Just a couple of notes. Nice use of the bluesy style, I've always liked it myself. Point #one (and do correct me if I'm wrong) I can't tell you how you feel. Point #2 What's your love doing in a hole, brush it off and dig it out. Point #3 I'm completely lost otherwise and frogotz my map. Other than that, nice. Just work on your flow of thoughts, it throws me off a bit. Unless I'm not getting something again. Take a good look at your writings and make sure they make sense to yourself, if they do, then I guarantee it'll at least hit home with someone, if not it needs more clarity. :end note:

okay thank you i think this was one i did really fast and didn't take time w/ so thatz why some of it is a bit of nonsense and it doesn't make a good flow but my others are better infact i wrote more today I'll b posting up