Kaitreena Gjeorgje the Piratess; the Eighth Question
This is a story i began but never finished, ...yet. No one has made any comments on it in all the places i've uploaded it. It is really very tame in comparison to my artworks, but it does offer inuendo and suggestion but nothing graphic except alot of action.
This is the first chapter of the novel, it is in three 'parts' beginning with the Eighth Question. There are nine chapters in the first part.
The Royants in this story are akin to trolls, though they are not called that, and there are a few humans as well. Most of the seven main characters are not human, only four of them are furries, two are winged races and the last is a kind of Human but not. well here goes, this is as per Jekket's request. The first eight chapters introduce each of the main characters.
This is the first chapter of the novel, it is in three 'parts' beginning with the Eighth Question. There are nine chapters in the first part.
The Royants in this story are akin to trolls, though they are not called that, and there are a few humans as well. Most of the seven main characters are not human, only four of them are furries, two are winged races and the last is a kind of Human but not. well here goes, this is as per Jekket's request. The first eight chapters introduce each of the main characters.
Category Story / General Furry Art
Species Wolf
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 28 kB
The starting lines of the story were very good, you seem to have a knack for the vivid. Your description of the main female, the one who is rescuing the slaves is intricate. I couldn't help but feel that perhaps it could have been simplified. I did find a minor puncuation mistake but it seemed to be the only one I could find. It was found in the part where the main female is having second thoughts about what she was doing.
I assume that when this story continues tha the mystery hand that brought her out of the ship will be revealed. I look forward to see this continued on, it has a lot of promise.
I assume that when this story continues tha the mystery hand that brought her out of the ship will be revealed. I look forward to see this continued on, it has a lot of promise.
it has another six main characters and 17 finished chapters you are the first. thankyou, it HAS more already. i was going to full length it into a novel but without someone reading me i have no idea if i am getting across what i want. my style of writting i don't know who i am like, as a for instance i really love so many. So i don't know if i should be less descriptive. i wonder if it would flow better if i loosened the sentences up with more atmosphere so that the reader could more slowly get to know the main character, ie longer...? as a for instance.
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