Crickets chirped lightly in the sparsely populated parking lot. The neon lights of the casino were all dark, leaving the building as a dark sillohuette against the night sky. The lights in the parking lot were on and illuminated the area well though as through the rows drove a black car towards the only structure in the lot. The security booth had the brightest lights of any in the parking lot and the car drove right up to it before stopping. The bull male in the booth turned his eyes to the car and snorted quickly at the sight of the male wolfox in the driver’s seat. “We’re closed tonight. Sorry. Come back tomorrow.” he said gruffly before turning back to his newspaper. “Oh but I was hoping to “Put a collar on Lady Luck” tonight. My name is Sly.” said the male with a tip of his fedora and a smirk in response. The bull looked back at the male surprised before turning his attention to the figure in the passenger’s seat. A beautiful cream colored female cat sat there, her long dark brown hair draped over her right shoulder, a green collar around her neck adorned with a tag shaped like a four leaf clover. “I’ll admit. I didn’t have you pegged as someone who would be attending tonight’s special event. Go on in. Good luck tonight.” said the bovine finding Sly’s name on his small list before handing a parking slip to him. “Much obliged.” replied Sly as he drove off, finding a parking spot and turning the engine off.
“Put a Collar on Lady Luck?” asked Luck sitting in the passenger seat slightly amused. “What can I say? It was the passphrase for the evening. Though we both know I’ve done that already haven’t I Kitten?” he asked as he cupped her chin with his index finger and thumb. Luck smiled a little shyly as she nodded into his hand. “Yes you did. So where are we anyway?” she asked. “This is a special event hosted by the Collar Club. You’ve often talked about your namesake and how you hadn’t really gotten a chance to gamble since I adopted you, so seeing as it’s your birthday today I figured I would give you the chance to have a little fun.” replied the male handing Luck the flier and two hundred dollars. “Really? You’re not messing with me are you Sly?...Master?” she asked excitedly. “No tricks. You’ve probably noticed that my pranks on you have died down a lot since I collared you. I don’t want to give you any reason to not trust me as your Master. This night is about you having fun and enjoying yourself.” he said with a smile. Luck could hardly contain herself as she gave the male a kiss on the cheek. “Thank you Master.” she said happily. “You’re welcome Kitten. Lets go.” he said as he unlocked the doors of the car. They stepped out of the car simultaneously. Sly wore a three piece black suit with a white shirt and light blue tie. Luck wore an elegant green dress with gloves that went up to her elbows that matched the clover in her collar tag. They were a sight to behold as they made their way to the casino entrance.
Going inside the seemingly vacant building, past a pair of security guards in suits who briefly checked a bar code on the wolfox’s phone before waving him and his guest inside. Once they had gotten beyond the two oak doors Luck's jaw dropped at what she saw. Seeing several rows of slot machines that were showing specialized graphics on their screens of different sex toys. Somehow she knew that if this was what she saw as she entered the casino that she was in for a night to remember. “So, what's your game tonight?” asked Sly. “Well I don’t see it yet. But I want to try out the slots to warm up first.” replied the feline. “Very well. Lead the way Kitten.” replied the Male. Before they could move a familiar French accent tickled the pairs ears. “Good evening you two. I’m glad to see you could participate in our little function.” came the voice clearly to their right. They turned to see a familiar figure walking up amongst the slot machines. “Well good evening Jex. Nice to see you as well.” said Sly to the red dress sporting Skunkette. “Good luck tonight. Perhaps you may be lucky enough to take part in our special rates.” she offered. “Actually I’m not gambling tonight. But my Kitten here is. It’s her birthday and I wanted to show her a good time and let her cut loose.” he replied. “Ah I see. Well then she’ll need these. How much does she have to Gamble with?” asked Jex curiously. “Two hundred.” said Sly. “Ah. Here. Every one hundred won gets you one of these. You can use them whenever you wish.” said Jex handing the feline two black and red poker chips with a wink. Well have fun.” she said as she continued on, starting a conversation with another fur. Sly and Luck shook their heads amused as Jex’s infectious personality eased any awkwardness they had. It was time to let loose and have fun.
