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This is a pilot of an idea that has been fermenting in my mind for the past month or so.
If people like it I will continue to write it. If people hate it.. I may continue all the same.
Please comment on what you think was done well and what wasn't.
If people like it I will continue to write it. If people hate it.. I may continue all the same.
Please comment on what you think was done well and what wasn't.
Category Story / All
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 8.2 kB
Wow... Out of such a short pilot, you can still pull out a lot. The narrator seems to dwell for a very long time in the virtual reality space; things in his home are strewn about, all in disrepair. It seems to consume his life. I'd like to see if this becomes a conflict later in the story-- balancing the virtual world with the real world. Really cool! Please keep writing!
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