Okay, so I've just finished reading this, and as usual I enjoyed it. Since you seem eager to gain some genuine feedback, I will do my absolute best to provide it.

I want to start off by saying that you are very good at descriptive writing. It's no problem at all for me as the reader to visualize what is happening in the story at any given point, and it's a testament to your abilities just how lucid everything was in my mind during reading. Having said that, I must also admit that the beginning half of this story was a bit too much like an RP for my liking. It was descriptive, sure, but if focused more on those descriptions than on meaningful character development, and I found my attentiveness waning because of it.

Still, I am very glad I did not wander away from the story, because the instant the narrative focused more on the characters and their reactions to their situations and one another, I found myself keenly interested. Though I will admit that the story feels kind of....without direction at the moment. Now I'm not really saying that's so terrible, it's just that while I know where the story is likely to go at this point, I can't say I feel like there is a goal that is being worked towards. Maybe that's just me, though.

I hope none of my comments here have offended you. I have tried my best to provide you with a real response, instead of a generic comment. I even took freakin' notes, haha! xD At any rate, I'm looking forward to more of your writing, be it this story or another. You're just good at it. =3

*blushes* Well, I did want to try something a little different with this one, as far as the descriptions. Believe it or not, intricate environmental detail has always kind of been one of my weak points, so I wanted to try to expand on that a little bit, and might have gone too far.

As far as the direction, I think that's partly a consequence of the length of each part. In four to five pages, there can be a great deal of plot happenings with relatively little detail and introspection, or vice versa. That's not to say I couldn't make it longer, obviously, but I find this length tends to work for me and this particular story. I do have quite a few things in mind in terms of directions, though, such as the developing relationship between Kaze and Dylan, meeting the headmaster, starting classes, both mundane and Gift-related, and conflicts with other students.

I'm also not sure if I'm going to focus on part 5 of this story next, or something else that's been rolling around in my head. Time will tell, I suppose.

Noticed and fixed a small error near the end. I recently re-read part 2, in which Dylan clearly said the headmaster didn't tell him anything about Kaze's situation. Given that I didn't want Dylan to be a liar, a small tweak was made near the end.