Time passes as the pair move through the casino. They stop at a few places, the slot machines, the craps and roulette tables, but nothing made Luck’s eyes widen like the sight of her favorite table. Sly smirked as the almost vacant look on the feline’s eyes told him all he needed to know. “I take it your game is blackjack then?” he asked, motioning to the row of tables at the back of the casino. Luck looked at him and nodded silently. Though she was trying to keep calm, her tail was almost undulating with excitement. Sly chuckled to himself lightly. He hadn’t seen her this excited before tonight. This was going to be interesting. He had been hanging back and letting Luck have her fun. She’d turned the two hundred dollars she’d started with into four hundred over time. Each time she’d won one hundred dollars she’d been handed another of those red and black chips. On the front of the chip was pictured a collar, and on the back, a leash. She had four now; and had been truly living up to her namesake. She didn’t win every hand naturally, but she won enough to know that her name wasn’t just for show. At least not tonight. The pair walked along the tables and came to a familiar face in the dealers place of the last table. “Oh, Monica dealing blackjack? That's a good sign.” Laughing she walked up to the felt covered table and took a seat opposite the petite rodent. “I take it the submissive thinks I’m a pushover? We’ll see. Will you be playing as well Sir?” asked Monica towards Sly. “No. Just my pet tonight.” said Sly calmly. “Very well. Let’s see how you do. Place your bet.” said the mousette as she moved her shoe into place. She pulled the first card from the dispenser and kept it face down on the table with a smirk that was returned in challenge by Luck as the feline placed a $20 chip on the table.
Monica met her bet and dealt the first card face down and then another face up, showing a seven of diamonds. Monica dealt her own cards then, showing a five of clubs. After taking a look at her face down card Luck knocked for another card. By the end of this hand she had been dealt five cards without going bust, automatically winning that hand. Her next hand went nearly as well getting to twenty in four cards and Monica going bust. Luck took the next hand with an ace and ten. She was up by eighty dollars now. Placing her next bet she made it a conservative one getting a pair of sixes. She split the hand with another twenty and got a seventeen on one hand and nineteen on the other. Monica had to hold on seventeen according to the house rules and so she had tied with Lucks lowest hand. They had both broken even. Now she had a fire in her eye. “Watch it Kitten. Don't let your pride get the better of you.” offered Sly. Grinning, the feline put down another twenty. “Don't worry, I've got her tell now.” she said confidently. Luck was bluffing, she didn't have any idea how to read Monica when she was dealing but she wanted to shake the mouse up a bit. It seemed to be working too as she hesitated before dealing Luck her two cards. After winning that hand by the dealer going bust she had Monica shaken and another red and black chip in hand.
“Jex gave us a couple of these chips when we came in based on how much Luck had to start with, and she’s won a few more since then. What are they for?” asked Sly curiously. “You didn’t read the back of the flier? These are Collar Club Chips. They are awarded every hundred dollars won at a single table and can be used to make special bets with your dealer.” said Monica as she shuffled the cards and placed them back in the shoe. Sly looked at the back of the flier. Sure enough at the bottom was the detailed list of uses. One chip wagered and won with would win a hand job/fingering, two a tit/footjob, three oral, four would net you two hours with your chosen dealer, and five; being the max bet would win a night with the dealer of choice. This was of course a bet and would have to be won, but lose the hand and you lose your chips. He showed the list to Luck and she returned an interested smirk; earning a confused look from the male. “Straightforward rules. So if I bet all five of my chips and win the next hand, Sly would win you for the night?” asked Luck, making sure she understood. “Yes and no. There are a couple rules in the fine print at the bottom. Doms are limited to one sub apiece this night. “Because Sly has you with him tonight, that bet isn’t eligible to be made.” explained Monica. “What if I made the bet for myself?” asked Luck with a gleam in her eye. “Subs aren’t allowed to take other subs. Only a Dom is able to make that bet. If you’d like to bet, then only the first three options are available.” replied Monica, her eyes closed matter-of-factly. “Is that so? Well I may be wearing a collar, but I’ll have you know that I am not submissive to anyone but him. In fact I