It's a bit late for me but I got halfway through, and I have to say I love the details you put into the story. Particularly Lynx's aspect being preserved. Can't wait to finish this but I think other Chrono Cross fans are gonna be pleased with this one. I know I am. :)

Thanks a lot! Hope you like it when finished too, and I look forward to your thoughts and everyone else's.

I have every intention of showing off some of those details, and his aspect, in some upcoming pics! ^_^

I finished reading it.. and wow. You really have a talent for writing.
I haven't played the game in so long that I don't know how canonical it all is, but I loved the way the characters were written.
Its really inspired me to play through it again, fit everything up against the story.

I loved Lynx's scene with Riddell. The subtle undertones of their exchange were described vividly and evocatively.
Wazuki and Serge encountering Fate was a surprise to me, but a welcome one. A fitting one. I don't even remember if the game let you or not.. but if it had/did, it would've been awesome to see what you portrayed.
Ultimately.. the decision the princess made for Wazuki.. It was a delicate situation and I thought you handled it brilliantly.
And the last scene.. I really adored that part. I don't know if I could've stood another knife in Wazuki's heart. Thanks for the warm happy ending.

Absolutely loved this. Might even note you about some of the points in the story if i get around to finishing chrono cross :).

*blushes* Thanks!

Well I tried to be as canonical as I could. A few bits were either new additions or my own interpretations of characters and events, but in most cases I was remaining true to the events of the game and what we know to be true courtesy of Kato. In many cases the characters were left flat and unexplored, or we were only given the bare bones, so I could add whatever I felt like so long as it didn't contradict canon, and apart from how I changed things for Wazuki I think I was true to the game and in most cases deepened or better explained events and motivations.

As you can tell I loved the scene with Riddel too, seeing as it's the longest memory I included other than the critically important orphanage scene, the stabbing of Kid, and the drowning of Serge. Partly this is because I was inspired by other fanfics I read which showed scenes between him and Riddel (I did shout-outs to them in fact--one involved a similar temptation/seduction by the balcony pool, the other culminated with Riddel confronting Lynx in the secret room for a brief but awesome elemental battle). But mostly it was because I too wondered what might have happened in the manor while he was there, particularly since she described him as beastly, suggesting she had a particular reason for doing so, and because it was a nice tightrope to walk, being seductive without going too far and figuring out how to justify it based on what we knew of Lynx and Fate.

I guess you didn't see the pic I got of them confronting Fate, called Time's Arrow? Look back a bit in my gallery. But no, it couldn't happen in the game, at the fort Dark Serge just flew away after you defeated him, and then at Chronopolis he confronted you and turned into Fate. I agree it would have been awesome to see my scene, though the pic I just mentioned does show us some of it. ^_^

I loved getting to write Schala since she is a compelling character. But I think the decision made was the right one, obviously. And of course I was going to give Wazuki a happy ending, after allowing him to live and get his memories and self back, I'd hardly do anything else. :P Not to mention I loved Marge and had fun writing her too.

Thanks again, I look forward to those notes!

Time to see what others think, ne? :3

Not much so far it seems, but that is par for the course with written works on FA. Hopefully other Cross/Lynx fans will show up eventually.

So, any more detailed thoughts from you? ^_^

We should fix that. ;3

At the moment, no. X3

Indeed we should!

Sorry if I seem pushy...it's just while you said you liked it, you didn't say much more than that. And since you are such an intellligent and well-spoken fellow, I like knowing what you think. :)

It's okay. Well when I like something, I usually mean it for a good number of reason. For example, conciseness of the various important scenes you established instead of just rehashing the entire plot is an excellent use of the game's material. Second up, capturing Lynx's personality in a way that makes him even more interesting as a character without over-glorifying any aspect of him (like I've seen some fools do to established characters in other fan fiction; i.e., focus on Sephiroth's "good looks" way too often).

*reasons

*chuckles* I see what you mean; I did something similar with Tai Lung, capturing his personality and acknowledging his good points without pretending he had no bad ones or over-glorifying him. (He did end up doing amazing things in my story, but only after he changed and made up for the bad he'd done, and others were awesome as well.)

I assume you meant when he was evil, though, since while I did (I hope) capture Wazuki's personality, there wasn't any glorifying of him--on the contrary he was constantly down on himself for what he had been made to do. Or did you mean Wazuki was made interesting too?

Both actually. It's not like we got that much info about Wazuki from the game in the first place.

True enough. Then I stand by what I said, that there really couldn't have been any over-glorifying of Wazuki anyway, since we know so little about him and saying he was a great dad doesn't count as that. :P

Indeed. Considering he was willing to endure hell for his son, that speaks volumes about his role as a parent. :)

And it makes me even more angry at Fate for perverting that the way she did. >_<

Indeed. I do pity that machine, but only so much as I could rip her transistors out.

Ah that boss fight is sooooo cathartic.

Indeed. =3