Not bad for a first attempt. :3
Although to help you a bit more, if you notice the other image's lines, they seem a lot more smooth. The lines from the other image seem to have their seperate strokes. From what I noticed on your drawing, the fur strokes seem to be too rough and a little stiff compared to the flowy feel to the other one.
Just some things I thought I would point out :3 but this is really good for your first time nonetheless ^u^

Thank you a whole lot for the advice. i Will work on those lines when i do the line art. I think smoother lines will also partially come from experience and using a pad instead of a mouse :p But ill try my best with what i have. I'll practice on making relaxed and smooth strokes.

Ahhhh that's true. A mouse is way different than a pad lol and yesh, practice makes perfect :3 I look forward to seeing you improve