I don't really care for hard vore, but that's just personal taste, overall I thought that it was very well written, very descriptive and the use of Latin made it seem very "Video Game Fantasy"- like, for lack of a better term, The only criticism I have is that the verb (almost) always goes at the end of the phrase/sentence in latin i.e "Pullus es." not "Es pullus."

again very well written story^_^

you're quite welcome^_^