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A story about an over confident, athletic rabbit who gets in touch with his cubby side after being pushed a bit too hard on the track. He also learns a stout lesson about messing with other people's things!
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Trivia facts:
Every character in this story is based off someone I know in real life.
I, also, hide stuff under the bottom drawer of my dresser. Honestly, nobody ever thinks to look there.
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Trivia facts:
Every character in this story is based off someone I know in real life.
I, also, hide stuff under the bottom drawer of my dresser. Honestly, nobody ever thinks to look there.
Category Story / Baby fur
Species Rabbit / Hare
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 71.3 kB
When I was reading it, I was interested in the story of the red pacifier however, it felt like it eventually lost its importance throughout the end of the story. It was a catalyst element but because you introduced it from the very beginning I was wondering how everything would tie back to it. When it hit to his room mate's collection, it broke my flow and felt a little left field for me!
I was actually imagining what the red pacifier would make him do to obtain such items. Perhaps maybe introduce the room mate's collection in some ways in the beginning? I couldn't help but thinking that the red paci might tie to the room mate! I would've loved to see how the red pacifier played its role!
Nonetheless it was an incredibly enjoyable read and the ending was a very nice touch, letting the viewer visualize the ending! One of the better stories I have read.
I was actually imagining what the red pacifier would make him do to obtain such items. Perhaps maybe introduce the room mate's collection in some ways in the beginning? I couldn't help but thinking that the red paci might tie to the room mate! I would've loved to see how the red pacifier played its role!
Nonetheless it was an incredibly enjoyable read and the ending was a very nice touch, letting the viewer visualize the ending! One of the better stories I have read.
Wow, that's great feedback. Thanks again. It might help to explain the sudden jump in the middle there if I said I wrote half of this story six months ago, then finished it last week. I'm an inspiration writer, and the frame of mind I was in back then is completely different from the one I'm in right now. Not that that justifies shoddy writing.
I am browsing through your stories and order it based on your topic descriptions to skip stories which I may not like.
It is a clever quite useful idea.
Finding myself start reading just the next story, this one here. Not even reached the 2nd page I had to interrupt the introduction to think about why your stories are so well written. I couldn’t even select something to quote, it’s just every single sentence. Reading it is like being there. I didn’t have anything to compare with.
I’m stunned, maybe because I didn’t read tales in past, spending my time only in specialist literature. Or maybe it’s the charm of the foreign language, or both of it. I just like it.
I guess I find my new passing to novels. Absolutely remarkable that this did happen by reading short stories of an independent talented writer instead by consuming well known bestsellers.
Thanks a lot for that!
It is a clever quite useful idea.
Finding myself start reading just the next story, this one here. Not even reached the 2nd page I had to interrupt the introduction to think about why your stories are so well written. I couldn’t even select something to quote, it’s just every single sentence. Reading it is like being there. I didn’t have anything to compare with.
I’m stunned, maybe because I didn’t read tales in past, spending my time only in specialist literature. Or maybe it’s the charm of the foreign language, or both of it. I just like it.
I guess I find my new passing to novels. Absolutely remarkable that this did happen by reading short stories of an independent talented writer instead by consuming well known bestsellers.
Thanks a lot for that!
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