
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 8.2 kB
This is good. One suggestion:don't use numbers where you should be using words. It looks lazy. You've got a great writing style. Tense, frustrated, angry-in line with the way the character is feeling. I'd suggest using something like libreoffice and uploading it as a file rather than letting FA slaughter your paragraphs. It really throws off the rhythm.
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