have a bit of a dominant streak myself. So I have a new proposal for you.” said Luck removing her collar suddenly and laying it on the table. "How about we settle this little rivalry we’ve had since I sat down. One last bet; betting all five of my Collar Club Chips. If I win, you are my sub for the evening. If you win, I will be submissive to not only my Master, but to you as well tonight.” said Luck seriously. Sly raised an eyebrow at this new turn of events. “What are you doing Kitten?” he asked. “Don’t worry Master. I’m doing this for you. You’ve given me a wonderful birthday present, and I want to use my luck to show you a good time in return. That is if it’s okay with you.” she said with a smile. Sly closed his eyes. He knew that her mind was made up. “It’s alright with me. Monica. Are the terms of the bet acceptable?” he asked. “Well it’s bending the rules a bit. They weren’t made with switches in mind. But I suppose it’s fine by me. You’ve got a bet kitty.” said Monica removing her red collar and placing it on the table on top of Luck’s green collar before collecting the feline’s chips. “One more hand. All or nothing for both of us.” said Monica, equally fired up.
I want to thank
fc32 for helping me get this story started. I had trouble starting it, and after passing it back and forth a bit we were able to come up with this. I hope you enjoy it, and the subsequent parts to be posted tonight as well.
Art and Monica belong to:
fc32
Luck Originally Designed by:
mingchee and Adopted by me.
Sly is mine.
“Put a Collar on Lady Luck?” asked Luck sitting in the passenger seat slightly amused. “What can I say? It was the passphrase for the evening. Though we both know I’ve done that already haven’t I Kitten?” he asked as he cupped her chin with his index finger and thumb. Luck smiled a little shyly as she nodded into his hand. “Yes you did. So where are we anyway?” she asked. “This is a special event hosted by the Collar Club. You’ve often talked about your namesake and how you hadn’t really gotten a chance to gamble since I adopted you, so seeing as it’s your birthday today I figured I would give you the chance to have a little fun.” replied the male handing Luck the flier and two hundred dollars. “Really? You’re not messing with me are you Sly?...Master?” she asked excitedly. “No tricks. You’ve probably noticed that my pranks on you have died down a lot since I collared you. I don’t want to give you any reason to not trust me as your Master. This night is about you having fun and enjoying yourself.” he said with a smile. Luck could hardly contain herself as she gave the male a kiss on the cheek. “Thank you Master.” she said happily. “You’re welcome Kitten. Lets go.” he said as he unlocked the doors of the car. They stepped out of the car simultaneously. Sly wore a three piece black suit with a white shirt and light blue tie. Luck wore an elegant green dress with gloves that went up to her elbows that matched the clover in her collar tag. They were a sight to behold as they made their way to the casino entrance.
Going inside the seemingly vacant building, past a pair of security guards in suits who briefly checked a bar code on the wolfox’s phone before waving him and his guest inside. Once they had gotten beyond the two oak doors Luck's jaw dropped at what she saw. Seeing several rows of slot machines that were showing specialized graphics on their screens of different sex toys. Somehow she knew that if this was what she saw as she entered the casino that she was in for a night to remember. “So, what's your game tonight?” asked Sly. “Well I don’t see it yet. But I want to try out the slots to warm up first.” replied the feline. “Very well. Lead the way Kitten.” replied the Male. Before they could move a familiar French accent tickled the pairs ears. “Good evening you two. I’m glad to see you could participate in our little function.” came the voice clearly to their right. They turned to see a familiar figure walking up amongst the slot machines. “Well good evening Jex. Nice to see you as well.” said Sly to the red dress sporting Skunkette. “Good luck tonight. Perhaps you may be lucky enough to take part in our special rates.” she offered. “Actually I’m not gambling tonight. But my Kitten here is. It’s her birthday and I wanted to show her a good time and let her cut loose.” he replied. “Ah I see. Well then she’ll need these. How much does she have to Gamble with?” asked Jex curiously. “Two hundred.” said Sly. “Ah. Here. Every one hundred won gets you one of these. You can use them whenever you wish.” said Jex handing the feline two black and red poker chips with a wink. Well have fun.” she said as she continued on, starting a conversation with another fur. Sly and Luck shook their heads amused as Jex’s infectious personality eased any awkwardness they had. It was time to let loose and have fun.
