I guess the whole world will know the answer to that question in a few days time.....

Whether he's a zero or a hero? Possibly.

I suppose we could push the outcome, but don't want to let out the spoilers... Just relax and let it go on its own...

You were right, the story was dark. However, despite it's good qualities, those being the nicely done vore and a well written battle when compared to everything else I've read, it is lacking in many areas.

The use of entirely capitalized words is a massive fault, and it begins quite early in the story. These should be changed it italics, as the caps-locked words are typically reserved for depicting big signs that say [=b]KEEP OUT[/b] and the like. Also, you made a typo; "His eyes lit up, sparkling like [=i]stares[/i]...". There is a gender issue later on, where you say "she gripped his cheeks in [=i]his[/i] wing...". "A putrid stench struck assaulted his sense of smell..." is a very unusually worded piece. I suggest removing "struck" from the sentence altogether. you also wrote "smacking her licks," and I'm not sure if this was intentional or you meant [=i]lips[/i]. Your title is fairly bland, and it doesn't do much to catch a potential reader's eyes as some of your other titles. Another thing, the plotline is horrifically cliché in Vore based stories. A more interesting idea would have been to have Keldeo be victorious, which is quite underused in the vore literature department.

This story seems rushed to me, or perhaps written while tired. It is still quite enjoyable, but the various errors catch people's eyes. Despite this, I really enjoyed reading it.

This is what I do in 20 minutes free time after a long day at work.

Understandable. Sounds like you were rushed and tired, so I guess I was right there. What should I read next? <3

Hm, Origin of Nightmares.

yayyyy first noivern vore story thanks^^

could see virizion as desert

My heart-

Hrm?

What don't you get?

You just said “My heart”. I was asking for more clarification.

I have a very strong affection for Keldeo, so it shouldn't be hard to guess how I felt at the ending. Thus my comment.

*shrug*. Alright, but your comment wasn’t clear. No need to be so rude over a simple request for clarification.

I wasn't trying to be rude. Apologies if I came off that way.