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"When searching for the truth, remember that true friends will always be at your side"
- me :3
About time I put something new up. ;_; The holidays,work, school, and family drama have kept me pretty short on time. However, now that things have calmed down a little, I can hopefully get some things done.
This poem requires a little explaining. First off, it was one that was another request from my closest friend
blinque . She wanted something about inner termoil and finding out just who you are. So I took that core idea and ran with it. A few parts might seem a little jumbled or confusing even, but the overall view is that such termoil can be overcome with time and understanding, along with what personal truth can lead to. I really hope that you all enjoy it and I look forward to constructive criticism/critiques since it helps me to become a much better writer.
- me :3
About time I put something new up. ;_; The holidays,work, school, and family drama have kept me pretty short on time. However, now that things have calmed down a little, I can hopefully get some things done.
This poem requires a little explaining. First off, it was one that was another request from my closest friend
blinque . She wanted something about inner termoil and finding out just who you are. So I took that core idea and ran with it. A few parts might seem a little jumbled or confusing even, but the overall view is that such termoil can be overcome with time and understanding, along with what personal truth can lead to. I really hope that you all enjoy it and I look forward to constructive criticism/critiques since it helps me to become a much better writer.
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Let me just say that I believe your poem is excellent, albeit a bit deep and i needed to read it a few times to get most of it. Only major issue i had was rhyme scheme, but thats me, i see aabb and abab rhyme scheme too often. That said, I need to find my true self so I can live in a euphoric paradise, and be happy with what I achieve.
Why thank you ^^ It's good to see that at least one person commented. I unfortunatly haven't put a lot up in the past year since I'm often too busy with work, school, etc. and haven't really gotten too many watchers from it all. But as I said, I'm glad that you enjoyed it and the aabb pattern is just something I use a lot when my friends request things from me. I used to do nothing but freeverse a long time ago until a friend of mine got me hooked on actually using a rhyme scheme. I really prefer freeverse though, since it gives me the ability to use my full creativity and doesn't limit me to a word bank. Is there some other scheme you'd like to see in my work? And I'd also like to know what you'd think about me writing some short stories and whatever else you'd like to see from me.
I wouldn't mind reading some short stories, and as far as me telling you what to write, I refuse to go there. I feel true art comes naturally, if I think of something I might make a suggestion, but for now I'm fine reading whatever you come up with. I'm working on a short story myself about two demons named Krioga and Kougar, who heartlessly destroy villages in order to gain world domination, or so they hope. I none the less look forward to seeing more of your work.
Wow *blushes* I really haven't gotten any new favorites or watches in forever! Thank you, I'm really glad that you like it. Tis a bit old though, I'm going to have to post up some new stuff soon. I actually have a story in the works. I really appreciate your comment, it makes me feel like I've got some ounce of talent in me x3
Well, it's been a long time since I've read good poetry so bonus points for both of us!
I've been reading your other ones this morning even though I have like 5406 sumbissions to filter through since AC, lol! so yeah you've got talent, don't let anyone tell you differently!
I've been reading your other ones this morning even though I have like 5406 sumbissions to filter through since AC, lol! so yeah you've got talent, don't let anyone tell you differently!
Just exactly how did I miss this poem?
I usually roll my eyes at stanzas of paired couplets because they more often than not are having to stretch in order to find words that rhyme. This one doesn't do that and I can see instances of "that sounds close" instead of it being exact. Good work Suka!
I usually roll my eyes at stanzas of paired couplets because they more often than not are having to stretch in order to find words that rhyme. This one doesn't do that and I can see instances of "that sounds close" instead of it being exact. Good work Suka!
Hey thanks, I really appreciate the positive comments. I really just try the best I can to put wat emotions I feel/sense into what I'm writing and I tried especially hard on this one since it was for one of my closest friends. o.O It's kinda funny that I've had it up for months and just now it's getting noticed. I've acquired a few new watchers and favorites over this one too. x3 I really eed to get my tail in gear and get more things out for people to read. I actually started a new one that will be exclusivly previewed by three people before it's posted, but I'm not telling those people who they are just yet o.o
Thank you muchly. very rarely does anyone comment on my work, especially since it is my old work and not my newer stuff and I have so few works up here. I actually need to get off my tail and get a story or two written up, I just can't get motivated D:
I like to pour as much emotion and intuition as I can into a piece. That's why I took requests because then I could not only focus on a theme, I could focus on a deadline of two weeks tops.
Any idea how to get motivated and destroy writers block?
I like to pour as much emotion and intuition as I can into a piece. That's why I took requests because then I could not only focus on a theme, I could focus on a deadline of two weeks tops.
Any idea how to get motivated and destroy writers block?
I'm afraid I don't have anything clever in my repertoire, I just try to write a little every day. If I get absolutely stuck on a story, I just work on another one, and usually by the time I finish that one, I'll have come up with ideas for the first one. This isn't perfect, since there are stories that just end up abandoned, but I make it a point to try to go back to them.
Maybe I'm not the best writer to be giving advice, either; at the moment I'm prevented from working on my stories since my computer is in the shop. :P
I agree though, that putting as much emotion into a story as possible is always a good way to go, I like to think of my stories as more meaningful than the red borders would indicate.
Maybe I'm not the best writer to be giving advice, either; at the moment I'm prevented from working on my stories since my computer is in the shop. :P
I agree though, that putting as much emotion into a story as possible is always a good way to go, I like to think of my stories as more meaningful than the red borders would indicate.
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