Time passes as the pair move through the casino. They stop at a few places, the slot machines, the craps and roulette tables, but nothing made Luck’s eyes widen like the sight of her favorite table. Sly smirked as the almost vacant look on the feline’s eyes told him all he needed to know. “I take it your game is blackjack then?” he asked, motioning to the row of tables at the back of the casino. Luck looked at him and nodded silently. Though she was trying to keep calm, her tail was almost undulating with excitement. Sly chuckled to himself lightly. He hadn’t seen her this excited before tonight. This was going to be interesting. He had been hanging back and letting Luck have her fun. She’d turned the two hundred dollars she’d started with into four hundred over time. Each time she’d won one hundred dollars she’d been handed another of those red and black chips. On the front of the chip was pictured a collar, and on the back, a leash. She had four now; and had been truly living up to her namesake. She didn’t win every hand naturally, but she won enough to know that her name wasn’t just for show. At least not tonight. The pair walked along the tables and came to a familiar face in the dealers place of the last table. “Oh, Monica dealing blackjack? That's a good sign.” Laughing she walked up to the felt covered table and took a seat opposite the petite rodent. “I take it the submissive thinks I’m a pushover? We’ll see. Will you be playing as well Sir?” asked Monica towards Sly. “No. Just my pet tonight.” said Sly calmly. “Very well. Let’s see how you do. Place your bet.” said the mousette as she moved her shoe into place. She pulled the first card from the dispenser and kept it face down on the table with a smirk that was returned in challenge by Luck as the feline placed a $20 chip on the table.
Monica met her bet and dealt the first card face down and then another face up, showing a seven of diamonds. Monica dealt her own cards then, showing a five of clubs. After taking a look at her face down card Luck knocked for another card. By the end of this hand she had been dealt five cards without going bust, automatically winning that hand. Her next hand went nearly as well getting to twenty in four cards and Monica going bust. Luck took the next hand with an ace and ten. She was up by eighty dollars now. Placing her next bet she made it a conservative one getting a pair of sixes. She split the hand with another twenty and got a seventeen on one hand and nineteen on the other. Monica had to hold on seventeen according to the house rules and so she had tied with Lucks lowest hand. They had both broken even. Now she had a fire in her eye. “Watch it Kitten. Don't let your pride get the better of you.” offered Sly. Grinning, the feline put down another twenty. “Don't worry, I've got her tell now.” she said confidently. Luck was bluffing, she didn't have any idea how to read Monica when she was dealing but she wanted to shake the mouse up a bit. It seemed to be working too as she hesitated before dealing Luck her two cards. After winning that hand by the dealer going bust she had Monica shaken and another red and black chip in hand.
