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And that's the end. Fooray and P2 belong to their owners.
Category Artwork (Digital) / Comics
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 600 x 821px
File Size 188.2 kB
Very nice work! It takes a lot to do a full comic. Good to see people working on some cool comics on this site.
Crits:
1.) I like the color composition. The overall tone of the colors is harmonious throughout the entire comic.
2.) Nice, gritty, futuristic environment. Everything is high tech, but dirty, and yet people still try to dress nice.
3.) Cool development on the character interaction between the two female characters there. It helps portray how sad the main character is at the end when she kills the other.
4.) Sweet textures! They really make the backgrounds more interesting.
5.) Good flow. Nothing too sudden, and nothing too slow.
6.) Page 17 may have a problem. The masked guy holds out his right hand, then you see a shot of his LEFT hand raised up, and the very next frame you see his RIGHT arm raised.
7.) You use the word "shit" excessively.
8.) What war?
9.) I know those two dudes at the end are other Void guys, and I know they have their own uniform, but do they have to wear their street fighter clothes everywhere? Even to visit a friend in the hospital? Maybe give them more casual wear for certain scenes, and save the fight clothes for fight scenes? In the end, that's your call. Just felt it clashed with the rest of the comic.
Overall, awesome work!
Crits:
1.) I like the color composition. The overall tone of the colors is harmonious throughout the entire comic.
2.) Nice, gritty, futuristic environment. Everything is high tech, but dirty, and yet people still try to dress nice.
3.) Cool development on the character interaction between the two female characters there. It helps portray how sad the main character is at the end when she kills the other.
4.) Sweet textures! They really make the backgrounds more interesting.
5.) Good flow. Nothing too sudden, and nothing too slow.
6.) Page 17 may have a problem. The masked guy holds out his right hand, then you see a shot of his LEFT hand raised up, and the very next frame you see his RIGHT arm raised.
7.) You use the word "shit" excessively.
8.) What war?
9.) I know those two dudes at the end are other Void guys, and I know they have their own uniform, but do they have to wear their street fighter clothes everywhere? Even to visit a friend in the hospital? Maybe give them more casual wear for certain scenes, and save the fight clothes for fight scenes? In the end, that's your call. Just felt it clashed with the rest of the comic.
Overall, awesome work!
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