“Jex gave us a couple of these chips when we came in based on how much Luck had to start with, and she’s won a few more since then. What are they for?” asked Sly curiously. “You didn’t read the back of the flier? These are Collar Club Chips. They are awarded every hundred dollars won at a single table and can be used to make special bets with your dealer.” said Monica as she shuffled the cards and placed them back in the shoe. Sly looked at the back of the flier. Sure enough at the bottom was the detailed list of uses. One chip wagered and won with would win a hand job/fingering, two a tit/footjob, three oral, four would net you two hours with your chosen dealer, and five; being the max bet would win a night with the dealer of choice. This was of course a bet and would have to be won, but lose the hand and you lose your chips. He showed the list to Luck and she returned an interested smirk; earning a confused look from the male. “Straightforward rules. So if I bet all five of my chips and win the next hand, Sly would win you for the night?” asked Luck, making sure she understood. “Yes and no. There are a couple rules in the fine print at the bottom. Doms are limited to one sub apiece this night. “Because Sly has you with him tonight, that bet isn’t eligible to be made.” explained Monica. “What if I made the bet for myself?” asked Luck with a gleam in her eye. “Subs aren’t allowed to take other subs. Only a Dom is able to make that bet. If you’d like to bet, then only the first three options are available.” replied Monica, her eyes closed matter-of-factly. “Is that so? Well I may be wearing a collar, but I’ll have you know that I am not submissive to anyone but him. In fact I have a bit of a dominant streak myself. So I have a new proposal for you.” said Luck removing her collar suddenly and laying it on the table. "How about we settle this little rivalry we’ve had since I sat down. One last bet; betting all five of my Collar Club Chips. If I win, you are my sub for the evening. If you win, I will be submissive to not only my Master, but to you as well tonight.” said Luck seriously. Sly raised an eyebrow at this new turn of events. “What are you doing Kitten?” he asked. “Don’t worry Master. I’m doing this for you. You’ve given me a wonderful birthday present, and I want to use my luck to show you a good time in return. That is if it’s okay with you.” she said with a smile. Sly closed his eyes. He knew that her mind was made up. “It’s alright with me. Monica. Are the terms of the bet acceptable?” he asked. “Well it’s bending the rules a bit. They weren’t made with switches in mind. But I suppose it’s fine by me. You’ve got a bet kitty.” said Monica removing her red collar and placing it on the table on top of Luck’s green collar before collecting the feline’s chips. “One more hand. All or nothing for both of us.” said Monica, equally fired up.
I want to thank
fc32 for helping me get this story started. I had trouble starting it, and after passing it back and forth a bit we were able to come up with this. I hope you enjoy it, and the subsequent parts to be posted tonight as well.Art and Monica belong to:
fc32Luck Originally Designed by:
mingchee and Adopted by me.Sly is mine.
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Your beginning definitely feels rough, which continues into the remainder of the story.
If you don't mind me saying.
You seem to have a very good ground but I feel as though you aren't doing enough drafts to flush out the rough patches of your story. I suffer from similar issues so I am not perfect.
For instance the way you introduce the slot machines having sexual toys on it feels like an abrupt detail that breaks the flow of the story. In general you seem to break flow a lot with abrupt details. Useful details but it could afford to be flushed out a little more.
Now for the good stuff.
You have an interesting idea, and your grounding is definitely worth a read, the other things you do well is make the characters interesting. I probably would have read some more of the story if it wasn't for the small bits of rough patches that kind of felt rushed. Sometimes it is okay to cut details but if you will add them try to make it a little more fluid like...
'as she passed the machine her eyes caught the image of a dildo flashing across the slot machine, on others there was plugs, and gags. At that moment Luck began to wonder, a sense of uncertainty building within her and growing stronger"
something like that. I hope I have been helpful and not come off like a jerk.
If you don't mind me saying.
You seem to have a very good ground but I feel as though you aren't doing enough drafts to flush out the rough patches of your story. I suffer from similar issues so I am not perfect.
For instance the way you introduce the slot machines having sexual toys on it feels like an abrupt detail that breaks the flow of the story. In general you seem to break flow a lot with abrupt details. Useful details but it could afford to be flushed out a little more.
Now for the good stuff.
You have an interesting idea, and your grounding is definitely worth a read, the other things you do well is make the characters interesting. I probably would have read some more of the story if it wasn't for the small bits of rough patches that kind of felt rushed. Sometimes it is okay to cut details but if you will add them try to make it a little more fluid like...
'as she passed the machine her eyes caught the image of a dildo flashing across the slot machine, on others there was plugs, and gags. At that moment Luck began to wonder, a sense of uncertainty building within her and growing stronger"
something like that. I hope I have been helpful and not come off like a jerk.
If this were more than a rushed project I would take slight offense, but as this has been written in a rush within the past day to finish before tonight is over, I cannot defend myself on these rough patches. I hope you will try to read it even though the rough patches do exist. And thanks for the review.
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